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Reviewed By: Elven_mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2010 01:44 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the story and enjoyed you dragging the 'bet' thing through the dirt a little, that was always one story theme that irritated me to no end. And there is nothing wrong with a sudden random lemon, lol, I doubt anyone would complain about that. Your spelling could use some work but your grammar is decent. All you really need to do is grab a good beta/proofreader. Plus I would suggest that if you have auto-correct that you turn it off unless you intend to read it through 2 or 3 times to check and make sure all the right words are used. But other than that, I like the idea of the story, the dialogue is believable and sounds like a person is talking, and the theme is intriguing. So overall, good job and I await the next chapter with anticipation.
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2010 10:48 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
first off - dont apologize for random lemons (hint hint) lol, and secondly, I LOVE THIS UPDATE!!! The date was sooo cute, and i love how he caved to please Kags n also how he was so absolute on not letting kags pay - men and their pride xD. I wonder how kikyou would react to hearing Inu having an interest in Kags. I feel like i'll see a bitch mode in the future, but its sorter her fault - i'm still pissed that she didnt ive inu a second chance, yet i'm still happy she didnt. And the KISS!!! awwww - ur story jus having my awww-ing my ass off!! It was sooo sweet! I WANT INUYASHA *rolls around on my bed hugging my pillow* Ok ok, was kags a victim of a bet? And the guy forced himself on her? If she needed a shrink she must have been messed up pretty badly. Its sad that what ever happened to her in the past has affected her in the sense that she'll always be skeptical about ppl being nice to her - she'd jus question question and question... it's so sad. Especially if a guy comes along who doesnt need any of that, but would also end up being the victim cuz of some past douche's act.... UPDATE WHEN YOU CAN!!! And dont bother urself - the sesshy u have is soooooo new and fresh!! I LOVE HIM - even tho he's creepy, but he creep me in the good way - get what am saying? LMAO ... jk jk xDDD
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2010 07:29 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... seems that inuyasha & kagome's date went ok with certain ups and downs... they did some talking but not enough to let inuyasha know more about kagome's past... hope they talk some more... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2010 23:24 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like that dig you tossed in there about the possibility of it being a "bet". Once upon a time, that used to be a unique story idea, but now it seems like there are a lot of AU high school fics that involve the "bet" scenario, so it made me chuckle to see you drag it through the dirt for a second. Inuyasha makes a very good point, if it were some sort of a joke, then he wouldn't have shown her his ears. I'm really looking forward to seeing where this goes from here.
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Reviewed By: Inu_Yokai [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2010 14:25 EST
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Goo update! I like how you made the falling back on to the bed thing something for the both of them.
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2010 03:01 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... seems that inuyasha did forget about kikyo although he still went to her house... she didn't even listen to what inuyasha had to say... inuyasha is showing more interest in kagome... looks like inuyasha and kagome get along okay... wonder how the date will go... will they talk more about themselves?... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: Kagome_rocks On: March 04, 2010 00:26 EST
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Love it I can't wait ot see what happens on Inuyahsa and Kagome date and thank you for not making kikyo a crazy person like most fanfiction do
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Reviewed By: faygo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2010 23:44 EST
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Yeah I got to read the new chapter (for real this time!) ;) Thanks for explaining what was going on there. I was kinda confused lol . Great update, and I can't wait to read more!!
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2010 22:36 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i jus had to read this bfore going to bed!!! lol I really love this story and am so glad i gave it a chance!! =D I dont like how easily kikyou got mad at inu; what ever happened to 'second chances'? Miro is being... a half dick? I mean he's far from the usual understanding/caring Miro - tho am not complaining! Its good to have a lil OOC to get a fully fresh new feeling to a fic and u're def. dishing it out =P Sesshy had my eyebrows quirked and he so freaked me out with having a personality - i jus had to laugh to see that i got freaked out lol. With Kags and Inu... i love them!!! I wish kags did dress a lil dif and with more form fitting clothes (like u kno some geeks usually dress weird at school but at home they show off their hotness)... yh, which still leaves me to blv that she got hurt in some physical way to be all clad up.. WHAT HAPPENED TO HER?!?! XD ... I cant wait to see how their dates turn out... and also how things would turn out when it becomes more evident that inu n kags are getting close... love love love ur update!!!!
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Reviewed By: Cricket42 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2010 01:54 EST
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Love the update. Keep it up.
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Reviewed By: Marienella [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2010 22:52 EST
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Absolutely love your fic! I can't wait for the next chapter. You're doing a great job.
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Reviewed By: janey On: March 02, 2010 19:44 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love it! they are so cute together. i really wonder what happened to kagome 4 years ago. can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren1 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2010 19:27 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Keeps getting better and better. I just love Inuyasha and Kagome. I am NOT missing the usual hatred for each other. Very refreshing. Looking forward to next update.
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Reviewed By: Inu_Kagome_4Life [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2010 18:24 EST
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did kags get raped? Or something close to that? in her past? WHAT IS INU DOING? going on a date with kikyou and then asking kags on one for the next day! :O Update soon!
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Reviewed By: animelover4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2010 16:00 EST
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I love this fic!!! Update soon please!
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