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| "PITCH" Reviews/Comments [ 37 ] | | Pages (3): [ 1 2 3 › » ] | Title: Love
Reviewed By: Love you! On: May 09, 2015 01:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this fanfic twice. ...Alright, I skipped most of the
heavy drama the second time through, but I'll likely read through
the whole fic again when my heart is ready and I've a mind
to. It is that damn good. The writing is lovely. Descriptions are
vivid, but never crude. I was entertained the entire time and got a
good laugh from the lighter parts of the story. Although
(unintentionally), one of the most amusing parts was in Chapter 4,
when L inexplicably knew Light's family name. (Unless I missed
something, even with a second reading?) There were some small typos
and missing words (mostly in later chapters), but nothing serious
enough to impact the overall quality of the fic (which is *high
quality*). The author and fic deserve much applause. Thank you for
a wonderful fic! -Love you!
| Reviewed By: Little_Tapir [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2011 16:11 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I look forward to any further continuation of your story. I really enjoy your writing style and you've made the characters your own without taking anything from them. Its got a wnderful pace to it and has had me on the edge of my seat on several occasions. Its a very charged piece and it really draws you in. I've enjoyed every minute of it so far. | Title: hi
Reviewed By: iammecya On: May 02, 2011 09:31 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
always hated misa.. in movie and anime, and now in this fanfic lol.please kill her off or something soon so l and light get a happy ending for once | Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: January 30, 2011 23:23 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, the first half of part II I'll admit...I had to stop reading and take a breather. I got so mad on L's behalf lol! I kept thinking "If it were me I'd be beating this guy bloody sensless!" The second half I finally calmed down and enjoyed the show haha, but seriously. God forbid anyone do to me what just traspired, cauz I would just flip my lid, omg lol Wonderful chapter hun, I'm now convinced that Ratio is a bi-poler nympho XD I would have sworn he sent that pick to Abier out of spite! I can't wait to see them living together! :3 Also, if my grammer is bad on all these reviews it's because it's 1 a.m. and I'm tired :p | Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: January 30, 2011 22:22 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And with part I of that chapter I would have decided that Ratio was indeed a psyco and would be looking into that myth about dislocating a thumb to escape cuffs 0.o Holy crap, I gotta read what happends! I'm excited, and freaked, but mostly excited! My adrenalin's pumping! XD | Title: :D
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: January 30, 2011 21:34 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay I'm reviewing for Possession as I just got done reading it (I get to read 3 chapters XD which means 3 reviews! I hope you dont tire of me lol) Yes Ratio is a nympho omg, L would be having a coniption fit if he knew! And on that note, just what the hell was Abier thinking coming into L's room and attempting to kill Ratio? Geez, he must've liked that jail cell lol Im going on to the next one, thank you so much for posting and re-posting! ~Passing Reader | Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: January 29, 2011 08:10 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow it's been a while! Sorry, real life and college have pretty much soaked up my time. I ended up having to reread a few chapters and I loved what I missed, but "Possession ( Chapter 20 )" dosn't have anything in it D: I think their was an uploading error, but there is no chapter. I thought I should let you know, and I cant wait to read it! Here's still reading and enjoying your fic hun ;) ~Passing Reader | Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: June 06, 2010 14:22 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omig, that was great! XD I LOVE how that all panned out and I adore Ratio for all his cleverness! I've started watching House for the same reason lolz ;) I loved this chapter, elevater bondage and all and I can't wait to see more! :D I have to wonder though, if Abaire pushed the right buttons juse what else he could get Ratio to do tehee, Much love, Here's waiting for the next chapter! ~Passing Reader
| Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: May 09, 2010 22:50 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Is it really almost over? I find this shocking as I though this would continue for a while yet ^^; We got to hear the final verdict on L's experiment, I think we got a love confession...sorta lol, still got Abiar, I thought Misa would still be an issue but I'm guessing we gots rid of her...some where... Maybe I need to re-read this all in one go instead of weeks apart inbetween updates, cauz I think I might be forgetting somethings (like plot resolutions) if we're near the end (Not that I'm complaining, but I do hope to see more of these two sometime in the future.) Perhaps I'll read some of your other fandome works ^^; I havn't seen/read the others (manga, games,ect) is why :P Damn I dont want this to end! It makes me all distressed that this might be the last one D: Anxiety over fiction *snorts* God I've got it bad lol! Can't wait for chapter 8, I'm out! ~Passing Reader
| Title: It's raining!
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: April 17, 2010 19:44 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So Light is insane? Or really abnormal and wishes to hide it? Or is he becoming insane? (Let's face it, he's not all there in the series either lol) And here I was thinking that he was going to be completely normal besides being a politician or something :p I think this fic brings out my love (and sometimes hate) for both characters. L the socially awkward genius, but with strong ethics and a bit of a defiant streak. Light for being a rather twisted possessive person, who is very mysterious about himself and his motives (L *cough* XD) The way they interact with one another just makes my head spin! I hope you never fall out of love with these characters cause as I've said before, you've ruint me. For forever. Most of the time I can't even get 3 sentences in with thinking "That's stupid!!! Where's Selena?! D= " So when you stop writing about them, I'll have to quit reading about them lol Loved this chapter, I can't wait to see what Light will pull next, both with Aiber and L XD Till the! ~Passing Reader
| Title: I'm sooo happy...
