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Reviewed By: mysesshou2 On: January 27, 2007 13:54 CST
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ch 28 why doesn't sesshoumaru use his sword to bring back his dead soldiers? just wondering.
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Reviewed By: chipmunK15 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2006 02:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story!
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2006 21:30 CDT
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I agree with Kytari that Rin's mortality adds a sense of realism. I strongly disagree with the idea of reincartion or such to get merk & rin back together when/if she dies. Hawks mate for life but I think even they will mate again if they lose their mate. Indianapolis has a pair of peregrine falcons that come & nest in a particular spot in the downtown area, on one of the high rise buildings. Our parks dept keeps improving the box each year; there is even a falcon cam so we can see what they are doing. they eat the pigeons (hooray, or at least keep them in check) and the downtown square mile makes a great safe nesting spot and abundant food source for them. the point is that a couple of years ago, the female vanished during the year, presumably died, and the male showed up with a new female, "hey honey, have I got a multi million dollar high rise condo and great food for you. come produce chicks with me." In humans, it is always the happy marriages that produce second marriages after a spouse dies. It is the people who are miserable who never remarry. Merk doesn't need to spend the rest of his very long life alone. He can cherish his time with Rin, and if you choose to show she died, he can grieve and move on.
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Reviewed By: Whispering Angel On: April 17, 2006 20:20 CDT
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That was a great story. In ur 3rd story is rin going to be already dead? if she is is she going to be reincarnated(sp?)?? If not is Merkamou going to be alone for the rest of his life?
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Reviewed By: Kytari Ningumi On: April 17, 2006 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked what you did with the end of this story. True, it sucks that people can't live forever in a perfect dream world happily ever after, but the ending had a sense of realism to it and I liked that. You made Rin into a wonderful character and I agree with your statement that it is Rin's mortality that adds to her character. It says a lot for a ningen to make it in a youkai world the way she did. Anyway, I just wanted to let you know that I thoroughly enjoyed it and I look forward to your next piece.
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2006 20:00 CDT
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You know you are a bit "into" a piece of fan fiction when you read "Takeshi and Hideaki were waiting at the bar room table" in another fan fic and for a split second you actually think "why would Hideaki be talking to Hiei?" before remembering 'Oh, yeah, its just a name, not the same Hideaki.' Wierd.
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2006 09:08 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like Mizuki. "Father will arrange a marriage" "no, not like a bag of rice. I will be much more demanding." I'm a little sorry you didn't save Hideaki's son for Mizuki. That would have been an interesting pairing. This business w/ the southern lands is tricky. You haven't really established whether most of the other lords are truly behind Merk or whether they just haven't rebelled out of inertia or fear. He seems to have soldiers, but who REALLY has his back other than Rin? Anyone? A soldier at his back who is there out of obligation or fear may be more dangerous than the open foe in front of him. There have to be spies and traitors in the castle.
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Reviewed By: Princess-in-Training On: April 09, 2006 00:45 CDT
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Rin is down nnooooooooooooooooooo! Sesshy and Kagome make children with completely different personalities. The boy has his mother's personalitiy and the girl has Sesshy's personalitiy. Werid. hahah.
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Reviewed By: Crescent_Moon1021 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2006 19:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hello! I have some questions is Rin aging like a normal human? Or is she going to age like a demon? ur not going to let her die r u??!! I read one of ur other reviews about the healer in "Nothing Left to Lose" wat did happen to him?? i was just wondering. This is a great fic i always can't wait when this story updates! Its nice that jaken came to help rin. Keep writing^_^!
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Reviewed By: Dyquem1 On: April 05, 2006 00:00 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You may be right. perhaps it is better to not let reality rear its ugly head. It was very nice of Sess to give her Ah un, but Jaken was even cuter. "it would be a strain to my lord"
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2006 23:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am logged in but it doesn't seem to agree when I go to reviews. Who knows, has something to do with cookies, I suspect. anyway. . . good job. very sweet love scene. You should think about addressing children. Dogs and humans are both mammals, but hawks are not, and you keep mentioning chicks. will she nurse? will she carry the chick inside the entire time? Of course, magic can explain a lot. Re Mizuki, I can see her saying something like that. Its very amusing.
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Title: Matchmaker
Reviewed By: Eveste On: April 02, 2006 11:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You do the best story I have read in a long time. I cant wait for the next update. I have a question: What happened with the healer in the "Nothing left lose"? I dont remember that his story endet. Would he appear in this story?
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Reviewed By: Princess-in-Training On: March 30, 2006 22:21 CST
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That dragon sounds pretty. This stories couples are funny together but in a good way. Love the story.
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Reviewed By: Dyquem, not signed in On: March 27, 2006 23:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
uhoh. big fight between merk & sess. I'm surprized that merk is allowing his inferior to fight for RIn. Takoshi seemed nice enough, but we really don't know him. I'm am glad you decided not to tie it all up with a neat "oh, & Sora and Takoshi get together." too cliche in my opinion, and frankly unrealistic. If Takoshi was attracted to the fighting female who rescued him, then he'd never go for a bit of nothing in silk. She hasn't been given a three dimensional character, and you made her seem snide when she and other ladies of Sess's court were giggling about Rin. You have given us the impression Takoshi is young. There is tons of time for him to find a mate.
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 26, 2006 06:55 CST
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hey I'm not able to see the pic of merkamou is there any way I can get a link?? I'm dying to see it :)
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