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Reviewed By: OROsan0677 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 15:53 CDT
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Wow...this was an awesome beginning...I'm glad that Sueric recommended it. I'm just worried about what might happen to the well when the gang leaves the village. The biggest question is, how would he know to look for the well? All he knows about Kagome is that she loves Inuyasha, she's a miko, Kikyou's reincarnation, and wears strange clothes...he can't possibly know that she comes from the future...or can he? Like Sueric you leave your reviewers wondering...best thing you can do for your reviewers though.
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Reviewed By: foamyfan15010 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 13:51 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Finally a well written, interesting Inuyasha/Kagome fan fic!!! It's such a bitch sifting through all the crap on this site to find a gem like your story, ya know? lol Anyhoo, great so far; I think the part I liked the best was the scene with Inuyasha and the baseball. You described it so well; I could see him poking and prodding the 'threatening' baseball in my mind. :o) Great plot, witty dialogue... It looks like a great start. Good luck, God Bless, and I hope to see an update soon!!! P.S. : The title of this story is also a nice touch. Very unique and original... I can only wonder who your 'secret' beta is... lol :o)
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Reviewed By: kappei_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2005 13:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very great start to your story. I really like how you capture the dynamic between Inuyasha and his friends and how you keep everyone in character.
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Title: Ch. 2
Reviewed By: DarklessVasion [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2005 01:49 CDT
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I'm not convinced that Naraku doesn't have something planned. He never does anything without some kind of scheme. His curiosity is almost as strong as Sesshoumaru's, always looking for an opportunity to benefit himself and his plans. Even if it's only to torment someone for his private amusement. He is one, twisted individual. I've noticed that there are very few villians that don't have some kind of redeeming quality to them. Naraku is not one of these. He is bonifide Evil incarnate. I think the Inu-tachi better stay on their toes and keep a close eye on the Well and its surroundings. If that sick bastid ever found out the Well's significance....heaven help them. - On a lighter note, I enjoyed InuYasha's slightly selfish posessiveness over Kagome and having her, "all to himself" - LoL (had to sign-in to tag this fic)
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Title: I shouldn't be reading this...I have so many waiting - Oh well.
Reviewed By: DarklessVasion - not signed in On: July 18, 2005 01:23 CDT
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Oh, nice start. Imagining a threat to the only passage to Kagome's home/time is a very serious thing for the gang to worry over. If something happens to the Well while Kagome is at home, how will they find the shards, not to mention how much they would miss her but they would also lose a very strong member of thier circle. If Kagome is with them and she can't get home, cut off from her family, she would be devestated. Either way, protecting the Well just became a priority until they know exactly what's going on. I know that right now, InuYasha just wants her where he can see her, reach her, and protect her. If they are separated, I know he would lose it. Well, on to the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: kamackie21 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2005 23:45 CDT
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Wow...I am hooked already. I can't wait to read whats next. Hmmm......
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~nsi On: July 11, 2005 01:24 CDT
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another well done chapter. glad to see Naraku hasn't done anything to the well...yet. i think i'm more afraid of Naraku finding his way through the well, more so then him being around it. that would just be bad. now...i don't know...maybe its just me...but wouldn't it be safer to LEAVE the last peice of the shard in the present that way it CAN'T fall into the wrong hands. hmm...just an observation. meh. anyway, great chapter and really great character dictation. you really nailed them on the head in this one. very well done!!!
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Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2005 20:42 CDT
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Yay! An update and so fast! Under a month! LOL, I tease Sari-mommeh ^_^ This choater was really enjoyable. The fear over the well from both InuYasha and Kagome was palpable and you got a tear out of me during the talk with Mama. You write an exasperated, pining Kagome quite well and your InuYasha is just priceless. He gets her all to himself now hmmm? An excellent way to introduce your romance =) I cannot wait for more!
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2005 13:44 CDT
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Oh, I'm really liking this so far! Story flow is good, wording is very well-honed; overall an excellent chapter. Strength in characterization and spelling/grammar shows. Awesome update, as usual! The chapter had good pacing and realistic dialogue, great description, and was very, very strong! Keep it up! I can't wait to read the next installment!
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Reviewed By: missbritt [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2005 23:25 CDT
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hey its really good so far you should keep it up ok i cant wait to read what happenes next;)
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~nsi On: June 20, 2005 00:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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very good opening for the story. i enjoy the banter between kag and her freinds and the recap of the torrent emotions between her and inu. very well done. i'm interested to the fact that someone else is taking notice in the well...that has always bothered me. sooo...if naraku destroys the well in teh past, will Kagome just vanish since it will cease to exist in the future? hmmm.... interesting stuff. keep it up! the story is really well done!
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Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2005 23:21 CDT
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Very intriguing, I can't wait to see what you've come up with this time Sari! And LOL...world domination?? No, no, education of the masses! Who hears something like 'vissitude' in school? And it's a cool word! So is the other one you mentioned in your A/N... especially after I figured out how to say it XD. Don't keep us in too much suspense---share more of your beautifully crafted words soon!
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Reviewed By: gale89 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2005 19:18 CDT
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good story. i really like it. u should update soon, pls.
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Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: June 18, 2005 14:50 CDT
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Woo hoo! World domination? Pinky and the Brain??? Awesome chapter, I'm thoroughly intrigued! Can't wait to see what sort of twists and turns you have planned! Just an aswesome start! Let's hope there isn't too long between updates! ::cracks the whip over Sari-15's head::
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