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| "The Hybrid" Reviews/Comments [ 34 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] | Title: can't wait, but have to...
Reviewed By: Required Name On: December 25, 2006 01:19 EST
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Tens across the board, as usual, not that I actually need to fill them in anymore. That cliffhanger after 13 was amazing, had I not had Chapter 14 to move onto right away I most likely would have aphyxiated and died on the spot. Amazing job on that one. I like how the plot is thickening, thanks for the heads up on Bulma + Turles. I also like how you've introduced Chichi and 17, they make everything more complex and complicated which will, of course, make this fic go farther than it would without them and THEIR chunk of the plot. So, thank you once again for another, (once again) fabulous update. I love how the characters' relationships have different layers and aren't just a bunch of straight bullshit. But - and this is a good thing - you sure as hell are keeping us on our toes. This is one of your (in my eyes) cooler updates since we've been pining for this moment since the beginning of Part II. As the title of my review says, I can't wait for Chapter 15, but I must. I'm going away for Christmas and won't have a computer with me...so I'll read it when I get back after New Year's. I really can't wait, but, alas, I must. So, in the meantime, Merry Christmas, Happy New Year, and Happy Updating...!!!!
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2006 15:58 EST
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Evil, evil cliffhangers!! I'm soooo glad you updated! I've been checking back everyday. :) A very interesting chapter indeed. The tension between Bulma and Celipa is so thick it's almost coming off the screen at me. Great job with the details! I can't wait to get more into why that is the way it is. And what an interesting combination of characters you have in the "team" back on Chikyuu. I wonder how that group got formed. I love the way you keep the characters just elusive enough yet inviting enough to keep me reading. I can't wait to see how all these meetings/introductions turn out and merge into, what I'm sure is going to be, a much bigger cause. I also think you are handling writing conversation better. In the beginning chapters it could get a little choppy at times, but lately (and especially in this chapter) I think it flowed very nicely. Good work! I'm glad more people are reading and reviewing. It really is a great story. As always, I'm sitting on the edge of my seat waiting for more!
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Reviewed By: Required Name On: December 08, 2006 17:02 EST
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Thanks for the comment...I'm not registered on here so I just came up with a fake name. I do also enjoy Vegeta's sense of humor...and I liked the little changes in his demeanor since he's been thinking of dear Bulma. I like that Bulma has been with someone else - not to say I like B/OC, but if she wasn't involved with anybody else EVER everything would be TOO perfect. And I expect angst...lol I'm sick. I like that you're taking the time to explore each of the characters, just jumping in makes the fic end up flopping...or become a one-read. With really good long ones I get some food and sit and read them again if I already have, lol. Yours will be one of those, I'm sure. I'm truly very excited for the next chapter. So...I wait...with bated breath. Heh. Thanks!
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2006 17:12 EST
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Thanks for the wonderful comments! I'm glad you get some use out of the things I say. Vegeta pondering on Bulma's changes: I love it! Because the characters are so different, their relationships will have very different layers to them, so I think it's cool that he doesn't just have feelings for her because she's Saiyan and all the regular stuff, ya know. You see so many stories where Bulma is trying to get into Vegeta's head, but this could be an avenue to provide Vegeta to be more exploratory with what makes Bulma tick. Great change up! I also like the way you are portraying and putting the believability into the pulling connection between them, even after such a long time and such a short lived childhood together. Their first meeting should be quite interesting. As always, we know Vegeta will have layers upon layers to his personality, but kudos for giving Bulma layers too. I always thought she was a much more in depth person than people tend to give her credit for. Much less grammatical errors this time too! Oh, and I also think the Bardock vulnerability over not being able to help his son is good too. Once again, we mostly see Bardock portrayed as impenetrable, so that's something that shows he has some emotions underneath that exterior. As the chapters go along, I can see the improvement in the details and wiring of the story. Great stuff! Can't wait for more!
| Reviewed By: kim_carpe_diem_nter-Crazy Chick On: December 04, 2006 15:38 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
No problem man. You're the only one who posted their fic on the board... Besides, I had seen the fic before then, and wanted to read it, but decided it would be corny. I'm happy to say that I was wrong. This isn't like any other fic I've ever read. I'm demanding that you update update update, or I'll tell Tom! And Tom will kick you arse! :D
| Reviewed By: future author On: December 03, 2006 15:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'm beyond happy that you starting the second part to the story. i like the angst of the story as well. It seems to fit, especially since they're saiyains. i love what you're doing with the story so keep it up. I can't wait to read more so update soon and keep up the good writing.
