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| "Blind Obsession" Reviews/Comments [ 61 ] | | Pages (5): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 › » ] | Title: Oh my ._.
Reviewed By: Ms_awesome On: June 16, 2008 15:52 PDT
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Um... to be entirely honest with you, that was a bit too weird to be arousing, even for me. And I usually enjoy kink, but when Ed went as far as to hump Roy's leg, that was it. Dog-master-games ain't my cup of tea. Sorry. The chapter was still very well-written, and I read it all, but when it comes to sex-games, I like it better when they stick to naughty toys and perhaps some bdsm, but not... not that! That doesn't do it for me. Then again, this review just represents my personal likings and opinions. I'm sure a lot of ppl liked this chapter, but from now on, please stick to ordinary bdsm. Please? Every chapter so far has been very erotic and kinky, and I've enjoyed them a lot. Oh, and I really hope that we get to know more about Al soon, too! :D I'm still shocked by the fact that he's a shameless player, who actually fucked a girl on his own brother's bed! I have to admit though, I didn't like it when Ed thought it was a bit kinky. If it was me who had cought my brother or sister fucking someone on my bed, I know I'd be outraged. At least, I wouldn't think it was kinky. Then again, you are the author, and what you say goes. Ne? You know I still think you're awesome, and I hope you understand that I'm not trying to belittle you or mock you or anything like that. This is a review, and I like to be as honest as I can when it comes to stuff like this. Okay? Now, give us more sex (less animalistic) and more kink! And more Al! And more Ed-almost-finding-out-who-his-secret-fuckbuddy-is!" :D You're great! Keep up the awesome work!
| Reviewed By: kimifangirly On: June 03, 2008 00:13 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
:.D Another fantastic chapter. It was very well written and very worth the wait! I really hope Roy begins to feel feelings for him ;v; ~
| Title: Kul
Reviewed By: Ms.Awesome On: April 26, 2008 04:34 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool! :D Omg, Al's a player!! That was really original of you. I don't think I've ever read a fanfic where Al's anything but an angel. You know? So I really enjoyed this chapter, even though it lacked hot gay-sex. And to be frank, I was a bit annoyed by the fact that Ed actually got aroused by watching straight sex. He's gay isn't he? Though, the kinky-ness of it all was probably arousing enough... His player-brother, having sex on his bed! Ha! Did NOT see that one coming. God, I want more! Please update as soon as possible, ne? I kinda wanna know if Ed's gonna make Al fess up, or if he's just gonna let it be. I can sorta imagine Ed accidently mentioning it when Al's bitching Ed about being secretive. You know, something like "Ed, I really want us to share! You never tell me anything these days! I know you're keeping things from me!" And then, "And you're one to talk?! Al, you're the one who fooled and fucked an innocent girl on my bed you retard!" Hahaha... something like that! Ah well, you're the author. What you say goes. ^^
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2008 18:10 PDT
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Heh, now THAT was amusing. Still, you try fucking a car, it is pretty damn uncomfortable, unless you're just giving someone a blowjob. Actually fucking is pretty damn irritating, but great for the possibility of being caught. On the other hand, watching a sibling fuck is not interesting to in the least. THe specualtion Ed had, however, was. Neh. Keep updating, and perhaps at a faster rate? Ja ne.
| Reviewed By: Hieis_koi14 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2008 20:07 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow...this story is freakin AMAZING! and the No thing is so freakin smart, ur like a stinkin genius,
| Reviewed By: TypoDemon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2008 22:10 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There was an 'as' where it was supposed to be was i think xD But i rated it ten anyway @_@ Because holyshit. ...Yes This needs UPDaaaaaaaaaatessss T_T
| Title: lol
Reviewed By: edsgirl10310 On: November 13, 2007 18:22 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey Zakai ..omg your every where ..im the one who just found you one youtube ..i really need an account here lol...this is like omg ...awsome..and freggin hot..>
| Reviewed By: Ciiah-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2007 06:06 PDT
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Good chapter! :D Very hawt... I kinda hope that Al will see the hickey and start asking questions. Haha. What will Ed say, hm? Woah, yeah... the story is going in the right way, I think. The lemon in this chappy was really good! Mhm, you are one erotic novelist! ;D Update soon, okay? Much love - Ciiah-chan
| Reviewed By: catherine! On: October 10, 2007 09:37 PDT
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poor ed! hope they get together.. u no proper like.. i wanna no who 'he' is!! update soon!! xxx
| Reviewed By: newdkidt [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2007 12:34 PDT
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thats was great so please write more
| Title: ladyjay62
Reviewed By: ladyjay62 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2007 19:19 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
More , I want more . Give me more !
| Title: ladyjay62
Reviewed By: ladyjay62 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2007 19:01 PDT
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That was f***ing awesome .
| Title: Evil!!!! jk
Reviewed By: dresslikeinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2007 23:03 PDT
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Not fair!! You made it a cliffy!! Please update soon!! Anyway, I like the way you've written this. It gives you a different.....damn, what's the word?? Perspective!!! That's it. It gives you different perspectives on what happening and it differs from other stories because of the way you switch the POVs around rather than staying in just one throughout the whole thing. Good job and keep up the good work. Please update again soon!!!
| Reviewed By: Meyham On: August 08, 2007 10:56 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that dream was FREAKY. Funny though. Keep updating! *update "Training Edward..."!*
| Reviewed By: Lirilith [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2007 18:38 PDT
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Goody, a new chapter. I jumped right on the link to read it. Well written as usual and of course a smooth flow inbetween Roy and Ed's pov. It's always nice to know what they're thinking and why. When you started this story I was wondering how you were going to keep it going and interesting and have been pleasantly surprised. The anonymous angle makes the byplay between them oh so amusing. (Ed's ass on a platter....I wonder if we'll see that later!) The lemons are wonderfully hot, but where was the het warning?! Gah, my virgin eyes. Of course, I still liked it and it turned out great by the end of the scene, but I would have liked a little um....warning. Ok, I feel a little silly saying that considering what the story is and all but it was still a little of a surprise at the start. Thanks for the new chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next one!
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