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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 12:59 CDT
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I can see someone taking the time to do that if they were your beta, but not really otherwise. And would you all quit calling me PV - everytime I hear that it reminds me of television.
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Title: Advent Children
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 12:10 CDT
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Well it\'s a good story PV and i\'m glad i read it. I for one won\'t say about mistakes cause we all make them and if someone does take the time too then i feel that they are trying their best to make your story even better then just being *BITCHY* about it. So thank you DBZ-FAN-JESS for pointing it out to him..So on that note just undate and soon...
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2005 18:41 CDT
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Count on it woman... *smirks*
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Title: The Woman
Reviewed By: Yume Kai [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2005 13:16 CDT
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Great way to pull people in. It gets you hooked and hungry. As far as your grammer I'm going to overlook this because honestly to do otherwise.. thats just being a bitch. I dont think I have ever read a perfect grammatically correct fan-fic to this date. I cant wait to see the rest. I know your stories always twist. Writing with you for so many years now.. I know to never think I have you figured out. *smirks*
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 17:57 CDT
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Sooner or later *smirks*
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Reviewed By: flamingo6584 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 12:57 CDT
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Well, you sure don't have to worry about me pointing out your grammar mistakes. I like the fic so far, but you so left us hanging. I hope you answer some questions in the next chappie!
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 09:32 CDT
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Well like I said, I merely write to tell the story, not to make an english essay, so the few grammar mistakes once in a while don\'t bother me at least *smirks* After all, no one\'s forcing anyone to read it if that is an issue, ja ne? But yes, appreciated.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 08:40 CDT
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Good stuff. I didn't troll for grammar errors (as is my old schoolmarm want) because I was SO into this. In fact, I'm going to read it again. I'm so intrigued by Vegeta in this period, and your approach is just right--thoughtful, not too heavy, almost reverent. You know what I like, baby! I want more!
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 07:03 CDT
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Appreciated.
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Reviewed By: fyrechylde [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 06:27 CDT
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The way you play on the reader's emotions..is ingenius. Delicate yet powerful. I look forward to seeing where you take this.
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 05:35 CDT
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I'm not offended. Call me lazy, but I just don't have the patience to fiddle with one chapter hours and hours just to be sure I catch each and every grammar mistake, or find another way to put things. Kami knows if I did then knowing myself, the chapter would probably change significantly in the end. I just write when it flows rather than get picky. Result: more story, no stress about every single detail. The story just means more to me than a few grammar issues here and there. And don't worry about the unexplained parts *smirks* It'll get clear as you read on.
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Reviewed By: DBZ-FAN-JESS [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 00:22 CDT
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There's more... I do this with love... sorry... For years Vegeta had thought he were the one to leave this world before everyone else and maybe he was selfish to say so, but that was the way he preferred things to be -vegeta thought he would be the one giving all he got to make sure he would also take down his enemy -giving it all he had to make/ giving his all to make sure alright I'm done for now there were a few sentences where the statement could be a little confusing but it worked... I really like it its a wonderful story. I liked the perspective you've given and the emotional depth of the character. I can't wait to see what your ideas are for this story and the depth at which you plan to investigate his character and the explanations of his memories... I can't wait to read more and I hope that you aren't offended by my checking the grammer I just wanted to give some suggestions. Its a really great start and I can't wait to read more of it. ^_~
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Reviewed By: DBZ-FAN-JESS [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 00:06 CDT
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I very much liked your explanation at the top. I like it... its definetly drawn my interest and nicely written... you can beat me later I'm going to make some comments. If I bother you by pointing out the grammer mistakes feel free to tell me to not do it again... don't worry you're the third person tonight I'm doing this too. ^_^ A shadowy figure walked forward with heavy, burdened steps - each one of them hesitated and quiet -wouldn't hesitant work better. The world had no need for the likes of him no more -anymore Now the world was different though. -drop the though. Peace and prosperity ruled the land and such strength, power and greatness were not needed anymore. -such strength? I'm going to overlook this because of the assumption that one would know we are talking about vegeta but a statement like that is a little unexplained because you don't know what strenght power and greatness. They had fought for it to happen for so many years and now that it was here, what became of them -would what will become of them work better... and it flows with the next sentence Just like that had also he lost all that he had in this world. -just like that he had also *wrong order* Fight as he might, that was something he couldn't let go of. Not even selling his tainted soul to the devil himself was enough to break the bonds that had formed almost unnoticed -unnoticeably; unnoticed is an adj this is an adv which you want in this statement
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2005 20:27 CDT
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Not all morning, no, but been working on the next chapter. Not wanting to give anything away, but yes, I imagine it's not going to be what you expect at least first *smirks*
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Reviewed By: miaka16 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2005 20:12 CDT
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This is definitely going to be an interesting read.....I'm enjoying the style so far.....it's almost a stream of consciousness style...and a (of course) very Vegeta aura... so I'm guessing this is what you were working on all morning?
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