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| "Unfettered" Reviews/Comments [ 163 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Title: part two
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: September 16, 2006 01:07 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And here is part two of the review! Wow!! I am getting better with my reviews!! Okay.. Kagome saw.. ran and shattered. wrote letters. Got it. She watched them!! Oh Kami.. does Kagome ever love to crush herself. She saw her son (whom she thought was hers..) accepting Kikyou in Kagome's place at the dinner table and how easily Kikyou had "replaced" her. That would have to hurt worse of all. Couldn't they scent Kagome around the home while Kikyou was there or is it because her scent is always there? Or was Inuyasha completely taken by Kikyou's presence that he didn't notice. Kagome has been "abandoned" by two of her most beloved people. If she isn't severely depressed from this I will wonder. She left them! Kagome left them! This time Kagome is in the wrong. Blinded by saddness but still in teh wrong. Kagome really knows how to run away from some things especially with regards to Inuyasha! Did Taro read his letter out loud to Inuyasha? Or did he gave a short form to Inuyasha? Good for Kagome with her words in that letter! Brutal and blunt! I commend her! Finally she had told Inuyasha some of her feelings and she let him know it was Kikyou that has been causing her stress. It probably even confirmed in Kagome's depressed mind and thoughts that yes all this time that Inuyasha went on patrols he was with Kikyou! How in the seven hells is Inuyasha going to fix this!! I really loved the reaction Inuyasha took with Kagome's leaving him and her loss. I also loved how InuTaro joined him in the cries/howls of despair. Kikyou must have known Kagome was there all along!! Evil Kikyou!! I hope Inuyasha can put two and two together and figure it out!! I wanna see some Evil Kikyou butt kicking!! (perferable by Inuyasha.) Whoa!! Where did Sesshoumaru pop up from?! I can't recall...Am surprised that he appeared. (will go back and re-read the previous chapters.).. errr..kind of looks like a little was missing here. Inuyasha when he transforms..does he not have that Youkai wind around him? (Like when Sesshouamru transformed) sorry! Sorry! I don't want to poke at the story, Cause I love it to bits!! it just seemed a little awkwards here in this section. Wouldn't Sesshoumaru noticed the change in Inuyasha's blood? and was Taro reacting to the change in scent/blood/looks of Inuyasha? Did Inuyasha know that Taro was his by instinct or by scent. I feel awful for asking these questions and poking it. Again it just seemed a little awkward. Hooray for Sesshoumaru for stepping in when he did and providing the direction/instructions that Youkai Inuyasha needed. I LOVED how he told Kikyou to get lost and leave them alone. Loved that scene and loved how Sesshoumaru told Kikyou he knew what she was doing!! Will Sesshouamru provide a warning for Inuyasha, InuTaro or Kagome about Kikyou? Evil Kikyou!! I really love this story!! it really is a masterfully painted image with words that draws the reader into the story and merges them with the characters and their thoughts/feelings!! Great and Totally awesome work!! That has to be the most indepth and accurately depicted scene I had read. Kagome's depression. And you have captured the Japanese sense of honour so exquistely. Kagome was shamed, she felt she was shaming her family. Amazingly and so Powerful!! Can you tell I love this story? and Your Talented Writings!! Truly Amazing! You have written that scene very well. I cheered when Kagome ws able to pull out of the whirlpool that is depression to grab onto the life line..grumbles at least youkai Inuyasha is smarter and more clear about which one he wants by his side. His mate! Love that he charged after her! Finally they talk!! Baka Inuyasha. It took this to get him to say those three words to Kagome. I'm glad Kagome made him clarify his feelings and that he has choosen her. Can't wait to read/see Inuyasha telling Kikoyu to go fly a kite!! Will we be getting some WAFF in next chapter? Please Keep up the most excellent work! You Totally Rock!! Kudos!! Awesome!
| Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: September 16, 2006 00:11 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
...runs squealing one way.... runs squealing and flailing arms the other way... Stops in front pants lightly.. Another chapter from the Literary Goddess!! Yeah!! Whoot!! Woot!! Whoot!! Claps hands happily!! This got me right from the start..:"Kagome examines the own darkness in her heart and Kikyou's dark heart is up to no good." I got shivers even before I read the chapter. Angst!! Angst is very good for WAFF appreciation later on. Very nice opening! I liked how you started with the underlying tension in the situation. Liked how you have Inuyasha being observant with regards to Kagome and her unease at going into the village after Kikyou showed up. (but the poor boy is sooo dense in other matters..) I knew that Kagome will still habour insecurities and doubts about Inuyasha's heart and where she stands. (hopefully Inuyasha is up to the task of reassuring it's her he wants by his side.) I loved how you had Inuyasha think about about Kagome making him confused and so true to his character. But poor Inuyasha still so completely blinded by his past ideals of his pedestal 'Kikyou' he can't see the forest for the trees. He should know Kagome by now that she will always say things to make Kikyou not seem in a bad light because of his feelings for Kikyou. She would always sacrifice something for his sake. Really liked how you had Inuyasha think of other possiblities for Kagome's unease. Very clever Inuyasha. And possible match in Kagome's head? Does she now doubt her place with the village? Does she feel that she is being even more compared to the greatness that is Kikyou now that Kikyou is back? I wonder when the two of them will actually sit down and Talk to each other... whoopssie.. lol...this is Inuyasha and Kagome!! Lol!! It wouldn't be proper if they didn't have the huge stubborn streak. I love how you have Inuyasha willingly want to confide in Kaede!! Love it! How you have maintained the bond between the two of them. Awesome work!! Kudos!! Oh!! I love the scene with the two hanyou teasing Kagome!! Too cute!! Great work!! And Kagome snorted! lol!! Thatw as so Inuyasha like!! I wonder if it'll be noticed? Loved the scene with Kagome giving both a kiss. I can see them both blush a little. Oh my word!! They are soo alike!! Neither knowing what to do with Kagome there! Both miserable without her! That is awesome as well!! Love it!! You kept it so true to the character and very believable in any child of Inuyasha's... (guess it's a gene that Inuyasha developed and passed on..) Inuyasha took Taro hunting! Cute! Would love to read a one shot about their hunting/stalking training. I noticed that you had Inuyasha walking behind his child. I really really love that and it warms me. Too often I see in malls and stores a parent walking ahead of the child with the child scrambling to catch up. Yet another perfectly captured trait of Inuyasha you ahve masterfully written!! Thank you!! Oh my... Kikyou was pretty darn quick to move right into their home and act like she lives there!! Bad Kikyou!! Bad!! Evil!! Hisssss!! Argh!! bangs head on desk.. Inuyasha you baka.. It's going to backfire! Why didn't he ask her what she was doing in his home without asking? I swear.. I think that dog boy loses brain cells or cognitive thinking whenever Kikyou is around. It's a trick isn't it? She is manipulating Inuyasha's feelings and worming her way into Taro's head... I feel for Kagome.. this is one of those times that RT would have Kagome pop back onto the scene and witness. Inuyasha may think it's friendship but he is rather dense. Kikyou is playing for keeps and she has already put Kagome up as the prize/stakes. Oh sweet love a duck!! I was right!! Kagome is going to see!! Oh poor Kagome!! How she must have shattered from it! That is another crushing blow to her soul and heart! I can't believe neither of them noticed/sensed Kagome was back. Oh dear what is Kagome going to do!! What did she write!!
