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Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2005 19:17 CDT
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I'm glad I finally took the time to hunt you down, Vegeta--not to imply that you were hiding or anything, but when I go over to the GR, I get distracted by all your banter and whatnot, and *poof* my self-allotted reading time gets eaten up just like that. So I am glad, here no distractions. GREAT inner dialogue, but then I expected no less from you! Great dialogue in general, very IC in general. As far the plot goes, I admit that the foreshadowing is leaving me a bit anxious--please don't do anything rash, or at least give me a warning if you're gonna kill anyone off, or torture them, etc. I usually prefer more action in a fic, but I can't get enough of you in any way, shape or form, so just write it any way you like (as if you weren't going to anyway!). *bows respectfully*
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Title: Advent children.
Reviewed By: bura400 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2005 16:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Exceptional story, Vegeta. A very clean piece of writing and easy to see one scene from the next. Like Debbie I am a huge stickler for Vegeta and Bulma being in IC--I like the way you have with Vegeta being able to be his prideful, arrogant, self while showing his "softer emotions" and carrying it off successfully. I know personally it, is not always easy to carry off. I found Vegeta and Bulma's actions plausible and very possible. An interesting piece of fiction I definitely enjoy--I enjoyed the steamy lemon as well. Very tasteful and well done. Good Job, Vegeta. Bura400
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Reviewed By: ilex9 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 13:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I\'ll try to review again since I so enjoyed everything so far. I love the very believable way you handle these characters.
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Reviewed By: Flamingo6584 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2005 10:12 CDT
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I am glad I found the time to read this. You are an exceptional writer.
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Title: Advent Children
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 21:28 CDT
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"Trying to find the magic button? I can't stop laughing at this statement :D.. Great chapter Vegeta. i guess it's good to wiat for your chapter updates. it's always a nice suprise to read what comes next...
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Reviewed By: mischief maker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 21:26 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. Vegeta's already declaring that his daughter will never have sex! *dies* I could just see that.
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Reviewed By: Trisha [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 20:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH WOW AWESOME!
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Reviewed By: DBZ-FAN-JESS [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 18:34 CDT
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That was an awesome chapter... I love his contemplation over his feelings for his mate and son, and then his thoughts on his upcoming child. I like how you showed his thoughts on the situation and his reactions to his mate when he finally saw her. You did an awesome job with this chapter and I loved the end and the little scene with trunks... poor mortified child finding his parents messing around, the treasure hunt comment was priceless... ^_^ Great job, cannot wait for the next chapter. Lovely little interlude into Bra...
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Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 17:09 CDT
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Absolutely fantastic! You have new fan. Vegeta's insights in this all rang true to me (no mean feat there) and the narrative is so clean and fresh - detailed and articulate, and yet without being bogged down. Good stuff.
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 16:57 CDT
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That was great. I liked how Vegeta pictured the rules he would lay down for his daughter. Those went out the window huh? The ending to the lemmon had me laughing out loud. Thank you for writing. -El-
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 13:39 CDT
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Well finally updated as requested and no, I won't be giving any spoilers *smirks*
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Reviewed By: Elenek [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2005 17:31 CDT
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This is beautiful! The prologue was clenching. The dream hed me worried there. The idea the Majin had taken over Vegeta's personality is frightening. I must wonder if that is some amount of foreshadowing there or not. Don't suppose you'll tell me huh? Can't say I blame you. I wouldn't either. It works well with the whole keeping the reader interested thing. The following did a fantastic job as contrasting who he could have been with who he is right now. The beast within is a might disturbing. There is that whole foreshadowing thing again. I would also like to say that I liked the imagery you included in this. It's sets the mood of each section wonderfly and is so poetically scripted. I'm looking forward to reading more. I have a funny feeling that you are about to be a person whose writing inspires me to write. Thank You for writing this. -El-
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Reviewed By: Bulma16 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2005 16:35 CDT
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Wow, awesome job Vegeta. That dream sequence really threw me and the Prologue gave us a glimpse of a side of Vegeta we don't see too often. Very well written and here's hoping you update soon *grins* ~Claire
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2005 08:55 CDT
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Taking a moment from my so called "vacation" ( stress level 7 out of 10 at the moment...) by exploiting others' technology. Appreciated you all. Once I get back from this hell hole I'll most likely be pissed enough to get something done... we'll see.
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Reviewed By: miaka16 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2005 10:54 CDT
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Great stuff...of course...XP I'm loving the BV development here...it was cool cuz in this chapter the reader can see two sides...Majin Vegeta...and Vegeta's life with Bulma... ^_^
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