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Title: Please Continue
Reviewed By: dmsims3 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2009 14:49 CST
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I really enjoy the twist in your Sess/Kag story. I have read others about Sess with amnesia, but yours is original and well written. I really want to know what happens when Sess wakes up ... has he regained his original memories ... has he forgotten what happened during the winter with Kagome ... how will he react when he finds out he is mated to Kagome??? boldPlease continue the story ;)bold
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Reviewed By: nightshade41230 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2008 17:28 CDT
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love to read more of this story.hope to see it
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Title: A little disappointed.
Reviewed By: snowbirdyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2008 23:06 CDT
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First thing you need to do is fix the font size on this chapter. Some of the lines disappear at the end losing some of the words making the reader guess at what the missing words are. I had the screen stretched as far as it could go and even tried smaller fonts to pull in the lines but with no success. The second thing is, I thought you rated this with an M. You had no romance whatsoever between them regarding the mating. You don't have to do a full blown lemon to have some romance take place, but there was nothing. You spent all that time to build up to it just to leave your readers feeling empty. You did not even let us enjoy any of the time they spent together as mates. This is not a flame, just constructive criticism. As a reader of a story that I was very excited about, I have to be honest and say that I feel cheated. I had such hopes for this story. I fee sad and confused as to whether I want to even continue reading it. I know I'm just one reader and it is your story and I don't mean to hurt your feelings in any way. Like I said before, this is constructive criticism. Good Luck.
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Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2008 14:33 CDT
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i never pictured kagome being a chicken and running away from her mate. although i think i alway why she did. although when the spell wears off and sesshomaru gets his memory back about him mating with kagome and then her running, i just hope he understands why she did it and forgives. i wonder how long she is going to be able to hide her mating mark. afterall, she bathes with sango and shippo. and i know no matter what, shippo will notice a change in her scent, especially if she is with a pup. update soon.
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Title: Great!
Reviewed By: Cutipie389512 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2008 15:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THIS IS AMAZING STORY! IM EAGERLY AWAITING THE NEXT CHAPTER!! I SWEAR I HOPEONE DAY I CAN RIGHT AS WELL AS YOU! SO FAR MY THREE STORIES ARE CRAP!:D
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Reviewed By: snowbirdyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2008 14:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm doing a happy dance. You gave him his arm back! Thank you. I am so afraid and sad about the spell in that other scroll she found. I hope I'm wrong but I don't think I am. I bet when they leave there, she makes him forget their time together. She can be intimate with him and loved by him for awhile. At least she will have her memories. It's sad that he will not remember but I'm sure that in time you will let him remember. What would really be the icing on the cake would be to let her get pregnant. Then she would have something physical of her memories to hold onto. But then again, I may be down a completely wrong path from the actual spell in the scroll. I enjoy trying to guess ahead of events and to make requests. Sometimes, some of my requests are already a part of the story and, of course, that tickles me. Just like his arm, I'm glad you already had it included and the memories thing. I don't mind if your story becomes a long one. It takes time to slowly build a real good plot and all the emotions involved from all the characters. This Snowbird will be here waiting to read each chapter.
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Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2008 12:26 CDT
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okay you are being mean, talk about leaving a cliffy. kagome is going to be in deep trouble when sesshomaru regains his memory back. and i can't wait to see Inuyasha's reaction to them possibly being mates by the end of winter. although i like it that kagome returned sesshomaru's arm. waiting patience for another chapter. this story is really starting to get really good. update soon.
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Reviewed By: FluffyLady [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2008 10:02 CDT
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oooohhh....kagome's is sooooo gonna get it when sesshomaru "wakes up" per say. lol. this is turning out to be very good. you have me on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter each time!! FL
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Reviewed By: Zeos [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2008 13:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another wonderful addition to the story! I really look forward to seeing what you write next. I enjoy it all, Great work!
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Reviewed By: snowbirdyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2008 20:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you very much for the update. I am so glad they're becoming much closer. I just wish she would give in to her feelings for him more and take a chance. It would be better to have had him for a little while than not at all. Regret and no memories make for a cold, lonely existence. I speak from experience and the years to prove it. This Snowbird says give her her memories so if he abandons her, she will at least have that. One more thing, please give him his arm back. In my mind I always picture him with both arms. That part of the anime I hate.
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Reviewed By: FluffyLady [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2008 09:34 CDT
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awww...sweet. that's one of my favorite positions to put them in, lol. very good. i can't wait for the next chap. FL
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Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2008 03:26 CDT
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i love how they are trapped for the winter and sesshomaru is determined to win kagome. i feel bad for Talia though, being all alone, although i think she enjoys playing matchmaker between sess and kagome. interesting plot. update soon. you are off to an excellent start. i want to know how he is going to prove that he is kagomes mate to be and how he is going to get past the wall she has erected around her feelings. i look forward to your next chapter or two.
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Reviewed By: snowbirdyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2008 03:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please, when are you going to update? It's been two months. This is such a cute and fascinating story. I like the plot. It's different. I wouldn't mind being snowbound with him.
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Title: Of Snowstorms And Annoying Old Woman.
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2008 15:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: nyuu_nyuu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2008 12:56 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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good chapter
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