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Reviewed By: C.J ^_^ On: April 12, 2005 06:13 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great fanfic, i love it so much, i read it just a second ago and told my cousins about it, so don't be to surprised if you get loads more reviews. And yeah i think you should write loads more fanfics (mainly V/B)!!!
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Reviewed By: Saiyan Nirvana On: June 10, 2003 16:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice job! I loved it! Oh and don't mind that last sentance I wrote on that last review. I had to stop writing so when I came back I was a little disoriented. Please don't quit writing! It's really good! |
Reviewed By: Saiyan Nirvana On: June 10, 2003 16:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww! I'm not even going to comment on all the crap this time,well... maybe a little;)!
Going ahead and commenting on the style of writing, I think I was a good idea to put point of view of Trunks in there. After all, it is his story too!
Grammar definetly improved again. There are still problem spots but nothing a little more paying attention in language arts couldn't fix.Just kidding...
I really have enjoyed reading your fanfic. I have really enjoyed reading it. |
Reviewed By: Saiyan Nirvana On: June 10, 2003 15:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I definetly think that the author deserves higher ratings for this chapter.
Stlye of writing: Once again, the author uses exceptional writing style. It flows very well but needs to describe small minor details so that the reader will be able to create a better picture of what's going on and what the setting looks like.
Grammar:The grammar got better in this chapter, but there's still a few little places that need a little claening up.
Originality/Creativity: Wow! Who would have ever thought that Vegeta would have actuall warmed up to Goku and would have confided in him! And he did it so easily. Well, that's pretty rare so, I gave the author a 9/10 for the idea.
Overall, I found the fanfic once again pleasing to read. Keep up the good work author-person! |
Reviewed By: Saiyan Nirvana On: June 10, 2003 15:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ijust finished reading the first chapter and this is what I think of it so far... (It's a review, of course it's what I think so far! What a stupid thing to type!)
Okay, for style of writing, I gave the author an 8/10. The author's writing is over all pretty good. It flows well and is moderatly descriptive of the setting. The author's use of words is exceptional. As for grammar,however, I felt that the author did not deserve that high of a rating. The story is indeed easy to read because of it's overall correct grammar, but there are a few annoying mistakes that takes the reader's attention away from the story, which borught down the overall rating for the first chapter.
The originality and creativity definetly deserves a higher score. Although there are many Bulma/Vegeta fics, there are not that many (or at least from what I've read) that has focused on the two character's married life and what problems were faced between the couple. The problem of Bulma not feeling love or feeling of unsure of Vegeta's love is a very practical problem one would reckon would come up in a realtionship involving Vegeta.
The fanfic is pretty fun to read. It doesn't waste any time and gets straight to the problem. Like I said before though, the grammar is a bit if a distraction.
Overall, the fanfic deserved a good rating especially considering it is the author's first fanfic. I look foreward to reading the next chapter.
By the way author-person! I ask that you please do me a favor. Unless you were already considering a personality chage in Vegeta later on in the story that would make him quit this; I ask that you please don't let Vegeta call Bulma "woman". It's nothing against you or anything, but it's really overused in a lot of fanfics. |
Reviewed By: crazyraditzlover On: October 21, 2002 19:05 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good fic! |
Reviewed By: crazyraditzlover On: October 21, 2002 19:05 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good fic! |
Reviewed By: Mia Skywalker [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2002 23:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Other than a few minor grammar mistakes (you used "he's" instead of "his" several times - once would have been simply careless, but you did it several times, which indicates that you simply aren't sure when to use one or the other, and there were some punctuation and other grammar errors), this is quite an excellent story. I always love the stories that show a side of someone you don't see on the show. No one felt the slightest bit out of character, and it was a nice little piece of angst/fluff/romance that was truly enjoyable. :-)
Looks like I'm going to have to find more of your stories to read now. :-) |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2002 20:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sniff sniff* Awwwwwwwwwww ... that was SO freaking adorable!! :)
You know, it's strange. Some people NEED to hear those words. And others just know without hearing it. It's not restricted to gender, really. And it's so hard to tell. *chuckles* Yeah, everbody knows Bulma loves Vegeta and I'm SURE she'd shout it from the highest mountain top if she had the chance--much to Vegeta's dismay. And then there are others, like Trunks, that think love is just as powerful as a "secret" or "private" love. (Hm, I hope Trunks learns a lesson, later in life when he decides that he loves someone, possibly tells her, and either she doesn't return it or she just won't say/admit it. *hehehe* I'm so evil;)
Of course, I'm still VERY proud of Veggie for saying it! ^_^
And trust me, this is a VERY good first fic. I have NEVER posted a DBZ fanfic (although I'm TRYING to write a couple), but my first GW fanfic was a FAR cry from being as good as yours. I mean, most people knew how it was going to end too, but that doesn't matter.
What matters is not just making your readers happy... *wipes away tear* ...but that you are happy when you write. ^_^ And besides ... you do a great job at it! I mean, your fic is STILL one of the awesome MostVisited. And believe us, the reviewers, when we tell you that you deserve it!! :)
Keep writing! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Saiya-jin44 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2002 00:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AHHHH!! i loved this!! this was sooooo KAWAII!! ~_^ hehe. no seriously this was one of the cutest B/V fics ever and i loved it! i wanted to thank you for your review too and also read some of your stuff! since i liked this so much i'm DEFINATELY gonna spend some time reading your other fics. ^_^ keep up the great work!! |
Reviewed By: Felidae On: February 28, 2002 07:14 CST
Comment/Review:
Yeah, that's right! You won the one week in your own house!!! I hope you will enjoy your time in your own bed and your own room and your own kitchen!!! Congrats!!! :] |
Reviewed By: Susy On: February 05, 2002 22:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good fic. Keep working in this couple |
Reviewed By: Kahlan Nightwing [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2001 13:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good. I like how Trunks had a part in the whole thing, very sweet. When was it set though? After Buu? Yeah, I'll assume then. Continue to write please. |
Reviewed By: Felidae [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2001 04:27 CST
Comment/Review:
*smiles-like-an-idiot* Vegeta and Bulma are soooooo cute! I love the ending! VB 4EVA! MERRY XMAS!!!! |
Reviewed By: Firaga [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2001 03:00 CST
Comment/Review:
aaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?!?!?! hee hee, i feel like im wrapped in a fuzzy blanket drinking hot chocolate! that warm and fuzzy ending just made my day! :) |
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