| "The Mind's Eye" Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] |
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Reviewed By: Angel_4_life [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2005 17:55 CST
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its okay that you didn't like haunted. its an unwritten rule that all authors must hate their first writing piece. well maybe not all authors but I didnt really like my first dtory 'waltz' but i posted it anyway. my writing has really improved since then (my story 'forever yours') and so has yours. nothing to worry about, you have talent. i love your stories. anyways ive been meaning to read this story for a long time but i never got around to it. now i wish i'd read it sooner. it is breathtaking and creative. i love it. it would be interesting if naraku found out Kagome's condition...lol but it would be bad to. wonderful writing and update soon! preferably some time in november but if you have as much schoolwork as i do then just do your best... Wow long review...
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Title: ummmm
Reviewed By: the color bleu On: August 28, 2005 21:03 CDT
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I cant really describe this one. Ive been thinking on what i should say for a while and ive got nothing really. Sorry to hear about ur pet. I know what thats like. For the chapter ill just say it needsa little gramatical work but the storyline is great.
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Title: Ch 4
Reviewed By: Pawz On: July 19, 2005 23:38 CDT
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First of all...HA I guessed right! *does happy dance* (re: Nozomi) Ok, now earlier on in this chapter after the first fight, there are a couple of spelling errors. Minor but still readable. Also, for the 'Twisted Essenses' that arrived...could it be because Nozomi created that portal to talk with Kagome? They followed her through it? Was she really sacraficed to those beings?? *shudders* People of any age could get really really sick! Sacrificing a young (although spiritually strong) child like that! How quick will Kagome's training progress now that she know's who she is? Will the others from the other side of the well believe her? Will Inu-chan actually leave her alone for 7 days instead of 5? *laughs* I hope you can update soon! Take care, ja ne!
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Title: Ch 4
Reviewed By: Pawz On: July 19, 2005 22:59 CDT
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*blinks* You know you almost made me nauseated with InuYasha's attitude towards Kagome after talking with Shippo. It was like he felt 'obligated' towards her. Like she was Kikyou! *shudders* That would be very sickening. Kagome would not appreciate that feeling as well. But I'm glad she's now 'comming to terms' with her current situation. So will you tell how Hojo will tell her future friends? Also Nozomi seems to be comming around alot more now. Or her spirit is. How will Kikyou react to this loss of site? Will she also be affected by it somehow? Or will she make any sort of appearance to this fic at all? Not that I mind if she doesn't. I don't care for her too much. Then again, I'm very early on in the Anime. She still may change abit. Huh...even Naruku is unaware of this new Demon/Youkai? Nice twist. Ja ne!
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Title: Ch 3
Reviewed By: Pawz On: July 19, 2005 22:21 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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So Nozomi is traveling through some type of Portal? How did she know to come to Kamgome's aid and train her?? Since she is a Miko of some type it's no wonder that InuYasha was purified somewhat. It was nice of her to get Kagome back to somewhat normal. Cool chapter, even if somewhat gory. But that follows the storyline very well. It IS the Warring States Era after all. Have fun and update soon as you can! You have me addicted to this story now as well! *grins*
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Title: Ch2
Reviewed By: Pawz On: July 19, 2005 21:48 CDT
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Well sorry someone doesn't like your originality for your breakers. I think they're cute, not annoying. *shrugs* But as for this chapter, it's more like a novel! I love these types of storylines that are so long! You don't have to wait over long for another update this way. Story wise...now you have me curious if Kagome is just Dreaming of Nozomi or having some type of Vision of her? Plus I forgot to make a comment on her modern day blindness...she *grins* already has One Up on Modern Day Blind Dogs! She has one that can talk back to her! InuYasha! *laughs* Sorry couldn't resist that one. Not to say anything bad on Modern Day medicines or such. Every little thing helps. On that note, take care. Ja ne!
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Title: Ch 1
Reviewed By: Pawz On: July 19, 2005 21:04 CDT
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First and foremost: I love your little bunnies and snowman! Cutest way I've ever seen anyone do a scene break. As for the rest...Wow. Very dramatic and now I feel very saddend for both Kagome and InuYasha and the rest of the gang. But there is a remote hope somewhere isn't there? Thanks for the warning of possible lateness of updates.
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Reviewed By: Summer Whispers On: July 19, 2005 15:22 CDT
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Alot of questions answered, but even more left unanswered. Great! Good luck with the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Ardent-Amber [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 12:21 CDT
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WOOTWOOT! Amazing, I can't wait to read more!
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Reviewed By: the color blue On: July 14, 2005 23:39 CDT
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your slipping its been 3 weeks I know you've got other stories but this is a little much if something came up you should leave an authors note Please continue as soon as possible.
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Reviewed By: Ardent-Amber [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2005 11:17 CDT
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OMG, this is just amazing. Plez right more.
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Reviewed By: Ardent-Amber [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2005 11:24 CDT
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OMG, very cool and interesting. Kinda on the long side...yeah only kinda.
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Reviewed By: Summer Whispers On: July 04, 2005 13:59 CDT
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Great phrase you had Inu Yahsa say, it gives the chapter a great closing. Can't wait for another chapter!
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Reviewed By: Summer Whispers On: June 27, 2005 22:26 CDT
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I can really see the images in this chapter, it seems as if your writing was brought one step furthur. So, in other words, excellent job, and keep on with the great writing skills!
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Reviewed By: Summer Whispers On: June 27, 2005 22:25 CDT
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I can really see the images in this chapter, it seems as if your writing was brought one step furthur. So, in other words, excellent job, and keep on with the great writing skills!
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