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Reviewed By: ordieth117 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2008 08:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Fun story to read again and again. I hope you continue it eventually.
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Reviewed By: Ddddd_1 On: April 07, 2007 06:30 CDT
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Pretty interesting background and build up to Ranma bags all the girls, and Mamaru is a real piece of trash. It's funny how much alike Ranma and Chiba are alike, but it's the small things that make a difference. Chiba treats women like trash, and Ranma just loves them all. I could of done without the Nodoka bit, but in a way it makes some sense. Perhaps Ranma's regressed attraction to his girl side, that he can never have, which Nodoka looks like a lot. To bad this story stops before Ranma actualy gets to the part where he goes after the senshi though. Real dispointing after so much build up of a decent background. Soemthing most lemons do not have.
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Reviewed By: darkchun On: April 01, 2006 15:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aside from a few spelling and grammar mistakes this is one of your best works yet. Interesting cast of characters and the plot build up is great. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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Title: AWaC
Reviewed By: Waruiko On: January 28, 2006 05:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I noticed an error or two in spelling and I would have given you a ten stright through, but your work is currently unfinished, and I just can't bring myself to give full marks to unfinished work.
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Reviewed By: Gelionlegends On: December 08, 2005 17:52 CST
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like the story very nice on ranma being the emperor and the girls being part of the goverment and beig in his bed as well. is this also a tenchi muyo crossover being that you have a referance to the masaki shrine. ranma getting the scouts into bed will be interesting on how he does them? just thinking about how oyu do this and if a TM Cros then him meeting the tenchi crew and the emperor of jurai will be amusing to see. wonder if he will get any of the girls like who he's screwing pregnant as well as the senshi. would explain usa pink hair. who else is he screwing? main/other charaters. wonder what the reminants of the NWC are doing and think about ranma. you should do something like a side story with back flashes in this story of how ranma and the war came to be. is ranma near immortal? wonder what ranmas power will be read as by ami's computer and if setsuna knows about that? ranma marrying usagi would sort of be a kick in the pants for tux-boy. keep up the good work like the lemons and how you had him do nodaka though would like it if he finished else where like where he started mybe next time. been looking for nodaka and ranma lemons hard to find. up date soon please don't leave us hanging.
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Title: Continue
Reviewed By: DarkHeart Of Ice [MediaMiner Member] On: November 18, 2005 14:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a very good story. I sure hope you continue this story. I have also been reading the Revolution story, both here and on FF. net. I think you should lemonize that story more, at least here, since FF. net won't let you. That's my opinion, anyways. Thanx--DarkHeart >=P DON'T GET ELIMINATED!!
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Title: A Continuation Gone Too FAr
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2005 21:02 CDT
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: clauswitz [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 15:12 CDT
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damnit stupid thing took out all my freaking carriage returns
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Reviewed By: clauswitz [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 15:10 CDT
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since your asking for ideas i spent a few min coming up with one though since its coming from me it probably sucks;p anyways the basic idea was that during the dinner with the senshi and ranma haruka could get pissed at ranma for something (say flirting heavily with usagi ) and attack him (possibly not as a senshi but just throwing something at him?) and breaking some priceless vase or something as compensation for that usagi could offer haruka to ranma as a sex-slave/concubine for a limited amount of time at this point you may or may not wanna have michiru offer to take haruka's place later you could also have whoever got given in a discussion with one of ranma's women saying something along the lines of 'god i hope he doesnt ask me for anal sex (or something similar)' and the other girl saying 'before your time is up you'll be begging him to do that' which eventually becomes a bet with the stakes being if the senshi does beg she'll agree to be ranma's slave forever of course in the end she will beg for it which means that the other senshi (haruka or micharu's) only way to be with their lover is to also be ranma's slave and there are lots of interesting ways to go about that anyways i hope that all made sense because most of the time anything i think of becomes instant nonsense as soon as its written out ps need more sex with nodoka and a threesome with ranma/nabiki/kasumi and of course more of the senshi getting screwed
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Reviewed By: ChibiSoliDuS On: May 29, 2005 16:36 CDT
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Damn, finally an update! Where the hell were you??? Don't need to give u points cause I know ur fics rocks. update ur 1/2 series soon.
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Title: Chapter 01
Reviewed By: Hiryo [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2005 15:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You could also write on http://addventure.bast-enterprises.de (AA) were StFan writes too... Thought IMHO would prefer that you continue to stay and post here AS WELL. Since here it's easier to search for the entire fic as on AA, also on AA there are the most unfinished fics then say here since most think that other will continue their work till their work is 'forgotten' like all those others. Though I doubt that will ever happen to your fantastic work. I enjoyed it very much and hope you continue it very soon... If you could... could you add Kiima (Phoenix) Mon-Lon (7 Lucky Gods) as well? Hmm did Ranma learn some 'mokkori' from Ryo Saeba (City hunter) >] That would explain at least some things happening. A little competition would help Ranmas act around others (mostly woman) a lot. Competition like Mamoru and Ryo Saeba. ;) Any good going and please update this and all your other work that I enjoy very much!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Demodragon On: May 24, 2005 08:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Looks good, I hope you continue this one. On a side note, St. Fans archive is still up and running. There is a link to it on Tannims fanfiction links page, it's listed as The Ranma1/2 Lemon Stories Archive.
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Title: Worth Writting?
Reviewed By: Sazake On: May 23, 2005 22:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
If it's worth writting for than I'm sure it's worth reading for. Keep it up, A few error here and there but nothing seriously.
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Reviewed By: maoloch On: May 22, 2005 03:35 CDT
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I hope read more. I'm a big fan of your stories and hope you start to write more frequently.
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Reviewed By: Tarquin (not the MM.org member) On: May 20, 2005 22:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Looks good so far - better than might be expected of a Ranma/Sailor Moon crossover, since so many have been done before. I put that down to this one actually having an original background setting, and one I'd like to find out more about. (What caused the Thirty Days of Fire, what exactly went on with Ranma becoming divinity incarnate, and so on...) I really would like to see this continued; it has the setup, and leaving us hanging would be evil. (Oh, and St. Fan's archive is still up - it's at http://stfan.free.fr/.)
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