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| "A Matter Of Choice" Reviews/Comments [ 39 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2008 07:21 CST
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Whoo, interesting chapter. Well, if this happens and it happens the way they hope I wonder how Demetriov would feel. A vampire, but not by his hand. Mmh, it doesn't help that I know the big plot twist, you know that right? *snigger* Anyway, loved the Demetriov insight, more insight, more insight, yeey. It occurs to me that while he and Tegan have met often enough they've never really had a conversation, positive or negative. Well, I hope to see more soon.
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: January 01, 2008 13:47 CST
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Now I liked this chapter. A little insight in Demetriov never goes amiss, even if it is through Torin's eyes. Demetriov's way of thinking really is rather imflamatory isn't it? He's like a kid smashing a toy on the floor then crying when it breaks, or it sounds that way if Torin was right about him being genuine in his concern. Well, what exactly will be the result of Tegan's change I wonder. I can only await things anxiously my sweet Good chapter
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2007 08:13 CST
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Oooh, I loved this chapter, it's so utterly emotional and Torin, you bastard, stop charming me. I'm suppposed to be disliking you *pouts* Just how does merciless killer go with romantic fool anyway? Well Demetriov is right on one thing, he is utterly predictable. Anyway, about the chapter. Like I said it's very emotional and sweet. Poor Torin really did get his ass handed to him and their background, Demetriov's in particular, just makes it all the more bitter for him I imagine. And finally the mechanics of vampirism are starting to peek around the corner. Anxiously awaiting the next chapter my love.
| Reviewed By: paniwi (NLI) On: October 21, 2007 06:57 CDT
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Oh goodie, you posted another *all beaming* Mmh, somehow I am surprised that he would attempt to change Tegan in such a way, for that matter, attacking her when she was already weakened. But alas, looks like his patience ran out. Thank you for the wonderful insight about how he feels about her, lovely just how twisted he has become. A few things that I noticed is that Tegan's resistance against him in their fight was a little...I mean, I know she's a hybrid, and I know she's a fighter but even so she seemed to fare better against him than against Adam, even if their was a different motive. Another thing that I noticed during a few chapters is that Torin doesn't seem to be playing that big of a role, which is quite ironic. Somehow I had expected him to be doing more than simply yell at her or worry about her. Perhaps it would've been nice if for instance the fight between him and Demetriov, the first one and the one in this chapter, would have been elaborated. But for everything else I liked the chapter, again, especially the Demetriov-insight. I've been waiting for that for a while. And now we wait and see what Tegan turns into, I'm curious. Well, back to studying and I will see you soon my sweet.
| Reviewed By: paniwi (nli) On: October 20, 2007 16:00 CDT
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A nice chapter, well, what did I expect, you've been playing with Adam for a while now *chuckles*. I wonder what the new set of trouble will entail for her *whacks you for the evil cliffie* Well, I am waiting with bated breath for the next installment
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2007 11:28 CDT
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It was a nice chapter. I like the fight Tegan and Torin had, showcasing that neither is too happy go lucky about the situation (not that they have any right to be of course) Anyway, I did thought the chapter was a bit...fragmented. You tend to take leaps in your story and it felt in some places as though you cut of where the fun should start. In the chapters in which you span time or have Torin do the narrative thingie, try to make things a bit more fluent, it doesn't matter if the chapter becomes longer because of it. Otherwise it was great and heart-wrenching as usual. I wonder when the real pain will start.
| Reviewed By: Kirara Girl 019 On: September 02, 2007 12:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Superbe story!:DReally like how it's going.The fight scenes are awesome.I can easily imagine all the blood and the pain.Very nice details.And the love story is really heart-breaking.I'm quite scared for Tegan now that Demetriov wants to make his move.Wonder what will happen next :D
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2007 15:22 CDT
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It was a nice and short chapter that I much liked. The relationship between Tegan and Torin is as awkward as it is intriguing. It stood out to me that Torin kept the feeding part of his personality away from her though they both know it exist, it seems they have found themselves a nice little rhythm, they really should see know Demetriov will act soon with all of the other group out of the way. The fight with Marina was a bit...awkward to me. It seems like Tegan gets lucky irrationally often. To win after such a beating seems almost impossible. But otherwise I liked the chapter muchly. Demetriov is going to get off his lazy ass, oh goodie, now the fun *dives a rock from Tegan and Torin* really starts.
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2007 07:10 CDT
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Oh boy, now the fun really starts. It's getting difficult disliking Torin in this situation *chuckles* Though the last part showed little of his point of view. I wonder what he is planning to do, surely not sit around doing nothing while Demetriov gets more crazy then ever. *snigger* And it was still very much fun to see him get beat up.
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2007 03:56 CDT
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Oooh, he was just being impossible in their 'fight'. I'm glad I've beenof help, I guess we won't be exploring his character anymore in our RP though *grins meanly at him* It was well written and hey, I knew it was coming. Loved the shakespeare moments! Mmh, I am wondering just how much Demetriov suspects at the current moment...
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2007 11:00 CDT
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Tegan seems to have well learned to take care of herself. Her escape-plan was very cool, oldest trick in the book but it worked like a charm. And then the healing process and all that. Torin is beginning to take more then a casual interest there and even defending her against the big-almighty-Demetriov. And speaking of Demetriov, she's in for some trouble. Nice couple of chapters!
| Reviewed By: paniwi (nli) On: June 25, 2007 03:45 CDT
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and there we go, Torin getting closer and Demetriov getting antsy about it. I liked the chapter, the dialogue was well done between Torin and Tegan. Isn't it funny that the more he starts to become likable the more he starts to annoy me? Anyway, good chapter.
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2007 07:39 CDT
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oh boy, Tegan's a mess and now has Torin babysitting her. She'll be a happy girl when she wakes up *watch me be sarcastic* I'm quite anxious to the next chapter
| Reviewed By: Paniwi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 26, 2007 09:57 CDT
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Mmh, well there was the first cat-fight. Porr Tegan got it rough. But she narrowly survived, even though it was close. I did like Torin's intro's. those interludes always give such an extra touch to the story. The fight, as far as it was a fight instead of a severe beatin *snigger* was well done. I liked the little spat they had. Nice two chapters.
| Reviewed By: paniwi (nli) On: May 20, 2007 06:45 CDT
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Nice chapter. As well as she stands against other vampires against Demetriov she remains weak, in more then one way. I wonder if she'll ever be able to hurt him and shake of his contro. Ah, I suppose I know too much of where this story is heading. I can't wait until the next update. Great chapter, nicely done!
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