| "Danger in the horizon" Reviews/Comments [ 126 ] |
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Reviewed By: Meow On: November 15, 2002 23:42 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have been reading this story for awhile. I really REALLY like it. I think it is great. I was reading it at FF.net, but I guess it was took off b/c of the rating. I'm happy you post it here too. Please don't get frustrated, and continue to update. |
Reviewed By: Bulma On: November 04, 2002 16:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH........ I loved this chapter!!!!! So emotional!!!!!!
EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great idea!!!!
[ ]īs, Bulma. |
Reviewed By: Ms2ry Angle7 On: November 04, 2002 14:38 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thus mine eyes decive me? The prodical child has been found! That dam fan.ficnet., do they have any idea how long I searched for your story. Luckily I took a stroll down MM's lovely list of fan fics and low and behold look who I found.
Glad your back alive and kicking! And pleased to say that your writing and creativity has only improved!!! keep it up!!!!! Glad to have you back!! |
Reviewed By: Susan On: November 04, 2002 04:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HOLY SHITONASTICK!!! WHAT AN UPDATE!!! OMGOMGOMG!! Yamcha an android? Bardock is Freeza's seer? Damn, I didn't see any of that coming. I feel like I got hit by a truck!! I wonder how everyone will take the news about what Yamcha really was. And I can't wait to find out what Bardock has to tell that slithering asshole. To really complicate things Victor now has Amanda. That bastard is delusional and there's no telling what he'll do to her. I think I'm gonna be sick! I hope, no I pray, that Radditz can hear her please for help because I'd love to see that cutie rip Victor apart limb from limb. Yes, it would most definitely make my year ^_^. Thanks so much for the update notice. I always love the hell out of your chapters and this one left me speechless. Bravo on a job extremely well done and screw MMO-I give this chap a 100 for everything :D. TTYL-Sue |
Reviewed By: Trunks102 On: October 09, 2002 19:20 EDT
Comment/Review:
i'm so glad i finally found your updated fic here - i've been having some problems reaching this site. nonetheless, i really enjoyed this chapter, and i think it served well as a transition period between the fight with Zarbon and Frieza's impending arrival. great chapter - i especially enjoy chichi's persona as the troubled housewife, and i also liked the particular twist with yamcha's letter. please update soon! |
Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2002 01:00 EDT
Comment/Review:
I can't believe it took me SOOO long to finish this but I'm finally caught up! This story is absolutely amazing. I love how you've woven the plot and the way you've developed each of the characters as well as giving Bulma some useful powers. The whole thing with Zarbon really added some depth. That and the asteroid were great storylines to effectively underline the arrival of Frieza. I love the relationship you've built between Vegeta & Bulma, so protective and caring yet still outwardly emotionless. Although I loved it when he let it all go when he thought he was going to lose her... that was sweet. And now I'm very intrigued as to what poor Yamcha left for Bulma. Can't wait to keep reading. :) |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest On: October 03, 2002 02:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What didn't she want to know?!?!?!?! Great! Now I'm going to be up all night worrying about this. *Sighs* Oh well. Great Chappie! I'm glad Susan told me about it or I probably would have never seen it. Anyway, Great, Wonderful, Terrific!!-JB |
Reviewed By: Sheena On: October 01, 2002 01:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, I loved your story so far and have rated it highly, your style of writing has depth and captures emotions and feeling. For a R rated story I'm extremely impressed with the way you avoided a crude outlook and also swearing which has often been the case with many other such writers to my disgust. Your spelling and grammar is done well, a few rare exceptions where on several occasions you've missed letters and accidentally pressed a wrong button eg. oz king instead of ox king, but hey easy mistakes hardly noticable. Originality and Creativity very good, the bonding idea has been discussed in stories often but the way you put forward your ideas for the process and the closeness in it is terrific. Overall I totally enjoyed it, expecially the way you kept the arrogance and hardness in Vegeta while showing a softer side in him. Oh and loved the involvement of Zarbon an inducement not used often. All in all an 10 out of 10. Good work!!!
