| "Unexplainables" Reviews/Comments [ 57 ] |
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Reviewed By: Jadedbest [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2002 15:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sniff* *sob* *wail* I-I *deep shuttering breath* Just hold on and give me a minute. *blows nose loudly* How could you- I mean- Why?! Why do you keep killing off- *is overwhelmed by her grief* You know I just can't talk to you about this right now. I have to go and console Veggie because I know he's just- well...inconsolable at this moment.
Vegeta: Not really.
JB: Yes you are! You're just trying to hide your feelings.
Vegeta: Really I'm perfectly all right. It's a story Jadedbest. I'm sure if you go read AD the woman will be perfectly healthy.
JB: *sniffs* All right, that's just what I'll do. And she better be okay when I get there, too. *glares at Kahlan Nightwing*-JB |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2002 15:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
*sniff* *sob* *wail* I-I *deep shuttering breath* Just hold on and give me a minute. *blows nose loudly* How could you- I mean- Why?! Why do you keep killing off- *is overwhelmed by her grief* You know I just can't talk to you about this right now. I have to go and console Veggie because I know he's just- well...inconsolable at this moment.
Vegeta: Not really.
JB: Yes you are! You're just trying to hide your feelings.
Vegeta: Really I'm perfectly all right. It's a story Jadedbest. I'm sure if you go read AD the woman will be perfectly healthy.
JB: *sniffs* All right, that's just what I'll do. And she better be okay when I get there, too. *glares at Kahlan Nightwing*-JB |
Reviewed By: Susan On: June 26, 2002 12:46 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Holy Sh*t! I can't believe you killed Bulma! This is a lousy way to get your jollies, but masochist that I am I will still continue to read this great story in hopes that you will redeem yourself. No I'm not angry, I just want to cry. Poor Bulma gave her life up for the man she loves, and I think it's just dawning on Veggie that he felt more for her than he cared to admit. So now that I'm thoroughly depressed I'm gonna go read LPP again for a good laugh. Don't take too long in updating this, ok? |
Reviewed By: Masamune On: June 26, 2002 11:51 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was an EXCELLENT chapter! wow! absolutely spectacular, as always.
you update so quickly too!
you'll do great with your junior english class, of course. you've certainly shown enough potential with your incredible stories! |
Reviewed By: mizu megami [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 17:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EVIL! EVIL PPL ARE DIPRIVING ME OF THE REST OF THIS GREAT FIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *bows to Kahlan Nightwing* oh great Kahlan Nightwing plz let this unworthy slave read more of this fic (LOL. thats it i really need to lay off the sugar. hehehe)
:)mizu:P |
Reviewed By: danieloflorien [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 16:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
it would be funny to find out that the answer was being supersaiya-jin and not love... that would be one hell of an ending... |
Reviewed By: danieloflorien [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 16:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
once again your writing is perfect... killing Bulma was a good plot twist |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 11:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O.O!!! Oh my Kami! You killed Bulma?! Well, I hope you enjoyed yourself. :P lol
Now they are on their way to New Namek. Will Vegeta find the answers he's looking for have been right there within his reach all the time?
As for the voice.... I wonder... hmm...
Can't wait for the next update. Proud of me? I'm all caught up. :) |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 10:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What a great way to start the chapter! Yamcha's head hitting the control panel. :)
Vegeta: Do you think it knocked some sense into him?
ssjprincess: Now that was a silly question.
Vegeta: *shakes his head* Your right. Of course it didn't. I don't know what came over me?
ssjprincess: Straighten up, and don't let it happen again!
Vegeta: Onna? O.o Did you forget who you were talking to?
ssjprincess: O.O Oopps! Let's forget I said that. Anyway, back to the story. hmmm...isn't it obvious Vegeta? You went into that thread room looking for answers, and both times you found Bulma. Could she be your answer?
Maybe the unexplainables are variables in the human psyche? Or in this case, the Saiyan psyche?
Vegeta: O.o onna? What did you just say?
ssjprincess: *shrugs* I had a moment of clarity there, but it's okay now, it's gone. :P lol
Vegeta: Thank Kami. That was eerie.
ssjprincess: *chuckles* Anyway, I digress, back to the review. Yes, Bulma, try the frying pan!
Vegeta: *rubs his head* Don't!
ssjprincess: *chuckles* *gasp* The dragonballs are nothing but crushed glass now. I wonder who this female alien is? What did the Hitori do to her to make her hate them so? And what is the device she has? What's going to happen to Vegeta?
Vegeta: Why won't you shut up?
ssjprincess: *ignores the arrogant prince* Loved the chapter, on to the next. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 09:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent chapter!
The scene in the thread room was interesting. He is his old, normal, grouchy self there.