| Reviewed By: xSimplicity [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 22:39 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awe that was kawaii I'm teary eyed right now Keep writing =]
| Reviewed By: fireofinuyashasNSI On: September 15, 2006 20:51 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Oooh, I LOVE babies. I'm so happy for you and your new son, and I'm amazed you got a chapter out THIS early after his birth. Anyway, this chapter was very...deep? I'm not sure how to say. Suicide has been overdone a lot in fanfiction, so I am glad you handled it in a different way. You were able to make us feel the pain of Kagome, but you kept a tight hold on the situation, not letting the plot run away in your head. I love your writing and the way you make everything fit. Thanks for letting all us fans out hear read it! My best wishes to you and your family, fireofinuyashas
| Reviewed By: bluezinthos nsi On: September 15, 2006 13:13 EDT
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congrats on the little one! and one the chapters, a big accomplishment with munchkins running the show. i have to agree with fryloche, you handled kagome's contemplation of suicide well. she had so much internalized, so much that she felt she needed to take on herself so others could remain happy, coupled with the side effects of abuse that i could easily see her drawing that conclusion. just as easily as i could see her deciding the pain it would cause others and the good she could do liveing would outweigh her suffering. she really didn't have a chace to emotionally evolve from the girl she was 5 years prior. she didn't have anyone to nurture the woman she was becoming. she's a mother first but kagome last, she never really got to find herself. i wonder what sesshomaru will reveal to the couple when they return home.
| Title: fawn of the woods (nli)
Reviewed By: fawn of the woods [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 09:17 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i actually like this chapter; please updatre soon. i would like to know what sess does when kagome and inu-kun returns; does inu-kun remember that he left his pup with sess? i can't wait!_!
| Title: About Time!
Reviewed By: Fyrloche [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 08:11 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, it's about time! chuckles I've been waiting on this one for a while and it is well worth the wait. This story is very good, regardless of what the grammar police say. I'm glad that I have been fortunate enough to have found your stories before our favorite guild starts disqualifying stories based upon minor grammatical errors instead of major misspellings and language misuse. sigh Enough about those idiots, on with the paise for this story. As usual, Kagome keeps herself in good shape by jumping to conclusions. As for the suicide angle, I think you handled it well. While I don't think that Kagome would ever do that, there are many who get depressed enough to think about it. And, what she has been through in your story could definately qualify. Abuse works on a persons self esteem and hers was shot. When a person has no self respect, suicide can seem a viable option. Back, a long time ago, when I was a young teenager, I went through a very brief spell of thinking that. Love, support, and God got me through that time in my life so that I never made an attempt, but I did have times of thinking that death would be better than life. I don't have those anymore, so don't worry about me. I just wanted to tell you that I could understand the feeling of wanting to end the pain that would feel like someone squeezing the heart out of your chest. uuhhgg That was a little more soul baring than I intended, but I hope that you got the point that I think you did a good job. Take care and we wil holler at you later. Til then, Fyrloche.
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 07:58 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, congratulations on your baby. And I admire you for writing at all with three little ones under five around, LOL. But, on to the story. I really liked this chapter, as I have all of them. Kagome's greatest fear has always been that Kikyo would steal Inuyasha away from her. And to return from home to see your greatest seemingly being played out before your eyes....AWFUL! Inuyasha has GOT to be smarter where Kikyo is concerned. He dodged a HUGE bullet this time, especially with what Kagome was contemplating, but the underlying problem is still there. He has got to let Kikyo go, fully and completely, or it will evwentually cost him Kagome. I look forward to the next chapter, whenever you can post it.
| Title: Danny Girl
Reviewed By: badgirl093 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 00:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Congratulation!!!!!Now on with the review. This is a really great story. What was Kikyou think she could take Inuyasha and Taro from Kagome? Oh I just love Fluffy's parting words to Kikyou "we will finish this another time" I can't wait till those 2 get it on. I can't wait till your next update.
| Reviewed By: mrskcgoodman [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2006 00:35 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful. It was well worth the wait. Also congradulations on the new addition to your family.
| Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2006 00:16 EDT
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Congratulations, this story has been nominated for Best Romance Fiction (InuYasha/Kagome) at the Feudal Association. Voting continues until the 22nd of September and membership to the group is open! Feel Free to join us! http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ http://feudalassociation.cadkitten.com ~Dark Avenger (aka The Daimyo)
| Reviewed By: the bastard child On: July 25, 2006 00:43 EDT
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oh kikyou why?! so wait whose soul does she even have?! god i'm confused. and kagome was bugging out. good chapter. something interesting is going to happen so isn't it? hmm...
