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| "The Fox and The Phoenix" Reviews/Comments [ 76 ] | | Pages (6): [ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: Luc_Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2011 16:57 EDT
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First, I love you Anaki-chan your so amazing! Second, this girl would go out with Anaki-chan! Third, Chapter 19 is my favorite! | Title: end notes
Reviewed By: Arenja [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2007 16:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! YAYAYAY! *clearly happy...* SEQUAL~ SEQUAL~ SEQUAL~~~~~~~~~~~~!!!!!!!!!!! Ore wa ureshii desu des! ARIGATOU, OOKAMI NO NII-SAN/OOKAMI NO ANIKI! happy hapy happy joy, happy joy, SEQUAL! completly random! *goes to check on the sequal*
| Reviewed By: Arenja [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2007 13:19 EDT
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sequal?! *smiles* I'm happy now ^-^ *goes to look for it on your profile* Despite her dying, I'm really happy about how this ended.
| Reviewed By: jetset6 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2007 21:38 EDT
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yay sequels.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2007 02:50 EDT
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WE WANT A SEQUEL!!! AND ONCE A WEEK I WILL YELL AT YOU TO MAKE A SEQUEL UNTIL THERE IS ONE!!!! I loved this story, and oddly, the way Sanziya went out made sense. I know that this is the way a real warrior would want go out, and it makes sense. So, it's awesome. ANyway, love the story, even the sad ending (I mean, hey, Sarutobi got to live, and that's awesome as anythign else, ya know?) So, to conclude this, WE WANT A SEQUEL, and this story rocks. Deal? Awesome
| Title: *glomp*
Reviewed By: Arenja [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2006 14:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*glomps u* I LUV UR STORY! *cyber hugz u* Chapter 20 was really nice, but chapter 19 was kinda scary. Anyways, keep up the good work! I'm REALLY looking foprward to your next update! (P.S. ALL 10'S!) ^-^
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2006 02:46 EST
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Hmmm, 69 reviews posted. Hmmm, a significant number, eh? For all perverts out there, it is amusing as hell. Still, as usual, the story is good, though the condition Naruto was in when he fought in the finals...That was kinda sadistic to have going on, really. Still, chapter 20 is good, I just wish, and hope, for a happy ending (hey, we all always want those, though it really comes down to knowing when o put the story down to find a happy ending. Neh.
| Reviewed By: Aoidragon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 10:03 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i choose 1.5, i admit that your work isnt very smooth at times, but i'd rather you continue the story rather go through ALL THAT again. get a beta and rewrite it when youre finished if you really think its that bad. i honestly don't notice alot of the mistakes, but that's just me
| Reviewed By: jetset6 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2006 21:47 EST
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| Reviewed By: HoshiHikari On: December 06, 2006 19:59 EST
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hmmm. 1.5 wasnt a rating, but i want you to continue with this. your writing was a little choppy, and your spelling wasnt that great, but thats what a beta is for!^_^ my beta saves my fanfics sooooo many times, really! so PLEASE! continue with it, but try not to make it sound so choppy? the S.S. part was kinda graphic, but yeah, you put a warning too. i think it added a greater depth to the story, and shows why everyone is so messed up. i dont think i could write stuff like that, but hey, i try.
| Reviewed By: Dthehalfdragon On: December 05, 2006 17:26 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
2. I think that it is fine the way it is.
| Reviewed By: Shadowed Knight [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2006 22:09 EST
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1, you haven't been updating in a while and i think it would be better if you rewrite it and go over everythin'. I'll be waitin'
| Title: the fox and the phoenix
Reviewed By: g-boys [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2006 20:15 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
answer to the poll 2 leave it thae way it is.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2006 19:58 EST
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2.) I want the story to be continued. Maybe going back to edit things would be good, but not now, do that once the whole prject is done. Right now, the story is good as is (majorly fucked up, but this is Naruto's past afterall, and a bad one. Personally, I am disgusted by the detail, but I know it can go much worse, and that this isn't quite as bad as it can get. Anyway, keep writing, even with all the shit written, this is one of the better stories out there, and I want to read more. THough one request, no snake molestation, I am SOO sick of a pervery, rapist Orochimaru.
| Reviewed By: AuronX [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2006 01:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has to be one of the most twisted fanfics that I have every read, and I mean EVER! It's more twisted than this one fic I read where one of the characters was forced into bondage! What's more impressive is that you made even my stomach churn and I laughed at some of the more grusome scenes in movies like Saw and Hellbringer. WOW! Enough of that. In any case, you have an incredible concept for your writing but it is far from being smoothe. Get a beta or proof read your own writing cause it damn near ruined an otherwise excellent fic at times. If you want to keep the style you've created then be sure to get it flowing a little better. Right now it's like driving down a very bumpy road at times. Just work at it and it'll get better. As for fucking with your characters minds...you don't have any sense of subtlty do you? Not that I mind, but wouldn't it be a lot better if you kept things hidden behind a deceitful facade and then brought the insanity to the surface in a way that nobody expected? Okay, so that just happens to be the style that I've written my fic in (and it is no where near as fucked up as yours but still fucks with my main characters mind to get her to turn out the way she needs to). In any case, good job over all, but PLEASE try to work on your spelling and smoothing out your style. I look forward to reading more of your fic (and dropping the not so subtle hint that you might like my own). I'll be waiting for more!
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