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: March 22, 2010 10:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was wondering why this was not updated last week ^^; I just didn't want to be a nuciance and mention it, instead I hooverd by the computer checking for an update everyday like the freak I am lol I adored this chapter, I think my main thought through the whole thing was something along the lines of: 'these guys may be geniuses, but their idiots when it comes to love' XD They both practically said it in both actions and words! It's always about who says it first lol Please forgive my poor grammer in this review (though it;s never really that great to begin with :p) I have to get ready for work or else I'd at least spell check it ^^; I can't wait to see what happends next; and on a side note, you've spoiled me when it comes to Deathnote fanfiction. I can't bring myself to read anyone elses! D': It's all very fustrating *laughs* I can't wait for the next chapter, please continue soon! ~Passing Reader
| Title: I mean everything I'm about to say, regardless of the language.
Reviewed By: karoleoke333 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2010 11:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Let me start with saying (in english) YOU are a wonderful, talented writer. I read ToM first, then aBfSF, now this. I tried contacting you via the email link of this site, but I don't know if you got it. If you did, I'd love a reply. Just saying, lol. You are wonderful at creating a myriad of 'sexually tense' situations (as well as others), and I think you could (and should) do is create a beautiful love making scene that doesn't stray too far out of character. In my honest opinion, it's what this story needs. The ones in ToM were amazing, (especially after the near rape/mutilation/ D'AWWWWPOORHAYNER). I was positively dying for one in aBfSF, but it never came; actually, to the contrary. This sounds VERY overdramatic, je sais, but after I read the rape scene...Let's just say that your writing is so powerful, it affected me in such a way that I couldn't eat for about a day and a half. It was moving, on an emotional level, and it made you think, (not you personally, but you as your audience). I think you could do something just as strong, if not stronger, with positive intentions, mais non? Alors, now that I've had a serious conversation, I'll fuck with your head a bit. ;) You've shown that you can translate a bit into french; I myself being fluent in english and almost completely so in french (almost typed grench XD) have given myself a MAJOR migraine constructing the following paragraph. Because I like being a pain in the ass and going out of my way to obtain information, rather than being upfront and asking "Parlez-vous le français?" WOOT WOOT PAIN IN THE ASS-ISM. 8D ENJOYYYYY.... J'espere que tu reçoive mon e-mail. Je t'ai trouvé l'ans derniére, et je veux te parler. Il semble qu tu sois l'auteur la plus merveilleuse du monde. Vraiment. Je mentis pas. Cet histoire et "Balm for Social Failure" sont les histoires plus interéssants du tout les autres que j'ai lu. Les personnages L et Light sont vraiment croyables, et j'ai trouvé que ses réactions sont trés bien conçu. Bien que je deteste le personnage Misa, elle est une rôle importante... D}8< J'ai seulement un problème; je veux qu'ils fassent l'amour. Oui, les raports sexuels sont trés érotique, mais les hommes doivent un peu d'attention et d'amour. En particulier L, je pense. Merdes alors; sa troisème? quatrième? 'aventure' à l'extérieur de son zone de confort, et il a donné un baiser à l'inconnu! Et le jour prochaine, ils se sont baisé! L est trés fragile (afin qu'il agisse fort), je pense, parce-qu'il essaye de se cacher, mais Light ne lui permet jamais. J'ai dit ca, en anglais, mais j'ai pensé qu'il a été important que je l'aie répété. Well...I'm done wasting your time. I eagerly await the next chapter (and maybe I also await to see if I will be graced with a response?) Je T'Embrasse , Karole (ou, Angélique, si tu veut. ;P)
| Title: I think I hatethem all...
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: March 08, 2010 19:15 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm worried for L, and now I'm anxious!!! DX I don't want Abier (sp) to get his dirty paws on him nnpht! What is Ratio doing? Thinking? Gaahhh! D': Sorry about the lateness, been working more hours and double shifts so I havn't had as much reading time as I used to :/ I really look forward to the next chapter, even though I want to strangle just about every character other than L lol, can you tell who I favor? X3 Here's waiting for next time!!! ~Passing Reader
| Reviewed By: kat716 On: March 02, 2010 00:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic so much! I really enjoy L's step-by-step approach to expanding his horizons. However, even though I feel sorry for L, I love watching Raito fluster him so badly. I mean, L is about the last person in the world you would expect to end a conversation with the phrase "bite me". I cracked up at the part where he was trying to decide what to text Watari 'I'm going to engage in sexual activity that may or may not involve a bathtub'. I would have killed to see Watari's reaction if he'd chosen that one! Anyway, you rock! Give me more, please. N
| Title: The Spider and the Fly
Reviewed By: Passing Reader On: January 21, 2010 10:11 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
....Can Misa die in this fic too? lol I think my title makes a pretty good analogy, but this chapter felt more like a tango :3 I really do enjoy the battle of wills these two go through. Now that I think of it, I think Mr. Yagami and Watari would either get along real well or fight in a simular manner over their disprovel of their...'charges' relationship *laughs* I can't wait for the next chapter, here's Running away to make it to work on time! :p ~Passing Reader
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