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Reviewed By: shipporinKIMS11 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2007 10:07 CDT
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I think that.... you could put one more chapter with the wedding and end that chapter with Kagome going into labor, and then have the epilouge with everything else. And maybe you could name one of the babies (there has to be more than one!) Inuyasha, after the past one, because even though Kagome doesn't truly love him anymore and he's dead, he gave his heart and life for Yash's. And maybe one names Shippo? I don't know. Please! Update!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 23:16 CDT
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really nice chapter update... i think you should put in a chapter with the wedding and the baby being born... then after that the epilogue... that should be great... just my suggestion... hope you will update soon... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: bernhart [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 22:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I want to read more. I would like that very much, even an epilogue. Though I would enjoy the wedding and the new baby. Go for it, just don't stress yourself out. I enjoyed it so far.
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 22:39 CDT
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Ya know I have to addmit I agree with kagomesdouble07 This is a good place to end it...Normally I hate when things end..but this story was realy getting to me...for realy I was getting all depressed....So you should put something Like ten years later in the epilogue...This was a good story to read and I look forward to reading more on you new story....hopefully I don't get depressed.....sigh......Nyuka
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Reviewed By: kagomesdouble07 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 22:20 CDT
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i think you can end it now. you just should put the birth and wedding in the epilogue
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Reviewed By: shipporinKIMS11 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 09:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nooooooooo! Not Renku! this BETTER be good news, i couldn't STAND it if anything happened to him! If kagome's light-headed... - does this mean she's pregnant again? You can't stop this story!!!! It's soooooo good! Please Update!
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Title: OMG
Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 02:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AAAAAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa Now the baby......This is like a soap opera......lol....but that was a interesting way to fix things....well half way fix things........are you skeeming something....Like they will get back to gether someware in that hard time......I realy want to see how you pull this off.....Ok this is a short review but up date soon....Nyuka
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 00:08 CDT
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love the new chapter... another twist to the story... hope you update soon... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: InuYashacrazy101 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2007 20:55 CDT
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i luv this story u r a great inuyasha writer ~_~
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2007 16:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ya know I think I would feel the same way as Kagome if I were in her position....I mean the guy just leaves you...aaaaaaand now he thinks he can make it better.....my gosh there is no excuse if Koga tried to stop him so much....but I feel bad for him to because Kagome said she was going to use him then lose him...I mean his heart would break and he would more than likely commit suiside and she would feel resposible which she would but things shouldn't be set right after its to late....its not to late for Yash to fix things and hes tring he realy is I just wish he would have lissened to Koga and stayed with her it was just so wrong of him to leave. What could he say to fix a broken heart....what can he do to make her love him again....Those who hate once had to love.....Is it better to love and lost then to have never loved at all??.....You sure got them in a pickle I mean I'm sure you have a plan for them. but if I had to write this story I would be at a loss of how to fix it with out it just happening....Something big would have to happen to fix it now...sigh...ok try to up date realy soon.....Nyuka.
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2007 13:20 CDT
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so the story did have some interesting twists... well i just hope that the both of them will work things out and be happy again... hope you update soon... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2007 17:22 CDT
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Ok I wrote my last review and like five minutes later you posted the next chapter weird hu.....But the same thing goes....Make it all better....what can he do to fix it aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa he abandond her what can he do.....what is she suppose to think......the hole think just seems unfair.....sigh......Ok Nyuka signing out ....P.s. update realy soon....like you just did XD *glint*
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2007 16:57 CDT
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That friken Jurk what the heck does he think he is doing my gosh this is retarded......Ok got to calm down *huph* *huph*.....Ok Yash is leaveing the love of his life for no reason what is he doing Kagome loves him and hes only candeming her....he keeps saying that things are falling apart....well things wouldn't fall apart if he wasn't being an idiot...I mean what does he think he is going to prove by leaving.......grrrrrrrrrrrrrr*......Ok I'm getting a little worked up....Your that author fixs this.....sigh....I'm sorry I know its things like this that make the story but I cant help my self this isn't right....fix it, fix it, fix it, fix it, fix it, fix it.......Ok just in case you didn't get the message...FIX IT!....okay upday soon..*smiles sweetly*...NYUKA
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Reviewed By: Resilience [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2007 12:01 CDT
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ooooooooh...thanks for the explanation. the only reason i asked was because i know that some medications used to treat the radiation some times make the hair fall out too......idk. i'll have to ask my ma (she's a doc.)Great chapter btw! i can't wait to find out what happens with Mimi and Yuki. funny how you made things turn out like that....yuki and the kiss and mimi and the open blouse. yeah. anyway, can't wait for the next chapter! come soon!
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Reviewed By: Resilience [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2007 13:04 CDT
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i have officially warmed up to this new story!! hehe, just ignore all the rude comments i made in my last review. can't wait till the next chapter! i wonder what happens with Kagome's cancer....does she REALLY have to have her hair cut off....don't yell at me, im stupid.
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