| Reviewed By: Nae On: July 22, 2006 18:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not flaming you, oh no. I think your idea is brilliant and creative and you definately have potential. But there are a few things that just seem ... not right. Bear with me? No offense, but I think you're dialogue is a little off and it's kind of down playing the entire feel of the story. It's just... the endearments are over the top, in my opinion. They're used too much; and I think the dialogue is a little OOC. It doesn't really fit. Also, for some reason you're lemon didn't really strike me. Like, I've read stuff where it goes right into it, but it wasn't a flashback. For the first time, I found myself skipping an entire lemon because it seemed out of place. I'm sorry, I really am, but I just had to point it out.
| Reviewed By: brazen thought On: July 22, 2006 14:38 EDT
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It figures that Kikyo would try to destroy those who have helped her.What an ungrateful bitch. I really hope Seshoumaru comes around and just slices her to pieces..and revives her..and kills her..and revives her,and kills her.... um okay as you can tell I really hate Kikyo.
| Title: Nicely done
Reviewed By: Fyrloche-NSI On: July 22, 2006 10:16 EDT
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That chapter may have been difficult for you to write, but you pulled it off nicely. It seems that Kikyo has forgotten who to be grateful to, but I suppose that it was too much to think that the jewel would stay pure. Even though it is Inutaro and he is himself pure, the jewel was composed of evil intent, as well. I wonder if every good wish or deed performed with the power of the jewel will have to be balanced with an act of evil. snorts Don't mind me. I'm just engaging in one of my favorite pastimes, trying to guess what the author has in mind. By the way, Rumiko Takahashi threw our story lines a real curve there, didn't she? Who would have guessed that particular little twist? Oh, well. I guess we will just have to claim artistic liscense. sigh I know that it won't be much longer until you have your hands full of new baby, so I know that chapters will be fewer and farther between. I'm not complaining. Motherhood is far more important than any of these stories, I just hope that your more avid readers don't get ballistic over the length of time that will be coming between chapters. You know how some people are, they act like we should have no life outside of writing fanfiction for their entertainment. Be sure and let us know when the baby is born and what it is on your livejournal account. chuckles Though I imagine that Doggieearlover will probably beat you to it, if she gets half a chance. Take care, Fyrloche.
| Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: July 22, 2006 00:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Mouth drops open.. oh my Gawd!! Feels her heart thumping painfully in her chest!! That was.... SO Awesome!! I'm still shivering from that chapter. What chills! Thrills!! Awesome work!! Bravo!! Bravo!! With the teaser I thought it was Kagome falling into a deep depression. But no it was Kikyou in her over-jealousness and hatred of Kagome and what she has. I hope that Kikyou can be saved from her pit of darkness. I can't wait to find out what that evil darkness is. Oh... sweet lord above... I think I know who it is... I think I will keep this thought to myself about who it is. And what a realistic touch... Having Kagome suffering from the sickly, greasy "second hand" sex that Kikyou enjoyed. Very true reaction... The need to clean oneself afterwards. Poor Kikyou, so wrapped up in herself blinding herself. and little Taro!! what a twist.. so angsty! and dark. You managed this chapter perfectly. I found myself wanting for nothing. The way you left the description vague with the dark sex scene was perfect. Just the right touch and tastefully done. Some writers would have gone overboard and end up grossing the reader out or offending them. But not you, No this was very, very well done and for your first attempt at dark writing too. Kudos!! Kudos!! The gift of your talent really shows well in this chapter. I sat on the eadge of my seat for the whole chapter.. Heart in throat and anxious. I love it!! You have skillfully kept and maintained the feel throughtout the whole chapter. I did enjoy it very much. You kept the characters true to form and reactions. It is a real pleasure to read. And with Inuyasha snapping at Taro, he must have felt