Any person reading this who haven't read the story yet get your but in gear and read. Enjoyment is a promise.
Will review again at the finish of story or if in need to say something of importance.
Bye Bye, and once again congratulations on your story. |
Reviewed By: Min On: September 18, 2002 17:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was one hell of a chapter.
I loved it!
It was so good.
Please update a.s.a.p.
//Min.. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: September 17, 2002 15:09 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was finally able to r/r. For some reason I can't seem to log on to MMO at night :(. Anyway, this was another knock out chapter. The way you described the refugees' feelings at having to leave the space station (and the safe haven it was for them) and Rich's demise actually had me tearing up (I really need to get out more). Also, the way you described the impact of the asteroid and the effects on the atmosphere, well let's just say that I closed my eyes and with a little help of this kickass cough medicine that I'm taking, I could visualize it O_o. I'm still tickled pink that Zarbon is no more, but the way it happened kinda makes me wanna lose my lunch. It obviously affected Vegeta, Goku and Piccolo the same way. The way that Veggie looked after Bulma was sweet. There's no doubt as to how he feels about her. I felt sorry for Sarah when she caught sight of Jock and Bulma. At least he's not dead, and he's gonna feel extremely crappy when he regains conciousness and starts to remember how he played a part in the mess that followed. I just have one reguest...please have Radditz (aka cutie pie extraordinaire) take care of Victor personally. He needs to pay for being chronically stupid and an Grade A asshole. Veggie's dream was awesome. It was nice to hear his dad tell him how proud he was of him and to take care of Bulma cause she's one of a kind ^_^. As far as the B/V lemon, I'm still drooling *gives 2 thumbs up*. It was very emotional and brought to light a sense of urgency from both of them. Last, but not least, I'm curious as hell to find out what Yamcha wrote in that letter. His death I always found disturbing. Yeah, he may not have been the strongest of the bunch, but he should've died as a warrior, not a wino. Well, I guess I've reviewed enough. Then again it's all your fault for turning out chap after chap and it's all pure genius. I can't wait to read #48, and even though I don't have a clue as to what'll happen, I'm sure it will kick some major ass! Oh yeah, I almost forgot, I got my e-mail problem resolved. Sure took long enough. It's suenami927@yahoo.com, so feel free to put me on your update list. TTYL-Sue |
Reviewed By: Christina On: September 16, 2002 17:14 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Great chapter!! I love it. I think this might have been the best yet, in a writing sense. Every thing just flowed smoothly, no bumps. I cant wait for the next chapter. I know what you mean about the studying thing. Homework is very important, espeacially when your in high school or college. |
Reviewed By: dragonzmoon On: September 16, 2002 11:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What's to say? Cha's rendition of an AU,B/V get together is so irrestistable,not to mention full of her wonderful creativity. *You genius you!* This chapter was absolutely supurb! The lemon scene between Bulma and Vegeta was so awesome! This chapter was definitely worth the wait! I also loved the scenes with all the worried characters in them! Hmm,are we going to follow this up with a A/R fic,Char? I definitely hope so!I Can't wait! *You also have to...Kill the Victor! ^_~* |
Reviewed By: PowerGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2002 22:34 EDT
Comment/Review:
OMG what was in that letter from Yamcha??
It's a real shame that FFN screwed us over...but fear not I'll follow this story anywhere!! |
Reviewed By: catgirl26 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2002 20:36 EDT
Comment/Review:
Ahh! What an evil cliffhanger! I want to know what's written in those letters! Will I ever know? Blah! I loved this chapter! I'd write more, but I'm in a bit of a hurry. I have to do some stuff to my comp, and I can't when other programs are running...*sigh* Anyway, great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!!! |
Reviewed By: Bulma On: September 15, 2002 19:21 EDT
Comment/Review:
OH, NO!!!!!!! I canīt believe you stopped like that! You are so cruel....... :)
Please, update soon.
[ ]īs, Bulma. |
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