|
| "Arubaito" Reviews/Comments [ 56 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] | Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2007 03:52 PDT
Comment/Review:
Good chapter. Poor guy, he was already overwhelmed and now this.
| Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2007 03:40 PDT
Comment/Review:
Good start. this is very interesting so far. I hope Kaiba doesn't hurt Jou.
| Reviewed By: JoeysGal [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2007 19:15 PDT
Comment/Review:
Ooooh, the first meeting, eh? Not exactly how I planned it on turning out to be, but you do make a very good point in your end note. They must be what, 19 or 20, right? Older? It just wouldn't be right for them to yell and scream at each other, although I thought Jou might say SOMEthing, as he's not exactly the type to keep his thoughts under wraps. However, I REEEALLY enjoyed this chapter and am very muchly looking forward to the next! See ya babez! ^_^
| Reviewed By: JoeysGal [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2007 17:49 PDT
Comment/Review:
Ooooh, this just keeps getting BETTER and BETTER. I am so JEALOUS of the way you write! There's just something about this that gives everything so much depth. I loved the way you described everyone choking on their food when Jounouchi said he was working for Kaiba xD I'd love to be able to make my readers laugh like that ^^ Anyways, keep it coming!
| Reviewed By: JoeysGal [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2007 17:38 PDT
Comment/Review:
Oh, the ever dubious Jounouchi is sprung by the old KC letters, eh? Nothing quite like a surprise to shock the system after an already overwhelming day, I get 'em all the time, unfortunately. Really liking where this is going so far. Jounouchi reminds me of my first day on the job, there really is so much to take in when you first start working in an office environment! Would it be rude to ask what the title of this fic means? Or would it be a spoiler? Eh, if it's a spoiler don't tell me xD Please write more! I love it thus far!
| Title: interesting
Reviewed By: JoeysGal [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2007 18:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, this fiction certainly got my attention! I'm interested to see where this is going; it's not every day I stumble across a story that has the content and clear talent of a great writer. I like your useage of adjectives and the way you portray the characters. You've done Jounouchi well and you've got Kaiba to the T. Nothing I can stand more than OOC-ness! (after Mary Sues). Looking forward to see what unfolds in future chapters.
| | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] |
|
|