similiar almost like he was back with the Jerk. Poor Inuyasha he does suffer from 'foot up to the knee in the mouth' diease. Liked the way Kagome understood what Inuyasha couldn't say and ease both sets of troubled minds. Kagome so so wonderful that way. A question who was Kagome instructing about the ways of her era? Was it Inuyasha so he can blend in more? or more schooling type for Taro? Sorry for being little dense here. I wonder why Kaede would keep her suspicions about Kikyou... errr.. sighs never mind... Inuyasha is blinder and denser than a blind person walk up a steep hill in the middle of a driving blizzard backwards when it comes to Kikoyu. Even if he did see it, he probrably won't believe it. I fear for Kagome and Taro and Inuyasha. This does not bode well at all. I liked how the seal kept Kaede out. I hope Kagome increases her knowledge and powers before this thing comes into play. Will everyone else beside Kaede sense the unease, the dark that she senses? Will Kaede send word to Miroku and Sangoasking them to come and help protect/ guard? And now we know it wasn't Taro who restored her life.... I love this cliffie!! Thank you so much for sharing this story with us!!! Please keep up the most excellent and Kami gifted work, but don't pressure yourself to do so. We can wait patiently. In fact, waiting will only make it more savoury for the next chapter as we can re-read the other chapters. You Totally Rock!!
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2006 00:05 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter. I look forward to your update (whenever it is) and congratulations on your baby.
| Title: Lot to talk about
Reviewed By: Fyrloche--NSI On: July 06, 2006 10:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Greetings and salutations! Where to begin? I guess that I will start with telling you that I discovered this story from doggieearlover's live journal site. I haven't read your other stories yet; that is on my to do list. This story is very good and I look forward to seeing how it turns out. But, I have a bone to pick with you. Now, let me say that I am not mad or upset, just a little aggravated. A little over a year ago, I came up with this great idea to use in my story 'Reunion' that involved the idea that Inuyasha's mother was the reincarnation of Sesshoumaru's mother. I was very proud of myself for thinking of something that no one else had used, to my knowledge. Then my computer crashed and I haven't been able to write anything for almost a year. sigh It just goes to show that great minds think alike. Just to let you know, I still plan on using that, with appropriate disclaimers since you wrote down the idea first. I didn't want you to think that I was trying to steal your ideas. Now, back to the review of your story. I like Inutaro. He is the best of both parents. I particularly liked the way he handled those bullies. I foresee great things in his future, though you might want to cut back on his wish granting a little bit. What would be the point of a terrible villian if all he had to do was wish it out of existance? I read your teaser. Prediction: Naraku and Kikyo. What else .... what else? Oh, yes. According to doggieearlover, someone is going on maternity leave. Congratulations! May you have a healthy delivery and try not to kill your husband for ever laying a hand on you! My wife made similar threats with our first child. (She was in labor for 36 hours!) But, each succesive child got easier. No, I don't have my own tribe. We stopped at three. Final words, I promise. This is a great story. You are going on my alert list. Always remember to write for the love of writing. Reviews are great ego boosters, but in the end, always be true to yourself. Until next time, Fyrloche
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2006 22:35 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. That was a WICKED twist that I did not expect. Now that Kikyo is alive, though, that is bound to casue a whole lot of trouble. Kagome still clearly has self-esteem issues when it comes to Kikyo. And Inuyasha himself didn't help the situation with the mistakes he made with Kikyo in the past. The one edge that Kagome held (according to her) was that she was alive and Kikyo wasn't. Now that advantage is gone, and I don't see Kikyo conceding defeat just because Kagome is ahead in the game (mated and having a child with Inuyasha). Things just got REALLY interesting and ominous. I can't wai to see what you do with this story next. Excellent.
