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| "Don't Cry" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] | | Pages (4): [ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: Kix [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2006 16:50 CDT
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MeefMonster and i miss you...we wish you'd continue this story!! *hugs kisses and gropes from MeefMonster and Kix(boyfriend tested, lover approved)~
| Reviewed By: shourin On: May 09, 2004 23:27 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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will you continue this fic?? i really want to know how it will ends... its great!
| Reviewed By: Silent Cherub [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2003 14:57 CDT
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Hey hey! ^__^ Glad as ever that you updated! *turns serious again* Tsk... somehow I get the feeling you're paying more attention to other fics of yours than this one. *pouts* How loathsome! I am truly hurt! *silence* ...Okay, okay. Just kidding. :p I know you have to divide your attention and that your other work consumes time as well... So, just take your time (not too long of course!) As for this chapter... First of all I have to say that... Brad's in deep doodoo! *grins* Wonder what he'll have to say for himself, what kind of excuse he's going to use? Brad using a cheap excuse? I've got to see that and I would love to see the royally pissed expression on Schu's face... :D Second, could you be any crueler? (Let me guess? Yes, probably? :P) Making Yohji treat Schuldig so badly. >_< Poor guy... Don't you just want to wrap him into your arms and hold him tight? I do. :)Better make him feel real good before the end of this fic or else--! (Still need to figure out what exactly "else" is... but you get the point, right?) Good! ^_^ The Yohji/Ken part was good too, all cute and cuddly. *thumbs up* :) I wondered for a minute where Aya had gone.. Oh well, can't be in the spotlights every minute, eh? Was probably busy polishing his katana (Am I the only one who can take this the "wrong" way? *shakes head and calls herself 'an old lech'*) or brooding... or something. o.O' ^_^ As for my fic.. well, I've decided to leave it be for now.. (too much complications) and create a new WK one.. so I'm working on that one for now. :) Still need to figure some things out.. Wether to hook Yohji up with someone or not? That is the question. And if so, with whom? Consider Ken, Aya, Omi and Nagi non-available. :p So... that leaves? Heh. Maybe I should just stick to the "let Yohji be a minor character in this story"-plan, hm? Not everybody needs to have a boyfriend, right? o.O' Oh well... enough about me. Oh. Just a little request though... If I finish the first chapter of it.. well, I would be greatly honoured if you were to read it first before I post it. Of course I understand it if you decline. :) I won't have any hard feelings. Anyway.. keep up the good work! Hurry up and finish that new chapter!! :p Ciao! ~S.C~
| Reviewed By: shemai_tohru On: September 25, 2003 19:50 CDT
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Please write more! I need to read more!How could you stop at a part like that?! You are So Cruel!! AArrrggghh!!! I need to read more! Oh yea and i really liked the way that you depicted farfarello! Please put more of him in the fic! I love farfie! He and Ken are my two favorite characters! I really can't wait for more! Your avid reader: Shemai_Tohru
| Reviewed By: AolaniDathomir [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2003 11:05 CDT
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wow, how did I not see this story for so long? It's a really great story...*glomps all the Weiss and Schwartz boys (even Farfie)* Stupid, Takatori! SHI-NE!! Sorry, Aya like moment. Poor Brad, trying to be all sweet and now he's being all sneaky and failing miserably! Poor tortured Schu...Farfie's just..yeah, nutter...Omi and Nagi are so kawaii it hurts my brain, and Aya is...well, he needs to find someone who understands him. Ooh, I'm so happy that Youji and Ken are happy for the moment (though I feel that will change soon...) There are so cute and not many people write them together (including me...) Write more soon, please? | Reviewed By: MeefMOnster On: September 14, 2003 14:55 CDT
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way to go...hope you start writing more often... | Reviewed By: Meef Monster On: September 12, 2003 23:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lookin good!! cant hope you dont take to long on the next chapter..oke!! good luck~~!!~~ | Reviewed By: Prodigy_Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2003 00:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
*hugs Nagi* Oh you poor poor thing. I want to KILL Takatori.....Great writing by the way ^_^ | Reviewed By: Silent Cherub On: July 04, 2003 12:36 CDT
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Hey, it's me. (again) ^_^'
Thank you for your email. I appreciated that you actually took the time to respond and as usual I can say truthfully that I'm glad you updated and that you don't mind my reviews which sometimes can be a bit longer than I intended to. I can't help it. There's always something I forget and still want to discuss or talk about. ^_^' Oh well..
