| "Eyes piercing the darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 58 ] |
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Title: Took you long enough
Reviewed By: kngdmhrts09 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2012 10:47 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well been waiting for this one for a while. At last you did. Good job though. Can't wait for the next one or an update on one of your others. Good Job |
Reviewed By: Gheist [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2012 04:12 EDT
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Dud, you should finish this. i really liked the style and changes you made and would love to read how you do the shippuden |
Reviewed By: Deamonarch71 On: April 15, 2011 10:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THE STORY SO MUCH I AM GOING TO REVIEW AGAIN I LOVE THE GORE AND THE LEMONS I ALSO LOVE THE VIOLENCE AND FOUL LANGUAGE IN THE STORY PLEASE CONTINUE TO WRITE THIS STORY THE WAY YOUR ARE PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE EEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSS SSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS STORY ROCKS LIKE NO TOMORROW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Title: AWSOME STORY
Reviewed By: Deamonarch71 On: April 15, 2011 10:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is awsome and i hope you continue to write this story because it is awsome to read and i love stories where naruto is powerful but their are still people that he has to work to beat |
Reviewed By: Master__Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2011 13:50 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude... This is an awesome fic! First off i LOVE the fight scenes btwn Hinata and Naruto in the chunin exams; whenever i feel a bit bored i read that and it makes my day. Secondly, i like how u made Raizen like sonic, idk if u noticed but Raizen's bersek form is sorta like sonic's unleashed form, i didnt realize that till just now. Thirdly im DIEING for the next chapter in the story and i cant wait to see what ur gonna do with this story in the "Shippuden" of the series but i know its gonna be awesome!! Fourthly, im wondering how long till there is a NaruHina sex scene(the part when she is sex crazed and tracks him down i dont count as a sex scene). Finally, i am writing a story of my own called Elemental Eyes, i was hoping u might take a look at it and maybe leave me a review? i would appreciate it alot especially in my fight scenes(i think my fight scenes are good but i want a second opinion. Anyways in re-cap: AWESOME FIC!!, whens the next chapter(s) gonna come out?, whens there gonna be a NaruHina sex scene? and will u plz read and review my story?. Keep up the AWESOME WORK and goodluck in life. signed Master__Dragon Oh and P.S.: Im totally with u on hating Naruto Shippuden for the whole Hinata confessing her love and Naruto not being fased by it thing. NaruHina forever! |
Reviewed By: rangerv60 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2010 13:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is good enough to ignore the spelling problems.Despite what most people say I think the script from of writing works great in this story.Keep up the good work.
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Title: I was me but now He's gone.
Reviewed By: tbone0839 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2010 15:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent story. I'm usually not a fan of AU stories, but now I can't wait for the next update to this story. The hilarity and tons of action make it great to read. I can't wait to see the true depth of Yubiki's and JJ' power. Only problem is with the grammar and spelling, but you already know that. Otherwise a great AU story.
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Reviewed By: funnyduckie1 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2010 15:40 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! You can feel the action in this!! GREAT FIC!!
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Reviewed By: nanan On: October 20, 2009 22:36 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
You should drop the script format. It do not read really well.
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Reviewed By: LostMyShoeInSheol [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2009 06:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Im really enjoying the story so far, it's intresting to see the way the changes you made to the regular story line have to effect your story line. That said I have two funny things to point out, a comment on your choice of writing and one piece of criticism. First off you do realize by making raizen an uchiha and a love intrest of saukra you have given here an uchiha fetish lol. Secondly by making a main character molded after your self you have givin him the ability to break the 4th wall, which just adds to the enjoyment of the story but takes a little bit of the seriousness out of it(a trade off that I gladly accept). The style of writing you have chose to tell your story is a bit confusing, its almost writin like an rpg(ff7 was the first one to come to mind) it took a little getting use to but its starting to grow on me a bit. Lastly somthing I have noticed in the last couple of chapters is that you are getting typos(missing letters or him instead of her kind of things) the only thing I can suggest is a little more proofreading before posting. Aside from all that keep up the good work, I cant wait to read the next chapter :D
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Reviewed By: Zetsuii [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2009 12:08 EDT
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I love your idea for the story but I dont recommend doing this writing style of Name: Dialogue If you can write it out like a story in a book it would be 10X better...this is just my critique
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Title: Long time no hear/ Great job
Reviewed By: eneruyoshino [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2009 13:42 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man dat stuff is cold man just like u told me. Oh yea its me Marqual.
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Reviewed By: Cavpal On: March 20, 2009 04:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Only a few word: too many Author-created-characters! If you disperse the focus of the story with too many non-canon characters, boredom will set in (It did for me). The writing style per-se is good, but the story is confusing and not focused.
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Reviewed By: Miheran [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2008 21:25 EST
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another great chap, sorry i didn't answer before, but after getting back from India, my Reli's want to see me agian and then their was christmas, but now i have finally read it and can't wait for the next, Keep writing
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Title: plz tell me there is a lemon comin soon
Reviewed By: Desgardia [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2008 21:17 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love the chap man the perveyness ruled i jst want 2 write the lemon and or lemonssssss cuz its lemony limeniy delicious and the action is goreilicous as always
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