| "Won't You Please Stay With Me?" Reviews/Comments [ 154 ] |
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Reviewed By: nekomew78 On: March 05, 2007 13:52 CST
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ITS BEEN OVER A MONTH NOW AND STILL NO UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!WHATS WRONG????I WANT TO READ MORE!!!
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Reviewed By: High Priestess On: February 20, 2007 02:01 CST
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LOVE IT!!!!DO MORE A.S.A.P.!!!! High Priestess
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Reviewed By: Drakeluvr On: February 10, 2007 03:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed the style of the story however I believe that it was writen too fast and not checked over well if at all before it it was posted. I saw numerous spelling errors in chapter 4 I believe, where they go to London. For example, waitress suggests female, and there were several instances to them being referred to as a man among other things. The style of writing refers more to the chosen section break of the character names for the story being repeated to make a page break all scrunched up - astrisks spaced a tab with a part and centered would be better for making the break as it does not detract from the story. Creativity, originality and enjoyment factor are rated higher though not too much so as for me at least, the style along with spelling and grammar issues detract from both. The over all score I gave was reached by adding each and dividing by four. Because the score was a half number, I made it whole by adding. On a side note that I did not put into my rating - a character rarely looks at themselves in a third person... i.e. Harry jumped with a start when Severus caressed Harry's side. For all intents and purposes, even though this form is likely used to dispell confusion when dealing with a same sex relationship, it should read: Harry jumped with a start when Severus caressed his side; without the bold and italic notation of course. Over all, the story is good and I look forward to more, hope this helps.
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Title: YAY!
Reviewed By: Lunitic Pandora [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2007 16:03 CST
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lol, just discovered the update today..still a really good fanfic! keep at it, and update soon!
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Title: WAHAY
Reviewed By: Nekomew78 On: February 06, 2007 12:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG who hurt Snape?????? (kills snape's attacker and rescues snape) MwAHAHAHHAHA he's mine now. Harry: NOOOOO SNAPE COME BACK!.....end fantasy. Um........ great update, I love this story and please dont take so long on the next chapter!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2007 10:58 CST
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this was really great thanks for updating.
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Reviewed By: DreamingOfTomorrow [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2007 13:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You updated! I was so happy when I found out you updated. Don't worry, you're effort to update isn't wasted^^ Great Chapter^^
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Reviewed By: nekomew78 On: February 02, 2007 11:54 CST
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UPDATE NOW!!!!!! ITS BEEN WAY TOO LONG YOU NEED TO UPDATE NOW!!!!!!! PLEASE DO IT NOW> DONT WORK ON ANYTHING ELSE UNTIL THIS STORY IS FINISHED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!! !!!!! !!! !! !
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Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2007 21:41 CST
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update please
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Title: you rock
Reviewed By: jujubean On: January 10, 2007 20:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry its been a while since i've review. but could you please update all your stories(Gay Sanctum, The Play, Turquoise Bracelet, Fire and Ice, and Won't You Please Stay With Me?). your stories rock i love them all. thanks for being the best writer i know. :)
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Reviewed By: Nekomew78 On: January 03, 2007 14:59 CST
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Hey! Glad you updated. Its me again and I absolutly adore this story! its a masterpiec all its own! continue to update as soon as possible!
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Reviewed By: spitfire17268 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2007 01:58 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope you update soon because I love your story.
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Title: this chapter was HOT HOT HOT Smokin HOT
Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2007 22:14 CST
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OMGosh that kiss was hot. Harry friends are pure idoits, anyway every chapter gets better and better. i hope you don't forget about updating.
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Reviewed By: Nekomew78 On: December 28, 2006 22:00 CST
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Oi! whats up? Why no update!!! its driving me crazy!!!!!!!!! C'mon mate, i love this story! there is a lot to it and I want to read more. Happy Christmas and Newyears.
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Reviewed By: Yami_hime [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2006 07:28 CST
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and again a cool chapter!!! Merry Xmas!!
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