| "Eyes piercing the darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 58 ] |
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Title: great job
Reviewed By: xenmosh [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 11:59 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
man that was great but I did notice a few errors but other than that great as always
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Title: good man jst great
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2008 22:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liked it man it wuz good jst wish it wuz out b4 (well ya kno) but it wuz reli good it jst put me into half a state of blissfull peace can't wait 2 see what Gaara does next
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Reviewed By: Miheran [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2008 22:22 EDT
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you got the next chapter out before i could mine, well i'm all most finished the next chapter, i was actually writing parts while reading this, but anyway, can't wait for the next chapter, JUST DON"T UPLAOD IT BEFORE I DO, keep writing
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Title: hey man ne chap was good
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2008 19:38 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it as always dude ur always out doing your self man you truly have a gift ( if you do decide to make things more intimate with Naru/Hina i can help u out)
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Reviewed By: Miheran [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 04:05 EDT
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another great chapter as always and i enjoyed reafing it as always, and about not updating my story in so long well... no excuse but i'm having to do holiday homework as it is the start of the second week of my holidays so i should finish it as a go between work, as i'm also doind at story book verion of a play in lititure, once agian great chapter and can't wait for the next. keep writing
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Title: We come from the land of the ice and snow, From the midnight sun where the hot springs blow.
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2008 03:19 EDT
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Yeah, I looked up the lyrics for the Immigrant Song just for the title for this review. Thought it was 'We come from the land of the Icy Storm, the midnight sun, and the Icy snow'. Yeah, me dumb. No matter. Pro-Kopping is sweet. Why is your E-Mail address from gamestop? I almost deleted your e-mail, AGAIN, because of it. Bleh... AND YOU RIPPED OF MARIO WITH THE 'IN ANOTHER CASTLE' BIT! Well, at least Hanabi wasn't in another castle, otherwise I would have ate someones face while evil squirrels (called Skiurids in D&D 3.5) crawl inside his bowels. -_- Yeah, uh... Is it odd that this story made me think of trying to learn the dietary information of the human body, specifically the brain, or that I actually TRIED to find such information? As much as cannabalism is apart of the Goliath Empire, they do it for more inane reasons parodying rituals, i.e. on your first birthday after joining the empire you must hunt down and capture a sinner, then watch as he has his soul removed and placed in a condenser so he may watch his corpse be cooked into a lavish meal and then you consume his body and drink the distilled essence of his soul to wash it down. Yeah, despite hating evil they do some pretty heinous stuff. Try on Sasami (from Tenchi Muyo!) going into a blood craze and slautering an entire school, and commanding Hanicas to fuck her little girl body. He refuses it always and belts her upside the head and seals her into her adult form for several millenia so she must experience menstration. Note: Child Molesters have ABSOLUTELY NO RIGHTS in Hanicas's lands. Uh... Is my brother dumb for buying Conan Hyborean Adventures when our internet connection is to slow for even the oldest online games? Bleh... Keep up the good work, rock on, and Pro-Kop to Powerman 5000 - When Worlds Collide, just like me! The Goliath's Commandment - Our name is Goliath, and we are Legion! Logic is my Insanity; Insanity is my Logic ~ Hanicas's response to Vulcans. Perhaps I should have questioned him before my meal ~ Hanicas on the downside to cannibalism. Don't be tempted to virus bomb your enemies ~ Hanicas's comment to an aspiring officer within the Imperial Guard. When I am angry, I get the urge to reduce a planets population by 95%... at the bare minimum ~ Hanicas on seeing people try to lynch an orphan at a carnival.
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Title: thnx 4 tellin me man
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2008 18:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude send a guy a msgs saying u got more up man you kno i love this fic lik a crack addict loves crack i ahven't read it yet but you kno i'm gonna love it oh go check out my new fic its up man
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Reviewed By: Daianta [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2008 11:48 EDT
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yays! you mentioned me in it! buut.. still no LeeXTenten.. =( Maybe in the next chapter? =)
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Reviewed By: Miheran [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2008 00:50 EDT
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another great chapter and great back story about JJ, kill Mizuki, well thats my opion, soz for not R&R sooner, but i've had a lot of major assignments due and my teachers are pains in the ass, but arn't they all Keep writing
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Title: This just in: Nebraska consumed in the stomach fat of an obese autistic Oregonian. No one notices
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2008 03:15 EDT
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Sweet home Alabama! I've uber-pissed since the last time I reviewed. My video card all of a sudden died. Got it in August 06, and should have lasted longer. Didn't help that I was running a game with high video requirements and it was about ~95 degrees out. But still. Got one yesterday afternoon when I woke up. Parents bought me a Stealth S120, but it came with a free upgrade to a Stealth X1050, a superior Video Card to the one the box normally contained. (The box didn't come with an S120, though, so I can't sell it) Now for the review... Felicia and Talbien from Darkstalkers. The monkey chick, I only saw her in Marvel vs. Capcom 2. I was worried I had missed many things. I had about 104 emails waiting to be checked. Keep up the good work. (Pro-Kopping to Dragonforce's Revolution Deathsquad) The Goliath Commandment - Till destructions end shall the Fires of Creation burn in our hearts!
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Reviewed By: tagger On: August 30, 2008 21:19 EDT
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THis story is awesome! I like the way that you merged B.O.F. series and Megaman into the Naruto universe. From the sound of it, it seems like the Village Hidden in Darkness seems to attract many different and unique powers. Kind of reminds me of Yu Yu Hakusho when Hell is about to break through and many of the humans in the area develop powers that seem neccessary to counter the evil about to burst through. Great Story!
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Title: hey jumper u got ur self a new fan girl ha ha j/p
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2008 20:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude this was great the violence made me lul hard and garra was the ass kicker i love him 2 b and nice touch adding in zabuza and haku ( they are in my top 20 of fave chars) any ways great as always so yea it gets hmmmm whats the highest grade oh i kno INFINATE A PLUS
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Reviewed By: Daianta [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2008 11:20 EDT
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*smiles* you mentioned gaara in it.. *screams in fangirl kind of way* he was a nice person! you made him a nice person then he went bad.. :( LOL! i sound like an extremely obsessive fangirl. i probably am, but who cares? just keep writing jumperjacket! xxx ps, i really liked the violence, and if you was to kill orochimaru in the future, make sure he dies a slow and painful death. peace.
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Title: wholey shit
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 23:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
damn that wuz better than any thing the show could offer me and this is only from chapter 1 but u have me hooked and 4 you mentioning that u wouldn't foucs on action kinda put me off 4 a bit but when i read the extreme violence that not even if all the best minds in horror came up with u wuz jst lik wholey shit wow ok i am gonna get back 2 the story i needs mme sum more of it
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Title: magnificent
Reviewed By: xenmosh [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 02:48 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
truely magnificent still held to the standers you set truely great
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