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Title: Advent Children
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2005 18:22 CDT
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One of the best chapters of a story i\'ve read so far. Please update soon Vegeta...
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Reviewed By: DBZ-FAN-JESS [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 22:56 CDT
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Vegeta you did a great job. That was amazing and intense. I loved the dream sequence and the realization for Vegeta that Bulma loves him so unconditionally... the chapter was well done and I loved the little talk about their little girl... a daddys girl of course. Great chapter and I cannot wait to read what you write next. Very good job. Oh and deb *sticks tongue out at her*
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 19:44 CDT
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Indeed it does and who's to say when that pile stops growing, hm? *smirks* But damn that speed bump...so close, yet so very far. You'd think after saving the world all day a saiyan deserves to relax >< *grumbles things under breath*
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 16:33 CDT
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Yes! That was intense! As badly as "the dream" thing can be done in fics, here it worked seamlessly. The B/V action was really high caliber--I've always wanted Bulma face to face with the Majin Prince. Thanks for that little interaction--it all rang true to both their characters. Bulma would stand up to him like that and she wouldn't stop loving him--after all, her love stands on a whole galaxy of corpses, doesn't it? And I love the drama of domesticity against the whole evil destroyer of worlds--esp when Vegeta tries to fix his angst with some sex and runs across a speed bump! This is primo! (What the heck am I supposed to call you, huh? Ouji-sama? That doesn't leave too more characters for your review! PV is just shorter). And btw, just to pick on Jess.... your use of the word "unnoticed" was correctin the prologue (take it from the English teacher! Heh heh heh)
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 15:40 CDT
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Appreciated.
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Reviewed By: DBZ-FAN-JESS [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 23:24 CDT
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Hey Peev *better ^_~* You did a great job with this story. This story has started off wonderfully. You have brought your audience in with a wonderful introduction; I liked how dark and mysterious this prolugue was. You have no idea what the future for this fic is and that is what I like. It leaves you guessing and wondering what will happen next You leave the reader waiting for more which is a great way to leave your audience. *sorry for my pms moment earlier... I was irratated and taking it out on the stories I was reading... I probably put some poor pre-teen in tears* I loved the story though and you did a great job with it. I can not wait to see the rest of your work. Cannot wait for your next update *sorry for those of you who may have thought I came off bitchy... ^_~... I was just in a mood that night and may have been a little harsh*
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 12:59 CDT
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I can see someone taking the time to do that if they were your beta, but not really otherwise. And would you all quit calling me PV - everytime I hear that it reminds me of television.
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Title: Advent Children
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2005 12:10 CDT
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Well it\'s a good story PV and i\'m glad i read it. I for one won\'t say about mistakes cause we all make them and if someone does take the time too then i feel that they are trying their best to make your story even better then just being *BITCHY* about it. So thank you DBZ-FAN-JESS for pointing it out to him..So on that note just undate and soon...
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2005 18:41 CDT
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Count on it woman... *smirks*
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Title: The Woman
Reviewed By: Yume Kai [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2005 13:16 CDT
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Great way to pull people in. It gets you hooked and hungry. As far as your grammer I'm going to overlook this because honestly to do otherwise.. thats just being a bitch. I dont think I have ever read a perfect grammatically correct fan-fic to this date. I cant wait to see the rest. I know your stories always twist. Writing with you for so many years now.. I know to never think I have you figured out. *smirks*
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 17:57 CDT
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Sooner or later *smirks*
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Reviewed By: flamingo6584 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 12:57 CDT
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Well, you sure don't have to worry about me pointing out your grammar mistakes. I like the fic so far, but you so left us hanging. I hope you answer some questions in the next chappie!
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 09:32 CDT
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Well like I said, I merely write to tell the story, not to make an english essay, so the few grammar mistakes once in a while don\'t bother me at least *smirks* After all, no one\'s forcing anyone to read it if that is an issue, ja ne? But yes, appreciated.
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Reviewed By: debbiechan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 08:40 CDT
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Good stuff. I didn't troll for grammar errors (as is my old schoolmarm want) because I was SO into this. In fact, I'm going to read it again. I'm so intrigued by Vegeta in this period, and your approach is just right--thoughtful, not too heavy, almost reverent. You know what I like, baby! I want more!
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Reviewed By: Lord_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 07:03 CDT
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Appreciated.
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