| "Ultimatum" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
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Reviewed By: Youko's Dish [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2007 15:19 EST
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Great chapter I look forward to your next> :D
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Reviewed By: Blue Wolf Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2007 22:56 EST
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The constant cliffhangers are really getting annoying. UPDATE SOON.
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Reviewed By: WhiteDemoness11 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2007 04:44 EST
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It is late. nearly 2am. And I'm going crazy that the story stopped there. WOW. Just...wow. Eerie, pleasant, and wanting more. ~WD
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2007 01:07 EST
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No NO NO NO NO NOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooooo......Kagome can't lose her magic she just can't dang it, it could be temporaraoly out of service but not gone for good that would leave her....dare I say it....a NORMAL person....*mentaly cringe*.....She is suppose to be able to kick but with exstreme meko action *pow* *crunch* *smash*.....*boom*...yaaaaaa..............hehe....well Kagome gots to supprize them all....and beable to protect her self....so bring the power back........are they gone cause she tried to kill herself.....that would sink....gosh I hope that isn't the case...please update soon....XD...........Meow
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Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879NSI On: December 19, 2007 00:17 EST
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Also if you couldn't tell i'm very very prone to typos and such so I'm really not trying to tell you how to do anything just hoping to encourage you to take your time. About this chapter I loved it. You explained so much yet still leave so much hanging there for us to wonder about. I do wonder though why do you refer to her priestess powers as magic? It's just my curiosity.
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Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879NSI On: December 19, 2007 00:13 EST
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Sorry about not having a way to contact me i didn't sign in (NSI) is my way of saying Not Signed In my profile here is under Rainstorm61879, but you can contact me at Rainstorm61879@hotmail.com if you choose Some of the things I meant were like this sentence (He shook and head and moved off to finish the checklists) (someone who had no lived their life fighting) small things like this where the sentence has become something broken. There were a few sentences like this in the last chapter where a few things might have been missed..or in my case often I get ahead of what I am typing and have two halves of two sentences put together or a word out of place. Also a few words that were just the wrong tense, like surrounded instead of surrounding The story is still enjoyable just the smoothness of your writing makes it much more enjoyable. Your words are usually so well written that it creates a mental image so i watch the story rather than read it a break in the smoothness shatters the images. I am also in no way a brilliant writer or anything of the sort so please take no offense at my reviews I am only trying to give my honest opinion and encourage you to take your time because an unrushed story is art a rushed story will turn to trash or ruin an writers vision when they hurry to meet others demands it's your story and you will tell it when and how you choose. I think others should remember that
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Reviewed By: demonfromhell [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2007 22:46 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome story. I love how the story is progressing. Oh, and near the beginning of Chapter 8, you used the word revolution, I think you meant to put revelation. Anywho. Can't wait for the next chapter. Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2007 18:43 EST
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This is the best chapter yet(though I'm sure it'll be outdone by the next to come...)! Anyways, do you think you could go more into what happened with InuYasha and the gang in the past because the first chapter made it seem like he kinda did something really terrible to kagome (or maybe thats just me...) and now it seems like he just died. Idk...if you're planning to explain it later don't feel rushed to do it on my account, I just wanted to know if you were going to go really indepth with it. Keep on writing! I'm LOVING this story! Best crossover yet! -Amber
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Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879NSI On: December 17, 2007 12:14 EST
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never feel rushed to finish an update or to make it longer just because someone says they are too short. They are many mistakes in this chapter sadly. Which has made the first few paragraphs harder to follow and the story harder to enjoy. I love your story so take your time to write your updates. If I have to wait weeks before there is another update on this it is all worth it to be able to read it and enjoy without having to figure out what is being said every few sentences. Now the question on my mind is did she use her powers? Is that why she's out cold..will we find out in the next update and why the jagan reacted when she was set next to him
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Reviewed By: Anonymous0 On: December 16, 2007 03:25 EST
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I sure thought Kagome would do something. Please update ASAP. Great story.
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Title: hp?
Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2007 20:52 EST
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lmfao! i thought you were going all harry potter on us cuz the demons kinda sounded like dementors and then the whole bit about magic? lol. nice job on the update though! I am LOVING this story so far!
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Reviewed By: Elemental_Dea [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2007 17:48 EST
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love it, very suspensful,please update soon!
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Reviewed By: TheAlmightyAya-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2007 03:48 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
More, please!!
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Reviewed By: Youko's Dish [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2007 20:33 EST
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I loved it of course and hope to see your next chapter soon, thank you! :D
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2007 17:55 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I got about as far as chap6 and I am LOVING this story! Which is wierd because I usually hate YYH/INU..this truly is the only one I have liked (screw that...LOVED) so far! You worked everything out so nicely, the two plots, past memories, the cousin thing, the flashbacks..I'm so putting this in my favorites because I already can't WAIT to read the next chapter! -Amber
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