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| "Random...." Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Drof Tceferp [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 19:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
^^ Work on the paragraphs, 'kay? Please?!! ^^ And the verb-tense thing. Okay? ^^ I'll beta it, if you want, but PLEASE make new paragraphs when someone new speaks!! IT IS A RULE OF GRAMMAR!! Er, sorry. Oh, I added a new chappie to What I Really Feel, go R&R if you don't mind shounen-ainess. ^^0 Yeah. It's Bakura/Nikio...Aren't they such a cute couple? So, yeah. Whatever. Er...Update soon, 'kay? ^^
| Reviewed By: Drof Tceferp [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 21:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
^^ Hey, hey, dude. Cool. But....Seperate paragraphs for each new person speaking, right? 'Kay. Yeah, an' a bit choppy. You keep changing the tense. Either stick with 'He did...' or 'He would do...' or 'He does'. One of them, I mean, but not all three. 'Kay? Hey, couldjer add me in? ^^ Heh, an' how many of 'em know who Nikio is? I say 'heh' too much...Heh. ^^ Anyway, yeah, it's good...Update soon, 'kaysies?
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Reviewed By: TheKurtsaness(CLINGME!) [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2005 23:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Go lobo Go lbo, whos the Lobo, whos the Lobo!!!! WOOOOO!!! Im SO gunna be in chappie 5 since i wrote a retared review!! i could ahve told ya it was AWSOME!!! GO FANFICCIES!!!! weee! ~clings to the lobo like some chibbi clinging to a box of dohnuts and has big old watery anime eyes~ im so excited! i aa gave you like all 10\\\'s because this story like so rocks!!! gorillaz mixed with CyberCon and mixed with a yu-gi-oh i guess like so rules!!
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