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| "Slave" Reviews/Comments [ 76 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Title: yo
Reviewed By: CrimsonInHumanBlood [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2007 16:52 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol geez you get all the nice long reviews! ^_^ very nice to know that i'm doing a great job working with you on your grammer and stuff and you of course doing an excellent job writting it all ^_^; I think if you do make another story, you should just really be laid back with it, meaning that you should make it on your own and not going by the storyline as well as japanese words like what you have. sure its a great touch but most can find it annoying having to scroll all the way down the page just to find a word, ya know? well its still really great! I can't wait to get your next chapt to read and beta- cheers ^^
| Title: reader/writer
Reviewed By: SoSick OfNyQuil On: February 21, 2007 17:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like your writing style it's very original and it flows throughout the story. It's very creative i've loved it since the first chapter and i've always found it entertaining to read. it keeps me on my toes..i happen to love a submissive inuyasha and a very dominant sesshoumaru...your story entranes both my romantic side and my anger when you describe sesshoumaru's cold attitude but also yo portray a part of him that's believeable in character to how he usually acts. He's not some sort of sop who instantly goes from cold to hot in 3 seconds. His caring fits in with his regular chilly demeanor and that's hard to find in fanfiction writing because writers tend to rush along the feelings and emotion when the character usually needs more time or even if it doesn't and the feeling is there, it should be believable with the actual story line. I enjoy your story and will continue to read as faithfully as i can so please keep the chapters coming. devoted fan, SSONQ aka Sky
| Reviewed By: Cat695 On: February 20, 2007 11:59 CST
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I like the lemon sex scenes, you have talked about the blood sports, but you haven't had any bondage or toy play. Inu tries these on himself, but he hasn't had Sess do any of them. How about a little leather play or toys as Sess watches Inu cum.
| Reviewed By: Nikkie23534 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 21:44 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well worth the wait! That was so HOT! I'm so glad you are back. Don't leave us hanging like that, it was mean! Great chapter, update soon!~B reading U!
| Reviewed By: Jester08 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 20:51 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter....I'm so glad you updated!!!!!!! The lemon scene was very well written!! I can't wait to see what happens next, so update as soon as possible please!!! ^_^
| Reviewed By: Shigure-san [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2007 04:47 CST
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heya ^_ In re-reading your fic, I realised i didn't answer your question in your previous chapter. the 2 Guys i think could be The thunder brothers, or even Tsukyomaru and somebody, that could be quite interesting. ^_^ Neways, update soon! -- Shigure-san
| Title: ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Reviewed By: fawn of the woods [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2007 18:59 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
plz review i haveta know who they are good story by the way a littke more insight into sess feelings would be useful.
| Reviewed By: Nannami Hikari On: January 30, 2007 08:36 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ne, ne, your story is EXCELLENT! Sorry i have not reviewed before but my computer is a bit of an ass when it comes to the review page ^_^ I like your references to the japanese culture and the use of language etc. I think that it serves the story quite well, after all, the slave-trade business requires alot of the japanese phrases and names to deal with, ne? I love the SesshoumaruxInuyasha pairing *drools*, and your story involves alot of the anime's characters as well, like Tsukyomaru and The Thunder brothers, which I think is cool lol. But I think my favorite 'extras' were Jakotsu and Bankotsu ^_^ I feel so sorry for Inuyasha becoming Sesshoumaru's 'play-thing' *growls*. I also like how you've explained Inuyasha's out-of-character reasons, I normally don't like authors writing characters too OOC, but you've developed them well and it's quite reasonable for Inuyasha to behave as he does. You've got some talent! Neways, you haven't updated in a while, ne? Are you having some writer's block or something? From one author to the next I'll just throw some ideas at ya (since I like people doing that to me when I'm stuck or lacking in inspiration to write). You could have Inuyasha get accidentally pregnant (since I notice Sesshoumaru hasn't made any references to knowing Inuyasha can become pregnant), and Sesshoumaru can get into a whole guilt-trip confusion over it all. Just a suggestion, since I think Sesshoumaru deserves some confusion at the moment lol. Oh, and can you please let little Inuyasha please get some help with his *blushes* "problem" if you get what I mean *blushes darker* poor little guy needs a break ^_^ Anyway, I think the two demons should be the Thunder brothers (cause they're so good at stirring stuff up ^.^), either way, make Sesshoumaru a bit nicer and stick up for Inuyasha a little more, all this 'bullying' tugs at your heart some lol. Keep up the good work and please update soon! ~*~ Love Nannami Hikari (Nanna-kun).
