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| "Playing Home" Reviews/Comments [ 49 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: NewFan On: March 16, 2006 14:17 PST
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Damn, I haven't had time to go online for a while (got a job now... being a responsible adult sucks!) and now I feel bad that I didn't review your last chapter. Anyway, I'm really liking Kamala, he is a pretty complex character, and his interaction with Goku is interesting, maybe because I still find Goku rather clueless at times, and Kamala just as clueless at others. But it's also sweet that Goku cares so much about his happiness, which I think is a realistic reaction for a considerably happy person when they see someone who isn't so happy. And, I'm fascinated by the thought that Goku and Vegeta may be starting to act like each other, can't wait to see more of that, should be fun. I'm also glad Yamcha is getting to spend more time with the Saiyan couple, he certainly spices things up. Vegeta has become quite unpredictable, laughing after finding out what Yamcha heard was a bit unexpected. Makes me wonder, is it because of his mood swings, or is it because he is changing after mating with Goku? He still seems a bit grumpy at times, like at the lake, though it's not the same crazy-homicidal-grumpy as before. These characters are developing nicely, and I can't wait to read more, so I'm looking forward to the next update.
| Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2006 18:29 PST
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WOOT! Nice lemon. I'm getting that "gotta knock some sense into Kamala" feeling, and it is eerily similar to how I always feel about angsty Vegeta after a while. I'm glad he got some sorrow off his chest with Goku, but I really hope Raaven's gonna help him out with that. As for "Lucid", I guess I have to try it again if it's your personal favorite!
| Reviewed By: hatake-kakashi86 On: March 04, 2006 17:59 PST
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I read all three stories and enjoy them so much. I'm really looking forward to see what happens next. Please update soon.
| Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2006 08:24 PST
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Oh, fun chapter! I love Goku fixing the sink--he's such a handyman, lol. And when he thinks V wants more kids, that was too sweet. I love that Yamcha is going on the dragonball adventure--his interactions with the mated couple are always interesting. Now Kamala, I'm worried about him and Raaven...without Raaven, Kamala really would be a loose cannon! BTW, I haven't read Lucid--I tried the first chapter, and it was so intense that I backed off, 'cuz I just wasn't up to it...Call me a lightweight, I like the fluffy stuff and the funny stuff right now, can't take a whole lotta angst! Great job on this, and I can't wait for more.
| Reviewed By: NewFan On: February 26, 2006 13:56 PST
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About Tryst: now that you mention it, it is similar to the 6th Sense, thought I don't think I would have made that connection by myself. Now, about this chapter, there were so many great moments, one of the greatest being Vegeta's explanation about how he hooked up with Bulma, I think that was something everybody wanted to know. And the fact that liquor was involved makes a lot of sense ;) Kamala's burning tail was also a great addition, as well as Goku's seeming obliviousness to a lot of things that should be a bit more obvious, like how he keeps flirting with Kamala without knowing it (or so it seems). Goku and Vegeta's arguments are interesting and... unique, as always. It's amusing how random their discussions can be, but that's just a sign that they have good communication because they can talk to each other about anything and everything. And Vegeta being manipulated by Yamcha was entertaining, can't wait to see how that turns out, should be fun. Anyway, I hope you update soon.
| Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 10, 2006 17:15 PST
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I am enjoying this fic so much! After all the turmoil of thier rescue mission, it's nice to just sit back and enjoy their togetherness, their relationship as it develops. Your writing style makes it so easy to visualize the action (except during the scene at the beginning of the last chapter, I thought they were on the living room floor, and then all of a sudden they were on the bed? or did I just read that too fast?). I like when the other Saiyans make an appearance, even if it's brief. I like getting to know them better, even though the whole Kamala "issue" makes me a little nervous--he's like a fuse waiting to be lit. You always keep your readers on edge like that, and it's a good thing, to me anyway! It's definitely not dull, and often it's the little things that surprise me, like them thinking to give G's new clothes to Kamala, or the incident with Yamcha and the chocolate. Keep up the good work. ^ - ^
| Reviewed By: NewFan On: February 01, 2006 16:42 PST
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Jealous and mood-swingy Vegeta is an entertaining Vegeta, LOL. Kamala has become troublesome without even meaning to, how would he react if he knew what Goku and Vegeta talked about? I think it's really sweet how Goku is concerned about looking nice for Vegeta, he's hardly ever that self-conscious. Anyway, great chapter, I hope you update soon.
| Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: January 30, 2006 22:39 PST
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Yes the mood swing....the dreaded mood swings...poor Vegeta LOL Grate chapter I am doing ok thank you. Not much better but alive and that is all that counts... Please oh please up-date soon LadyKATT
| Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: January 17, 2006 22:34 PST
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Now that was a grate chapter LOL I loved it Poor Vegeta Not alowed chocolet...not nice lol Up date soon PS Thanks I am doing ok so far bit of bad news but your story cheared me up TY LadyKATT
| Reviewed By: NewFan On: January 13, 2006 20:54 PST
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Hey, just wanted to let you know that not everyone thinks your grammar is that bad. I did notice a few mistakes, but I just assumed they were typos because when someone writes so much there is bound to be some typos here and there. It's actually really impressive if you've only started learning English six years ago (I've been studying French for that long, and even though I could write whole essays, my grammar is never anything close to impeccable), besides, there is definitely worse grammar out there in stories that are just impossible to read. Anyway, I was just marveling at how insanely jealous and protective Goku has gotten, he even turned on Yamcha and was kind of harsh with Trunks, though it's all justifiable. And even though that last moment he had with Vegeta seemed somewhat psychotic, I found it strangely sweet and touching how they could be screaming at each other one moment, but contented the next. By the way, I totally enjoyed Yamcha's little traumatic experience, hehehe. Well, keep up the great work, and I hope you update soon.
| Title: please
Reviewed By: dishgurl On: December 27, 2005 17:22 PST
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I love your story sooo much... I'm sure everyone would agree on that. Can you update soon? I'm dyin' for the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Viandra [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2005 17:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi there, I read all the Vegeta and Goku fics that you have placed here. I greatly enjoyed them. Your style on developing a story is very appealing. I like how you play with the emotions of our all time favourites Goku and Vegeta. Vegeta seems to be slightly out of character being that much interactive with Goku and others and showing so much emotions, but I really like that. He has always been my favourite character in the series, but I think I like him even better in your stories. I can perfectly understand why Goku is so possessive when it comes to him. I am looking forward to reading some more about that lovely couple. However, I`d recommend you go looking for some other beta reader, because all of your fictions are lacking of proper grammar and sentence construction. Your stories are so much fun, but they keep my hair standing on end when it comes to tenses and sentence construction. This somehow spoils the fun and it does not do credit to your obvious writing talent. So please keep on writing, practice a little grammar and you will become a tremendous author and noone will ever write such a critical review on you stories again. There will only be greatful readers complimenting on every chapter issued. In sum, thumbs up - keep going.
| Reviewed By: Princess Katreena On: December 14, 2005 21:37 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL So there will be a hanging...namly Yamcha? LOL Grate chapter Up date soon And yes it dose give Vegeta his charm LadyKATT
| Title: Au-rit-auw-rit!
Reviewed By: dishgirl On: December 08, 2005 14:53 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another excelent chapter! ^_^ I gotta say my favorite prase in the whole thing was chi-chi saying to Veggie was "I have nightmares about your growls, glares and canines." p.s. as far as the poll.. i would have given you 15 out of 10 for the creativity... but the numbers don't go up that high.. L:
| Reviewed By: NewFan On: December 07, 2005 00:52 PST
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Seems like Yamcha is coming around, it's nice to see that he isn't being portrayed as a completely insensitive jerk like he is in a surprisingly large number of fanfics. I feel kinda bad for Chichi though, Vegeta still doesn't like her, but at least he's blunt and brutally honest about it. Like always, I find myself enjoying even the smallest things (hehe, Vegeta in Russia) so just in case I haven't said it enough times: great job! Hope you update soon.
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