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Reviewed By: Required Name On: December 02, 2006 02:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahh! Awesome! I've totally been waiting for this. I can't wait til the reunion, angst is always...fun, haha. And I like the violence, not to sound sick or anything, but it's a nice touch. It shows more that they've matured and they aren't crappy at it, Bulma and Kakarrot were quite suave. I also like the fact that Vegeta IS interested in Bulma and hasnt' become what most fictions make him - er..boring! He doesn't seem boring and I love the guy, so when people make him boring it's terrible. Chapter 13 soon? I do hope you mean it. Thanks for this, great read, love it. Do continue.
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2006 07:58 EST
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I love the new direction! Nothing is wrong with a little angst and drama. I think it's appropriate for the situations I'm sure they've been in between part 1 and part 2. I also like the fact that Bulma is a skilled fighter as well as a genius. It will be interesting to see how you keep Bulma and Kakkarot in pretty close character, personality wise, with the show since this story is so different. The only constructive criticism that I could offer is that you had a few grammatical errors, but not enough to make me not want to read. Great job! I can't wait to read to more!
| Reviewed By: kim_carpe_diem_nter [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2006 13:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, this is "That Crazy Chick" from myspace, the owner of "Dragonball Haven". I decided to read your story, and I gotta say, great job! Goodluck writing part two! I can't wait to read it!
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Reviewed By: Required Name On: November 19, 2006 19:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really really awesome. I can't wait for Part II, when they're older it just makes everything more complicated...yay, complications! I hate that nobody's reviewing this one (and it's probably because there's no sex). It's going to be more amazing than it already is very soon. I'm really thrilled for Part II, Part I was fantastic alone. I really like where it's going, and I have a feeling there'll be a long-awaited reunion between Bulma and Vegeta. I love those kids, reading about them makes me happy. So, THANK YOU so much for writing this fic, it is FANTABULOUS and I cannot wait for Part II. I will be waiting!! (Not necessarily patiently, but I will be waiting!) Til then...Thanks!
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 14:20 EST
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Ooops! I spelled insight wrong! ;)
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2006 14:18 EST
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Evil, evil cliffhanger! Here I am, eating my french toast, reading, on the edge of my seat and ... THE END!! Man, you had me going there. :) Can't wait to see what's going to happen next. I can't believe no one else is reviewing. I think it's a cool story with loads of potential. I like the idea of having the story in parts too. And the relationship between Vegeta and his mother is quite interesting. I'd love more insite about that, and all the animosity between him and his father. Please, by all means, keep going. I'll review! :)
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2006 19:48 EST
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Oooh! Wouldn't that be an interesting twist, if both Vegeta and Bulma were in Frieza's army. Man, I bet you could have loads of fun writing that! Anyway, wherever the twists and turns lead you I'm liking your direction. Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: artchic [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2006 11:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Since you didn't seem to have a lot of reviews I wanted to leave my thoughts anyway, even if you don't necessarily need it to continue writing. I haven't read many "Bulma as a saiyan" stories that are really written with very much depth to them. I think you're doing an awesome job of believability and character development and also with keeping the characters somewhat true to their "nature." It will be interesting to see how they all grow up together and further develop their personalities. Good job so far! Keep it up!
| Reviewed By: chiku [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2006 12:09 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This sounds like its going to be quite a good story, please keep up with it, i cant believe you haven't got any reviews on this site for this story, please dont let the baka's stop you from continuing...good fic
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