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Reviewed By: sovereignty+too+Lazy+to+Sign+In On: October 15, 2012 18:14 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
chapter 31 'that he head' should be 'that her head' (was so confused how the hell can he put his own head in his own lap..??? but if it was that the he should be a his?) He had laid her down so that he head was resting comfortably on his lap, her face gazing upwards at him. |
Reviewed By: chocolate11 On: October 17, 2011 03:37 EDT
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that was just fucking amazing!!!! inuyasha was incredibly sweet to wish for that.god i love your story! |
Reviewed By: Ryo5492 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2009 23:19 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg your fanific was sooo goodXD i loved it=D i dont really know why you called it a dark fic though...wasnt that badXP lol but i loved all the twists and angst...inu's and kags were so awww! lolXD and i heard that some ppl thought that inu was extremely OOC, but i kinda liked the new him after he found himself againXD lol=D well great job!
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Reviewed By: LandraBlaze On: May 17, 2008 00:40 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to say, that I think the fingers should grow back- or at least be starting too. I believe with all the restorative abilities of demons that even Sessomaru's arm is slowly groing back. But an arm would take much longer that a few claws. ^_^
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Reviewed By: foxtale3 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2008 00:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that was a great story. While I am a Kouga a fan, I have not forgotten the demon he was when he first met Inuyasha and Kagome. And while in my own little dream world Kouga would never act this way, I still think you handled his character tactfully and convincingly. Kudos!! I only have two big complaints: first, what about Miroku and Sango? I have a hard time believing they would sit by and let Kagome be raped (though the alternative was death so, I can let that go), but mostly, what happened to them?! They need to know that Inuyasha and Kagome are ok, too! Hopefully that will be addressed in the sequal?? My second complaint is this: your story was so well written, it sucked me in and I completely lost track of time. I read the entire story in one sitting to the detriment of my homework. ^___^ Great job, and I can't wait to read more of your works!
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Reviewed By: Rya35 On: December 21, 2007 23:58 EST
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Hi, I love the story, I'm only up to chapter 31, when I read your message about inuyashas fingers and sesshomarus arm. Sesshomaru got his arm back in the manga once he acknowldged to himself that he no longer wanted tessaiga, and that he could 'stand on his own as a tiayoukai. His sword tensaiga then became a special fang built exspecially for him, bakusaiga. So, inuyasha should get his fingers back because sesshomaru got his arm back. http://adinuyasha.thebrokenconsole.com/archive.html ch. 518. It has a great explanation there.
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Title: bds13
Reviewed By: Bds13 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2007 20:28 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I believe that Sesshomaru's arm does not grow back because in the early episodes he tried to hold the Tesiaga(sp?).He recieved the arm from naraku and If i remember correctly the arm began eattiung away his arm with . . . . fire.then he ripped it off and naraku ended up getting the jewel shard back that he embeded(sp?) in the arm. Inuyasha's fingers should grow back because as of chapter 31 he did not try to replace them. I rest my cast. *_* ^_^
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Title: Bds13
Reviewed By: Bds13 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2007 20:21 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just want to know. For chapter 30, wasn't the Kongosoha called the addament barrage in the anime series?
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2007 15:39 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful story... enjoyed reading it... glad that even with all the bad things that happened it was a happy ending in the end... good job... great work...
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Title: Yay!
Reviewed By: DevilsSin [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2007 23:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*eye twitches* HOLY CRAP THAT'S A GOOD FANFIC XD I've been reading it for the passed two hours :) I really really really really really really really like ittttt :) I won't lie when I say I love Sesshy and Kag together more but this is my second fave couple and it's really hard to find a good Inu and Kags fanfic that doesn't share the same story line. Anyways like I said earlier... I really like it! It's very original and I liked the whole "Youkai" part alot.. even though I love Kouga too, he needs to keep dreaming hehe ... Why did Naraku have to touch those adorable ears thoughhhhh :( It's like.. cute fuzzy ears! Naraku is truly evil! :( Hehe anyways, I'm done with my pointless rambling.. So when's that sequel gna come out ehhh? :) Can't wait!!! Anyways, Love always, Stephy-chan xoxo
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Reviewed By: Lamb [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2007 22:41 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
just a few things I wanted to mention. first, I liked this story - it was a little too dark for me and several times i found i had to stop reading for a moment or skip over sections entirely. I am not one for gore - inuyasha's torture was really too much for me. the only other thing with which i had a problem was the editing. it had major grammer and spelling errors, making it difficult to understand in several spots. other than that your story was good and pretty well thought out and executed. oh and as for those flames - absolutley and completely ignore them. there are ridiculus and obviously childish insults thrown out to draw attention to the flamer. you said several times that all of your characters were somewhat oc (although im not so sure i agree about that - maybe with koga, but thats it. people (and hanyous too) change with every event that happens in their lives, especially if that event is major and in someway traumatic, so to think that after lost memories, torture and near death that inuyasha would be the same abrasive, loud, sometimes unthinking hanyou that we all know and love from the show is idiotic. with time and certain events people change, meaning that how they behave is different from how they BEHAVED, afterwards. and you made it very clear that time and events had indeed occured that would change them - all of them - from the characters represented on the show (which is what you started with)). hmm... it seems to me that i may have just repeated the smae point about three different times there. but i was really irritated by such stupid things as that - especially with all the other fics out there that are so utterly and completly oc and they get no flames saying anything. and you said at the very start that there was going to be oc. and i agree with your logic that although most of us like to beleive koga isn't the bad guy he appeared to be in this fic, that he certainly started out that way, and had the personality for it. I personally am one of the ones that dont think that koga - were he an actual living being(another thing that irritated me about your flames - my god, people it is a STORY! based on fictional characters! IT IS NOT REAL! lighten up) - would do anything like that, if you allow yourself a little bending room in your veiws of people (as, at least in real life, they often can surprise you, no matter what you thought they were or weren't capable of) or characters, then you can usually enjoy a good fan fiction such as this one. ok, i think im done ranting now. sorry about that, but just thought that i should let you know you have my support against those flamers. adn anyways, i figure and extra long review ought to help make up for the lack of ones on here (mediaminer.org), so cheers :)
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Title: JUST FOUND THIS
Reviewed By: Charmander [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2007 11:44 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I AM SUPRISED THAT YOU HAVE SO LITTLE REVIEWS!!!!!!! THIS STORY IS EXCELLENT. NOT ONLY THAT, IT'S ALSO CREATIVE. I ENJOYED THIS FIC
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Reviewed By: lockedincar [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2007 19:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you made the right descion about making Raijin into a human. I think he can find his own peace best that way, since he was no longer just Naraku's creation. Defeating Naraku was likely to cause casualties so it made it more realistic. I loved this story. Thank you for posting it.
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Title: HOORAH
Reviewed By: angelofscreams96 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2007 21:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read the whole story...AND I LOVE IT SO MUCH. Thank you for posting it on mediaminer!!!! I'll start on whatever else i can find written by you tomorrow lol. I havew work to do right now. And given the circumstances that the characters were placed in, they didn't really seem OOC at all to me...but maybe I'm just to tired to notice lol. Great job on writing this and good luck in the future. =)
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Reviewed By: chanda [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2007 00:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm still bumbed you only have 7 reviews...Such a shame. It's a great story and yes I look forward to your sequal. Chanda
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