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Reviewed By: hippiechick83 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2003 00:49 EST
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Poor Trunks! I know he's the "bad guy" in all this, but I still feel sorry for him. He doesn't even know exactly what he's done! Goten doesn't deserve all the pain Trunks has put him through. Then again, it's not like Trunks is doing it on purpose. I sure hope those bastards who hurt Trunks are caught soon and get their just desserts. I want to see them get ripped limb from limb by pissed off Super Saiyans! Blood, gore! Death, destruction! It'd be greatness! ^_^ Alright, I think that's enough input from me. I just want to finish off by saying this was a really, really great chapter considering you were most likely barely lucid due to pain killers. *two thumbs up* Total greatness. I can't wait until you update. ^_^ Until then, Peace and Out. |
Reviewed By: k-chan On: February 01, 2003 11:16 EST
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finally!! an update!! Loved it soooooo much!!! update soon plz!!! |
Reviewed By: Namek Kaia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2003 02:50 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ack! I almost cried! And that's hard to get me to do, especially over writing. So good job. ^^ Tons of emotion in this chapter. I'm dying to know what's gonna happen. Is help really going to solve Trunks's problem? Or is he beyond help? And what about the baby? I'm excited to finally see it. ^_^ I'm anxious for an update!! Amazing work on this so far. Keep writing! |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 14:07 EST
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WAHHH!!!! ;-; POOR GOTEN!!! Poor Trunks!!! You're not dirty Trunks!!! I STILL LOVE YOU!!! *bawls!*
Please update A.S.A.P. 'cause I REALLY wanna know what was in that envelope!!! O_o;;
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: January 31, 2003 10:14 EST
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I’m so terrible sad. I think someone has to find the envelopment. Finally it would give some clues or even the whole answer why Trunks behaves sometimes that way. I still hope the baby is fine and I wish you to get better from whatever you have. If painkillers make you write your stories that incredible good I should take them myself. |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 10:40 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is SO heart wrenching!! The ANGST!! The ANGST!! Poor Goten being beaten by his love, then Trunks not even knowing why, or even remembering!!
You know, I've never been a fan of male pregnancy in fics, but HONESTLY, I'm not just saying this because your my friend, PG, this is the VERY first fic I've read where it makes sense. The fact that they tried for so long to have a baby using a surrogate mother, that Goten saw the Dragon as their only hope of conceiving...it just is so right! Usually, I groan and roll my eyes when a Saiyajin male gets pregnant, but you've done it so beautifully, and kept them in character WITHOUT feminizing Goten in the least. VERY well done!! |
Reviewed By: Vatara On: January 30, 2003 09:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am eager to find out what was in that envelope. please contact me at vatara2000_of_the_elite_forces@yahoo.com
I would be interested in your storys and i have many great ideas! |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 10:53 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL I LOVED the Cheshire cat Vegeta, off to wreak havoc on the neighborhood with teenage girls! And what's with Saiyan princes fainting? LOL Nice bits of comic relief!
But THEN you had to have Trunks have an episode at the mall! Poor guy! So were these the guys that raped him? Is Kane involved? I can't tell, since he acted like he didn't know Trunks was with Goten! It sure seems like it though! I couldn't tell from the first chapter whether Kane was drugging the drinks or if someone else was doing it, just making use of the fact that Trunks was drinking with the guy. Such mystery!! |
Reviewed By: Namek Kaia On: January 23, 2003 23:59 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What?! You can't leave it there!! I gotta know what happens next. You have to update soon. I'm dying to know what's gonna happen. Is Trunks going to get over this? Or will it always be his "dirty" secret? Is the baby okay? Or did Trunks screw up big time? So many questions. I gotta know! You're doing great with this so far. Can't wait to read more! Keep those chappies comin!! |
Reviewed By: Chris On: March 31, 2003 15:26 EST
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Leilani kicked butt!! She did the whole I'm so cute and innocent act,...then BLASTED that guy AWAY!!! I would love to see a picture of that!! And they obliviated ALL of those...there is not a word FOUL enough to discribe them. Oh,but they had the baby, HAPPINESS!! And now an OTHER ONE!! Those to are sex fiends for each other, aren't they. Woo! Bad guys gone, Guy gets..no KEEPS...um..Guy, "Firefly" loves papa again, and baby's born, WITH ANOTHER ON THE WAY!! I feel fulfilled. All it is right with the world. ::content sigh:: The story rocked...Minus the raping and all, but it gave the whole thing character. Things really need to stop being sugar coated all the time. But yeah, keep up the good work when you write other stories. I like the ones you have so far. |
Reviewed By: Oblivion On: January 22, 2003 04:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE! |
Reviewed By: hippiechick83 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2003 02:32 EST
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Wow...that last part was so dramatic...I absolutely loved it! Unfortunately it was only a tiny section of the chapter.
How do I put this where you understand what I mean and not get your feelings hurt? Okay, I love this story, I really do. Everything about it is good, but in truth, the sex scenes are getting to be a bit much. What I honestly enjoy is your twisted plot lines and all the drama and angst you pack your stories with that keep me coming back for more. I found myself wondering halfway through the chapter, when the good part was going to start.
Don't get me wrong, I do really and truly enjoy this story, if I didn't, I wouldn't bother telling you about the excess of sex, I would have just stopped reading.
I can't wait for more on this story. I want to know what was in that envelope, who delivered it, if Goten is going to be okay, and of course, when are those asses going to get fried?!? ^_^ I'm going through a violent phase right now. I feel for the peeps I spar every week in karate...
Anyway, update soon! I'm very excited to see where you're going with this! Until then, Peace and Out. |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2003 16:19 EST
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WAHH!!! ;-; Poor Trunks!!! Poor Goten!!! I wonder what was in that envelope? Pictures, perhaps? Oh Kami...THOSE BASTARDS!!!
Don't keep me in suspense for too long!!! Please update as soon as possible!!! O_O;;
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: January 21, 2003 14:06 EST
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I can imagine what was inside the envelopment and who the person was who brought it. Sobs. Oh, please let Goten and the baby be alright. They waited for so long to get their second child. I hope they find out why Trunks act that stange, maybe it would help him to get over it instead of driving it away. |
Reviewed By: JJ On: January 21, 2003 12:36 EST
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Poor Trunks! To me he really need a hug, some peace and quiet and some help to deal with all that happened to him!
Beautiful story!
Cann't wait for more! |
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