| Reviewed By: Aiko Fujiwara On: July 02, 2006 05:20 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read what you have up of your fic twice now. The second time just today, and for the first time I was struck with tears. NEVER in all the years I've been reading fanfiction, has a single one made me cry... Whil your grammar isn't necessarily flawless, it does little to distract from the vivid characters, that you bring to life, give a presence to in the real world. You take these already crafted characters, and turn them into something more, with backgrounds, history, and take their torments and make them your own. It's utterly fascinating to read each new chapter. Congratulations on an absolulte masterpiece. Aiko
| Reviewed By: the bastard child On: July 01, 2006 23:30 EDT
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::gasp:: kikyou! hmmm, i love the fact that taro gave sesshoumaru his arm back! that always bugged me... him having only one arm. sesshy demands perfection, and missing an arm is not perfection. so wait, taro can just randomly make unlimited wishes? cuz he brings kikyou back... which is two wishes, so he can just keep on wishing? and, just how the hell did he bring kikyou back to life? wouldn't that require kagome's soul? ie, wouldn't kagome have to die? that really didn't make too much sense. hmm... yea, otherwise, i love it! i love taro's comment on kikyou smelling bad. haha! great job! i can't wait to see where this goes from here.
| Reviewed By: bluezinthos (nsi) On: July 01, 2006 22:34 EDT
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oh dear lord please tell me that kikyou did not trick a child into making her alive again so that she could come between inuyasha and kagome. that's unbelievably wrong. i know she's...err...unstable but please no! kagome has been through too much! i'm fully absorbed in this story and i can't wait to see where you take it!
| Reviewed By: inu hanyou nikkie On: July 01, 2006 21:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another awesome and angsty chapter by Literary Goddess!! Whoot!! Whoot!! Awesome!! Kudos!! Nice touch with the scene involving Sesshoumaru. I thought it was a clever and delightful bonus that you had Taro and Sesshoumaru talk about his mothers' reincarnation and Inu no Taisho. Kudos on this ingenious addition!! So sweet that InuTaro gave Sesshoumaru back his arm. Would that make Sesshoumaru annoyed? He would feel like he has a debt towards Taro for his gift, wouldn't he? Happy that Sesshoumaru pointed out that Taro's display of power will now be like a beacon to all. Don't understand why Taro gave Kikyo back her life. I would have thought that for her to become real again Kagome would have to die. How was he able to do it without taking Kagome's soul from her leaving an empty shell behind? I have my fingers crossed that she didn't trick him in order to steal Inuyasha and Taro away from Kagome. I loved it when Taro said Kagome was prettier and the bestest mom!! So sweet and touching. Poor Inuyasha he has screwed and f***ed up royally again this time. I wonder how he is ever going to make it up, how is he ever going to prove to Kagome that he L.O.V.E.S. her and won't steal her child away abandoning her for the ever perfect, can do no wrong Kikyo. I really applauded Kagome for pointing out rather bluntly how she felt by using Koga as an example. Very nice touch. She is still fearing that Inuyasha is leaving her. I wonder when he is going to see she is dying in her insecurities regarding his feelings to her and Kikyou. He has really broken Kagome, hasn't he? Completely broken Kagome? Can he put all the pieces together? Can he find all the pieces to put together? Didn't Kaede tell Inuyasha that her soul is lost/broken? .."Her spirit is broken and you are the only one with the power to heal her. She has lost herself and calls out to you to find her."... And from what I can see still is partly lost/broken in the fog. Will Inuyasha remember this? will Kaede remind him? I can see that their newest enemy in the future will more than likely use this to their advantage. Broken Kagome will be a virtual sitting, blinfolded and bound fat duck on a silver platter for anyone with a silver forked tongue. Kagome is going to be very tense and cold-ish towards Inuyasha now that Kikyou is in the village until she is assured 100 percent. Their relationship is going to be so strained I have my fingers crossed that they are both strong and stubborn enough to survive it. cringes... I can see Koga swooping in and taking full advantage of the strain/tense to brain wash Kagome... I await on the edge of my seat. I can't wait to see the next chapter. and don't worry about being late... Life happens.. just take your time and let your Muse flow. You Totally Rock!! Please keep up the most excellent work!!