| Reviewed By: Nannami Hikari On: January 30, 2007 08:35 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ne, ne, your story is EXCELLENT! Sorry i have not reviewed before but my computer is a bit of an ass when it comes to the review page ^_^ I like your references to the japanese culture and the use of language etc. I think that it serves the story quite well, after all, the slave-trade business requires alot of the japanese phrases and names to deal with, ne? I love the SesshoumaruxInuyasha pairing *drools*, and your story involves alot of the anime's characters as well, like Tsukyomaru and The Thunder brothers, which I think is cool lol. But I think my favorite 'extras' were Jakotsu and Bankotsu ^_^ I feel so sorry for Inuyasha becoming Sesshoumaru's 'play-thing' *growls*. I also like how you've explained Inuyasha's out-of-character reasons, I normally don't like authors writing characters too OOC, but you've developed them well and it's quite reasonable for Inuyasha to behave as he does. You've got some talent! Neways, you haven't updated in a while, ne? Are you having some writer's block or something? From one author to the next I'll just throw some ideas at ya (since I like people doing that to me when I'm stuck or lacking in inspiration to write). You could have Inuyasha get accidentally pregnant (since I notice Sesshoumaru hasn't made any references to knowing Inuyasha can become pregnant), and Sesshoumaru can get into a whole guilt-trip confusion over it all. Just a suggestion, since I think Sesshoumaru deserves some confusion at the moment lol. Oh, and can you please let little Inuyasha please get some help with his *blushes* "problem" if you get what I mean *blushes darker* poor little guy needs a break ^_^ Anyway, I think the two demons should be the Thunder brothers (cause they're so good at stirring stuff up ^.^), either way, make Sesshoumaru a bit nicer and stick up for Inuyasha a little more, all this 'bullying' tugs at your heart some lol. Keep up the good work and please update soon! ~*~ Love Nannami Hikari (Nanna-kun).
| Reviewed By: Shigure-san [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2007 06:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a great story. I realise I might've said this before, but I didn't always like the Sess/Inu pairing, But I read a few good stories and they got me into it! This is amoung one of the best Inuyasha fics I've read for a long time *adds to favourites list* ^_^ I felt so sorry for poor Inuyasha when you explained Sessh's decision as for how to deal with him. I think you've kept Sesshomaru very in character, which is good ^.^ Neways, I'm rambling, so please just update soon, if I don't find out what happens soon I might just have to cry.....AGAIN! LOL. You're a great writer, keep up the work *gives medal* Heheh. Shigure-san x chuu x
| Title: Happy Seasons, and Bye
Reviewed By: Sade Ness On: December 19, 2006 13:21 CST
Comment/Review:
Hello everyone, I want to thank You All, you're great. Wish you All a wonderful End of year and Celebrations... Happy Seasons, Happy New Year, Merry Xmas etc... etc... Also... I want to say that I love my belove Beta and I want thank her here for her wonderful job and pacience with me and my crazy ideas. I am going on vacation (kinda end of year family trip) and hope be back and sane in January 2007, and send her my chapter(10) ( that I will try to finish till there. Maybe I coudl start and finish chapter 11, only God Knows.) God bless you all Kisses. Denise (aka) SadeNess (aka) La Verseau (suffering with the hot Brazilian summer, on the beach, for a while.)
| Reviewed By: Tai-san On: November 04, 2006 21:45 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy Chibi not those two again. Please update soon I have to know what Sesshomaru will do. Poor Inuyasha i feel bad for him having to be treated so badly. I hope Sesshomaru treats him better someday. Thanks for posting. Best wishes and good waves.
| Title: a reply to " inuyashas honey"
Reviewed By: sadeness [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2006 09:40 CST
Comment/Review:
Hi and TKS! Hi inuyashas honey, I am writing you to thank you for reading my story. I am also asking you to please, forgive me about my lack of knowledge in grammar. I am working on this with my beta, so please be patient with me. I have only sent without a beta review chap one and two, all the others were posted just after my beta have checked on them. Since I am not a Native English speaker, writer or reader; I do believe it is correct when my MS-Word grammar and spell check is not red and after my beta send it back to me. Once more, please forgive to not make my story as good as you wanted and THANK you for reading it and reviewing it anyway and First Of All to be Honest and point out my mistakes. Thank you very much. Sade Ness.
| Reviewed By: inuyashas honey [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 15:16 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
I really enjoy your story. It's really dark and sexy. My only beef is with your grammer. It is horrible. Please proof read your work before posting it. There are so many grammatical errors, that it makes it hard to enjoy the story. I would be more than happy to help you if you need it.
| Title: Thanks!
Reviewed By: tinkrbell3 On: October 26, 2006 01:20 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. You're wonderful, I feel like I've been waiting forever and foever's finally come. Awe, little Inuyasha... It's those hungry, raping bastards Hiten and Manten isn't it? It's gotta be....right? Thanks, be waitin'.
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