I'm still waiting patiently for the sex. Bah, it sounds like I'm only here for the sex. It's not though. I would like the story even if there wasn't any sex at all. ^_^ Now as for this chapter...
There were a few slight mistakes in it but not much. :)
I'm starting to feel more and more sorry for Aya. Unrequited love is such a bitch, ne? I mean, he acts so cold and yet.. all the man wants is some love. Everybody wants love, even Aya. I hope you'll have mercy upon him soon and you'll give hime some happiness before the end of the story. Hell, for all I care you dump him with Farfie. ^.~
Speaking of which, Schuldig may not appreciated the food thrown at him but I do. :) That was just cute, childish but cute. Well, with Farfie everything... everything he does, is a surprise, ne? Next thing you know he may decide he's going to open his own knife shop. ..*silence* T_T' Okay... I seriously don't know where my thoughts come from. ^_^'
Next, the Ken and Schuldig foot-scene. Ken really needs to treat Schuldig nicer but then again... He's just being himself, eh? And I can understand his confusion. Still.. it was a sweet scene, Shu holding Ken's foot and carressing it gently.. Ah, *dreamy sigh* I really want them to be together but.. don't listen to me! It's your story. Even if he's going to stick with Youji, that's alright. You just do what you want to do, ne?
Well.. The image of Omi pulling Youji's ear as if he'd been a naughty child... I can *so* picture it and when I do, I just have to giggle. :p
It's great to hear you've started on the next chapter already. I have started too on the first chapter of my story but I'm not quite finished yet and I'm still a bit uncertain about some things. ^_^' But I think I'll manage. :)
I hope you put up your picture soon, looking forward to see it. And.. I'll talk to you in the next review, eh?
*pompoms*
~S.C~ | Reviewed By: wingedkitten On: July 04, 2003 01:15 CDT
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read fic. liked. poor schu. keep going, please : ) | Reviewed By: Eriol [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2003 16:50 CDT
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Hey sorry about that Anna. Hotmail was being very mean so I had to make a new account. I'm truely sorry :(
My new email is - sexyschubee@hotmail.com. | Reviewed By: UMMM On: June 07, 2003 15:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the fic. Um, only the poor spelling and grammer usage is a little distracting. A few mistakes are easily overlooked, but these are re-occuring. Just have to be a little bit more attentive. Otherwise the fic is pretty good. Will you be updating again soon?
Oh an I tried to go to your website to check the fic and the link for the chapters is broken, just thought you'd like to know, maybe it's just me.
Well later. | Reviewed By: MeefMonster On: May 20, 2003 11:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
definat Good..hope to read some more of this soon! | Reviewed By: voidsenshi On: April 16, 2003 14:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY!!! Long chapter!!!! So proud of you!!!
Way to go Omittchi!! You tell Ayan whos boss ^_^!! *waves her omixnagi flags* Ano... I really feel bad for Schu-kun. Mostly because he and KenKen can't get together but now...with that little slip up. *gives Schu a hug and pats him on the head* Don't worry Schu-kun it will get better soon *glares at AnnaHibiki* right?
HEHE I need to stop threatening you ^_^;; Well keep up the great work. Just love this story!!!!!
~voidsenshi~ | Reviewed By: Cocos [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2003 14:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there!
Generally, I can say, that your story is rather interesting. But then, there are a few things, which are unacceptable. First, your use of japanese language.
Have you ever learned just a little bit about this language? Do you know, that most of the words you are using in your fanfic, are wrong?
Do yourself a favor and inform yourself before you write such (in my opinion horrible) lines.
Highlight is the word "genkiness". Well....it doesnīt exist and itīs not meant to be cool.
It isnīt cool at all to use japanese words, not even, if they are perfectly spelled and pronounced. Youīve to imagine, that all your Charakters ARE speaking japanese. Why are you writing words like "gomen nasai" in that language? If you eally want to use that language, go on, write your hole text in japanese.
Next, your style of writing and the topic of raping a man.
Do you know, that a rape victim is not only in pain, just a little bit, but it is hell only to go to the toilet?
This entrance of our body is not made to have something put in an if itīs violated, itīs given, that somethings tears, and thatīs painful. It has to be done carefully to be painless.
But in your story, Schuldig is able to have sex, short after he was raped. Thatīs unrealistic and (to a certain extend) ridiculous. You are not treating this topic with any sensitivity. Try and change it after sometime.
Your style of writing is more or less ordinary, nothing special, but itīs okay. You are on your best way to develope a grounded style.
Comments oder questions?
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