| "Never Meant to Love Him" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] |
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Reviewed By: Susan On: October 10, 2002 18:59 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, even though it was a dark chapter, it was still awesome. I love your description of all the places he went to and the things that occured while he was there. Poor little girl, but at least Vegeta put an end to her suffering. Bulma is stronger that I gave her credit for. Personally I would've been puking all over the place. Well, I can't wait to see what's next. Great job, as always ^_^. |
Reviewed By: Dark Jades [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2002 17:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey...I like! Cute idea, and of course excellent writing. Can't wait for the rest! |
Reviewed By: Aka-Chan On: October 01, 2002 16:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this, you portray the charestics of both Bulma and Vegeta very well. As a writer of fanfics myself, I know how hard that is to do with this particular couple, so I applaude you. ^.^ I like your style of writing especially, not to stiff, nut it's got good content to it, another applaude. *claps* ^.^ Keep up the good work and update soon! |
Reviewed By: Kahlan Nightwing On: October 01, 2002 10:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Wow! Naughty Bulma all lying and stuffs to Vegeta.... Well, I bet she finds enough in those cameras that she won't want to look in the private section huh? ^_~
So, the only thing I didn't get was how Vegeta could just trust her to not look in his personal stuff. Is he brain-damaged? Not thinking? Why didn't he think of that? Or does he realize it later...?
So, I'm a hard person to scare or get to a I'm-gonna-puke state. The last movie to do the latter was We Were Soldiers. You know, the flesh coming off the leg of the burnt person like my bar-b-qued chicken legs? I burn them, so that works.... And scaring me. That hasn't happened in two years!
Scare me! Make me retch! Heehee, it'll be a boring Halloween if you don't! Continue! |
Reviewed By: manga, the Awesome One in pigtails [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2002 07:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Huh? I read this this morning and left a review, but it's not here anymore! What happened, eh? Oh well.
There are a few sentences and situations which are a little cliche, but I enjoy the story and your writing style. It feels intricate and nicely detailed without being too dense. :) |
Reviewed By: Meliza On: September 30, 2002 19:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man, I was just as nervous as Bulma as she hovered over the private files! You've described Bulma and Vegeta's personalities to a T, but not in the standard way that everyone else does.
A great beginning to what promises to be a fantastic fic. I sure hope you update soon! |
Reviewed By: Bulma Wannabe [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2002 13:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
Intriguing start. I'm looking forward to reading another story written by you.
Bulma Wannabe ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Susan On: September 30, 2002 12:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey Ember I think you have another winner here. I love the way you describe Vegeta's character and his overall disgust with humans. Also, I like the way you portray Bulma. She's aware of all he has done in the past and shrugs off his little threats just enough to piss him off ^_^. It seems to me that Bulma is about to open up a can of worms. I just hope she has the intestinal fortitude to deal with what she's about to watch on that screen. Good time to post this with Halloween coming up, because I always have a hard time finding fics to fit the mood on 10/31. Can't wait for your next update. Good chapter! TTYL
suenami927@yahoo.com |
Reviewed By: manga, the Awesome One in pigtails [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2002 11:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A few cheesy sentences, but other than that nothing much to complain about. I really like the style you're using, your word choices and your sentence structures. They feel intricate and interesting without being bogged down. :) |
Reviewed By: Masamune On: October 01, 2002 15:50 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooooohhhhh, it sounds sooooo good so far! wow! you've got a real knack for writing stories that i get completely hooked on, and this is definitely another one! |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2002 19:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow - this chapter was well worth the wait!
As bummed as I am that we have to wait until around Halloween for the next chapter, I know it will be another fantastic one. Your writing style is exemplary and this story line is extremely enjoyable and not too OOC, IMHO. 8-)
Keep up the good work!
Meliza |
Reviewed By: lil debbie [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2002 14:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I'm going to need to see the next chapter as soon as it is written! |
Reviewed By: Da Bomb On: November 14, 2002 16:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great plot and also u pretty much keeped them both in charater. I loved it.
Also could u do a lemon one shot. |
Reviewed By: Da Bomb On: November 14, 2002 16:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great plot and also u pretty much keeped them both in charater. I loved it.
Also could u do a lemon one shot. |
Reviewed By: dark rain On: October 01, 2002 22:12 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh bad bulma i can't wait to see wht she finds hurry out with the next chapter soon |
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