| "Sleeping With The Past" Reviews/Comments [ 36 ] |
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Reviewed By: Beka-chan On: February 01, 2003 00:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like! ^-^ I was getting tired of the whole T/G and or M.T/G Cliche... I personaly thing Mirai and Bardock make a sexier couple. Then again, that could just be your writing style, something I'm quickly becomeing addicted to.
-^__^- |
Reviewed By: Star Spangle Mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2003 19:41 CST
Comment/Review:
woohooo i almost forgot to review! You did excellent on the rough stuff so don't deny it!! I'm just waiting to see Poopsie in the next chapter playing nursemaid! Yummm *Grins* |
Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2003 00:13 CST
Comment/Review:
OMG OMG OMG... Ok, I'm addicted now... *bows to your greatness* PLEASE update soon! I'm gonna go crazy until you do! *trips off into her own little warped universe* |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2003 22:51 CST
Comment/Review:
OMG!!! I LOOOOOOVED this chapter!! =D It was SO great!!! O_O;; You must write more AS SOON AS YOU CAN, MM'KAY?!?! Don't keep me in suspense!!!
~*Rizu-chan*~
PS: This review would be longer if it wasn't almost midnight and I wasn't sick AND tired at the same time...
X_x;; Woe is me... |
Reviewed By: little_ninjin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2003 17:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the part where he's putting the bandana thing over his head. So ceremonial, it's almost bdsm-ish! (yum!) And the scene at the dining area with little vegeta- whenhis world is about to explode! The angst is so wondrfully implied, where so many lesser writers over explain, you let the atmosphere and tension speak, instead. Under all that lust we've got some very sad vibes from our trunskie poo. Oh yeah...Goten....
Oh the angst!!!!! GOTEN!!!
Once again you show us the way! |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2003 17:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooooh...Trunksie...you'd better run The Commander's after you!! (YUM!!)) *turns to glare at Bardock.."What's this about not needing to sleep with females???" Bardock sweatdrops.."err...nothing..um...you're the only woman for me my precious Kitty" that's better* GOD!!! This was soooo...*puuuurrr* I can't think of another word for it :D I supppose 'Bardock does Trunks on Vejiitasei' IS more interesting than 'Bardock does Trunks round Bardockgurls house'.....damn you for being right!!! Thanks for a delicious story Raven...can't wait for the rest *continues purring as she goes off to re-read, Bardock in tow* ; ) |
Reviewed By: christabel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2003 15:46 CST
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Wow what a dilemma for Mirai, should he run right to a nice soft bed in the palace or run back out in the the wilds of Vejiitasei for lots of wild fun. I am in love with your Mirai. "His resemblance to his father was unmistakable; the slanted eyes and heavy eyebrows in the reflection startled him with their similarity. His face held the same shape as his father's as well, although Vegeta's deep widow's peak was missing. The most shocking feature, however, was his hair. His familiar soft lavender human hair was replaced with long spikes shooting in every direction, but falling to a deep point just past his shoulder blades. Under the direct lighting of the bathroom, the jet black mane shone with a deep purple cast. “Wow.” He breathed, as he spun around to look at the dark tail swishing behind him." WOW, yummy I wish I was CB. |
Reviewed By: Xero Sky [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2003 14:03 CST
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A very cool pairing and an interesting way to go about it.
That's a very sexy Bardock you've got there. I liked the "When I catch you -- and I WILL catch you" part, plus the details of the hunt. The part about the elites fucking lesser saiyajins to death to avoid entanglements was gory but a great touch. Mirai's being awfully accomodating to the good commander... I guess age, experience, and sexual charisma do count more than youth!
Of course, I think Mirai needs to somehow drag Bardock into the future where he can have both versions of Trunks as his personal love toys, but maybe that's just because I'm perverted. Wonder if he'd like purple? |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 21, 2003 22:32 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very interesting story so far and I like it keep up the good work |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 On: January 21, 2003 20:59 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting idea. Great story, Raven...another masterpeice in the making! |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2003 16:34 CST
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OMG!!! This fiction is sooo cool!!! A totally different and original idea is being used...and I really love it.
I would've reviewed sooner...I think I was the first person to read it actually, I just had to get offline and didn't have time to leave a review... ^_^;;
I would love to do fanart for this story, with Trunks becoming a Saiya-Jin Elite...though it might take me a while because I have no scanner and it'll have to be done by the computer...
Ah well. Please update A.S.A.P. so I can read more Mirai goodness!!! ^_^
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: little_ninjin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2003 05:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I think this isthe first time I've picture Mirai that way! Gaa! That was hot! The lemony yummy was SO well written! PLUS the part where the dragon *interupts* them was so dang funnyyyyyy!
Poor Goten- never been kissed!
I can't wait til the next episode! MAN this is a GENIUS of a plot!
I LOVE IT!!!
20 out of 10!!! |
Reviewed By: Desiivy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2003 13:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love Goten/Trunks fics, This one is very diffrent, but I really really like it, I am hopeing that you keep going with this fic, and not just make it a Mirai Trunks screws everyone fic.
I would personally love to see, what Trunks does & how he reacts when he finds out that he in competions with himself, for his boyfriend.
But, Hey it's your story either way I'll be waiting for more to come. |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2003 12:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoo Hoo first review...unless a faster typer is doing one right now.....Another excellent fic Raven!!!!!!! But i see YOUR Poosie bear got a crack at Mirai BEFORE my snuggle bunny (pretend there's a cross face here...) But excellent nevertheless...I'm all agog for the next chapters!!! Like the dedication!!!! :D |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2003 14:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*lots of incoherent sounds come from Bardockgurls mouth*
Th...that was WONDERFUL!!!!!!! SO worth the wait!! I knew it would be...*droooool*
Ummm... one point though... you seem to have a VERY good grasp of what my baby looks like...
"You send me over to strip or her, that's why. Plus, she had to watch Mirai and I... she said it was for research." Oh. that's alright then... *Bardock wipes brow in relief* Why did you do that!!?? "No reason dear" *nervous smile* |
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