Vegeta: Hey! I'm not old.
ssjprincess: o.O; Ahhh...yeah. Anyway, I agree with Bulma's decision to go ahead and find the dragonballs and wish Vegeta back to normal.... well, maybe not normal, but back to the way he was anyway. :) I mean, his condition is only deteriorating, so an angry Vegeta is better than a dead Vegeta.
I wonder what this information that Piccolo knows is? Why didn't he want to tell anyone? Hmmmm....
Vegeta: *reading the A/N* Well, Kami damnit! Why can't it happen in this fic? But... hold on... *smirks* I get to be that way in another fic? Excellent.
ssjprincess: Remind me not to let Vegeta read that fic...it might give him ideas.
Vegeta: Trust me, Onna, *smirks evilly* I'm already filled with ideas.
ssjprincess: O.O ummm...okay..next chapter..
^_^ |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2002 08:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! Sorry it took so long for me to get here. *sighs* Truthfully I intended to get here sooner, but my daughter was sick over the weekend, so I wasn't able to stay online for long periods of time. I didn't want to start this unless I was able to give it my full attntion.
Vegeta: *makes a talking motion with his hand then rolls his eyes* Leave the woman alon and review, Onna.
ssjprincess: *waves a hand in vegeta's direction blowing him off*
Vegeta: O.O *chuckles*
ssjprincess: Shut up, Vegeta. That's *not* what I meant! Hentai!
Vegeta: *chuckles*
ssjprincess: *lets out a deep, exasperated sigh* Anyway, I tried to review this over at ff.n, but something's still wrong over there. You can't leave a review. *grumbles* But that's a whle different issue. I'm here to review so I guess I should start. *smiles*
Vegeta: *mockingly* You think?
ssjprincess: *rolls her eyes* On with the review....
*looks around for Bulma's time machine* Three years? Gone? I wonder what happened in those three years? Did Vegeta find any of the answers he was looking for? And I'm sure that in those three years there is some valuable information that will be remembered later. :)
Poor Vegeta. The Hitori contracted a virus and now he is the last. And from the way it sounds, his condition is not so good.
Vegeta: Onna, I am stronger than some stupid virus.
ssjprincess: I hope Bulma is able to come up with something. But I guess there is one bright point in this chapter.
Vegeta: And that would be?
ssjprincess: Goku said via. *chuckles* Not only said it, but knew what it meant! he could use it properly in a sentence.
Vegeta: *sweatdrops*
ssjprincess: Anyways, off to the next chapter. |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2002 15:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay so I reread chapter 6 and I'm not sure to be happy or frighten. Are you going to posion my Veggie or give B-chan a good kill *rubs hands together* or have some cute Veggie/B-chan moments. *sighs* Guess I won't know til you update.
Chains? *grins* Guess you know me too well. Well my original intent was selfless.
Vegeta: Lair
Well if you make the blind date hope it goes well. Well til next update.-JB |
Reviewed By: Masamune On: June 22, 2002 09:26 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry i haven't reviewed lately! one word: EXAMS.
i just finished reading all your updates. unexplainables is incredible! your writing is so professional! no spelling mistakes, grammatical errors, liberal use of not often used words... you're EXCELLENT! you and JadedBest are some of the best writers on mm.org! hee hee!
your originality is awesome! i love the whole cyborg idea. did i say that in a previous review? oh well, it's worth saying again if i did!
WICKEDLY COOL! |
Reviewed By: Meow On: June 22, 2002 03:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yea this one is my favorite...it's right up there with that mirai timeline one. Sorry about not reviewing. I didn't know you had updated. In answer to your earlier question, yea I DO think this story's more interesting that what happened after the Freeza saga...even more so than the original japanese version. (which I've seen!) but that's just my opinion I guess. :p Anyways, this was another fantastic chapter, and I hope to read more! Go ahead and put me on your mailing list so I can keep up with the chapters as they come out.
Here's my e-mail Meowy19@aol.com
Now that fanfiction.net is FINALLY back up, you can update your stories over there and get more reviews. People always seem to get more reviews at fanfiction.net than here. On the other hand, it's kind of nice to be able to review and then read your response in the next chapter which may be a bit overwhelming at fanfiction.net if you've got too many reviews. Oh well, I'm rambling now. I'll shut-up. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: June 22, 2002 03:21 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're right. I do sssssoooooooo want to kill you. That was one hell of a cliffy. A busted dragonball? That's cold blooded. And who's the new twit? All in all, it was a great chap. I loved the way Picollo got under Veggie's skin. Poor Bulma. She's trying so hard to help V Man and it looks like her efforts are gonna go down the toilet. Pls update soon so maybe I can get some answers. |
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