| Reviewed By: enchillada On: July 01, 2006 19:33 EDT
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I really do not trust Kikyo not one bit. I hope she does not try to interfere in Inuyasha and Kagome's relationship.
| Reviewed By: inu hanyou nikkie On: June 25, 2006 16:41 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was really sweet and touching! Whoot!! Whoot!! Whoot!! and WOW!!!!! I loved this chapter's tenderness and WAFF-ness. You did a great job on this Literary Goddess. You have two thumbs up, two big toes up and a whack of cheerleaders flailing their pom-poms at you!!! Magnifico!! Bravissimo!! Kudos!!I enjoyed how Taro delievered messages to Kagome, Mama Higurashi and Inuyasha. A wonderful touch!! And thank you for bringing about the ever forgiving heart of Kagome in the first part of the story. Her strength never stops growing. You handled the subject of Sesshoumaru, Inuyasha's hurting secret and that 'monster's' actions very very masterfully!! Kudos!! It was done with the perfect mix of words and emotions!! It was really pleasing!! I loved the way Inuyasha healed her with his tenderness. Awesome!! Your amazing talent with writing is always a pleasure and delightful to see, read and behold!! Nice wake up call...giggles.. very nice wake up call... The park scene was also just fabulous!!! I loved the way little Taro had his father's scowl. And so pleased with the way he handled the bullies even after all he went through with the 'monster'. And when Kagome explained more of her thoughts and feelings, how she was basically scared and ashamed of herself That was awesome. So very Kagome-ish/Takahashi-ish!! It was all in all very exquistedly executed!! And the ending of the chapter was too cute.. two scoops... Sweet!! Please keep up the most excellent work and I eagerly await the next update!! You Totally Rock!!!
| Reviewed By: AznxPurity [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 23:58 EDT
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Update soon cause i love your story its awesome
| Reviewed By: DYquem NSI On: June 21, 2006 23:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good story. EX got off way way way too easy. I wanted him to be dragged through the well where he could be resurrected and tortured at leisure
| Reviewed By: LadyIvy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2006 11:10 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm happy that everything worked out in the end, but it seems that Inuyasha and Kagome will not have an easy road. Kagome is on the verge of needing a therapist in this fic (what with all her self-esteem issues, and rightly so after 5 years of abuse), but Inuyasha is being incredibly patient and loving with her, something she desperately needs. She needs to face her insecurities, though--they are what led her to deprive Taro and Inuyasha of each other's company for years. She can't keep running from her problems and should have stayed to work things out with Inuyasha when he told her about Kikyo. He worked with her about her husband, so I think he was due the same courtesy. Fortunately, they were able to get beyond that hurdle and have their son returned to them, but what about the next time? Will she keep running or face her fears? I love this story because it has so many possibilities for drama, humor, fluff--everything. This newest chapter was great, and I'm eagerly awaiting the next update!
| Reviewed By: Kristen2 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2006 09:44 EDT
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I'm glad to see you updated and reunited InuTaro and Kagome. I hope at some point you let us know if and how Taro's messages from the other side affected those he gave them to, especially Sesshoumaru. Also, I'm glad you left the friction and tension between Kagome and Inuyasha in the story and didn't have it magically disappear. Allowing them to work through their problems will make their relationship stronger and help them rediscover each other. Good chapter and I look forward to your next update.
| Reviewed By: InuGoddess715 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2006 02:50 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is adorable. I really like how you're letting us get a glimpse of these characters' REAL life situations instead of just focusing on the battle scenes. It is good to see how they interact as a family and to see them accept that things won't be the same since five years have passed. For better or worse, they are different people. I LOVE stories that do this. Too many are like fairytales with everything all hunky dory all the time. This story is the perfect combination of fluff and realism. I can't wait to read more. Please update as soon as you can.
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