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Reviewed By: maryaxe [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2007 09:25 PDT
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I just started to read this story but I just have to say it's so different reading about places and things that I know! I live in Ocean County, it's so weird seeing places like OCC and Monmouth!
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2007 05:18 PDT
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That's it? But I want to know what happens next! *reframes from pouting like a child*....Anyway I must say you have come a long way. I did read COTD (for the most part). It was nice but it has certain flaws that I am proud to annouce don't show up here. All the characters a pretty well developed. Great one liners/sayings. (I think I'm going to have to use some of them myself!) At no point has the story dragged or felt "spammy". And there is a plot along with interesting little subplots along the way. Some of which I can't wait to see how they play out. Even with my guessing and theories I'm just itching to see what you do with them. The characters all get their fair share of "stage time". Which is hard to do when you have a lot of main characters but you're doing fine so don't worry about that. I really liked that you put the quotes and special vocabulary in this story. It makes it unquie, not many authors do this. Plus it's nice to have something extra to look forward to when I read the story. I'm not really for the whole D/S thing and I thought I'd just end up breezing through those parts but I actually liked them. They were nice and sometimes fun to read. Of course I know nothing of how the true world of S&M or D/S work besides the common knowledge stuff so if it's not all "right" I wouldn't know. And thank you for clearing up the whole concealment charm issue. It bugged me that Inuyasha never smelled that it was Kagome. But after you explained how they work in your story it all became clear. I suppose I should mention how I thought that you would just have Inuyasha dangle the information about Rin over Sess' head in order to get him to help out with Kagome's situation. I should have known better. From what I have learned from your style of writing that would have been to simple. You never do things the "easy" way. Not saying that's a bad thing, it just makes me wonder if Miroku will temparily move in with Sango because he just prefers not to be around Sess that much. Not to mention that even with the new wrinkle in their relationship I just don't see Yash letting Kagome stay anywhere but his house until he repays Ban. I won't go into the overcrowded house issue, Inu ignoring his girlfriend, or how he is going to contact Rin to tell her not to drop by. Hopefully it won't all blow up in Yash's face at the same time but where's the fun in that? Can't wait for the next chapter! I trust that the rest of this story will be as good or better than what I have read so far. Once again congrats on the positive progress I have seen in your writing style. Sorry for any errors in here. We all can't be grammar goddesses...
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Reviewed By: TrinityK (nsi) On: April 02, 2007 00:43 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! Hm, I have a feeling it was more a filler chapter to lay out the major groundwork for what's to come. I still loved it though. lol. So, you really think Inu could take on Bank and win? Wow. To be honest, the way you've written Bank in this fic, I'm not so sure. Seriously, Bank is one f-in scary and creepy SOB. lol. I'm rooting for Inuyasha though. If the author thinks INu could take Bank on, then I believe you. Of course, what you personally think, and what comes out on the screen sometimes depending on the flow and character when you write, is always subject to change. lol. Awesome writing, girl! I can't wait to read more about Sess. And when and if he ever finds out about Rin. And when and if Yash ever discovers that Kags is actually that girl he saved, etc. Love it. heh. ;-)
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Reviewed By: Radhika [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2007 10:24 PDT
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oooo Can't wait until Sess and Rin see each other again!
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Reviewed By: elly86 On: March 31, 2007 19:21 PDT
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hey your story is very good, but i just wanted to know the part that you put in french is literaly translated. Which makes it mad. In english you: shut the hel up, miroku! I'll kill you if you keep it up! which should have been translated as this if you wanted the same effect: ta gueule, miroku! Je vais te tuer si tu continues comme ça! I don't want to be rude by correcting you!
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Reviewed By: Inu_inu_luvluv [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2007 14:11 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
freakin' A honey!!! an awesome chappie, i really don't get it how you can make the 'smallest' things have a meaning in the story later on!! *a talent i wish i had XD* keep posting!!! *offers chocolate cookies *
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Reviewed By: toyas_gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2007 23:37 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it! fantastic chapter! and yay we got to learn more about fluffy! woot!!!! can't wait to see how the living arrangements work.... teehee
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Reviewed By: girl_x_16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2007 18:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, the insults they exchange just keep getting better everytime... Wow that should be interesting with Sess, Inu and Miro all living in one apartment. Hopefully no Real World drama goes down, or maybe it should? I think Rin might shit a brick to know that HE is staying at Inu's!!!! That was a fast update, a little short but just enough to feed my appetite. Anyway, great job, and please update soon!
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Reviewed By: inukag_obsession(nsi) On: March 30, 2007 18:10 PDT
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Oooo.... I loved it!! :D I really wasn't expecting this... like, at all! You keep him under your bed, huh? :D And what do you do with him? LOL
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Reviewed By: cjflutterbye [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 18:04 PDT
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Sess is da bomb! Only the stoic one could make me laugh. Looking forward to more!
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Reviewed By: MistressKagome4U [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 13:29 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lemon or not... It still got my rocks off, so nah.
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Title: "what the..?" double take
Reviewed By: Autumn_the_Reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 13:23 PDT
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wiat wait wait.. back the train up.. i just read silveraliora's review and it just hit me in the head. Could Kenren be jiro's son and not Sesshomaru's? oh boy. You sneaky lil wench! throwing in a twist that isnt obvious until you read someone else review?! *thanks silver for pointing that out* now, lets sit back and eat a bowl of popcorn while pondering this new development.
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Reviewed By: Autumn_the_Reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 13:10 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*groans* i forgot to email you?! shit shit shit.. so incredibly busy, planning a funeral, uhm i have to go out of town for the next three days, but in that time i will for sure write up an adequate email. now on to the review! great chapter of course, i loved absolutely loved the bit with sesshomaru going through the fridge with a wooden spoon that was hilarous. and i love douglas adams so i totally got that part. And now in really curious. who is the missing sibling? what part does this sibling play in the story? when will rin bump into sesshomaru? will it be inuyasha who tells them, or will they do it by themselves.. and whats gonna happen with kagome? Inu mentioned that kikyou cheated on him at least twice, why does he tolerate that? *yeah i know kettle black that whole thing* but why doesnt he just dump kiks and go with kags. BOTH of them are HIGURASHI's.. right? hehe inu can just tell his dad that he switched. *grins* ah well keep up the good work and i will try and do what i said i would.
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Reviewed By: Maloy [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 12:11 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I loved this chapter. You portrayed Sess really well. I also like your Miroku. For once someone didn't make him a sissy and a pushover! He's sly and I love you 'cause you made him very in-character. Another thing that attracts me about your stories is all the details you write. One can FEEL and SEE whatever your chars are going through. Great job! I can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: Oyuki [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2007 10:05 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oooh, bachelor pad! woo hoo! hahaha. hmm, now he's that much closer to rin and... her son. i wonder how that's goin to happen. and what about kikyo? what's going to happen to her? or with her? or whatever. more soon please.
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