| "Archery" Reviews/Comments [ 51 ] |
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Reviewed By: Frozen Tears [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2003 18:40 CST
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Beauty... Truth... Aone tracked mind... equals catwho! |
Reviewed By: Catwho On: July 24, 2003 23:53 CDT
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Just a note: In Japanese, there are several verb forms for "sit." Kagome uses the phrase "Osuwari!" to "sit" Inuyasha. This is, however, different than the verb form normally used for humans. Kagome said something like this: " . . . atashi ga anata o *suwaru darou* hageshikuu ni arukunai!" ["I [subject] you [object] may sit strongly [into] walk-not!"] (Forgive my terrible Japanese!) The form "suwaru darou" is indicating a probability of sitting (quite rudely, too), rather than being a direct command like "osuwari!" The translation just fails to carry that over.
This issue comes up in lots of other people's fics as well. So don't assume that we were negligent! |
Reviewed By: Just Insane On: February 01, 2003 22:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*blushes* Woo.. hot. ^_^; I loved the Omake at the end. lol. I laughed rather hard at the buyo part. Don't know why. XD Anyway, good job! Me thinks it was very good. ^^ |
Reviewed By: razorbld On: February 01, 2003 21:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The biggest ego boost in a man's life is when they say "oh, you're just... just... huge!" make a sequal. it had a story to it after all. Make Mrs.Higurashi a granny! And for your information, the brother's first instinct is to asume that the guy forced himself upon her, thus having him in the "dominant position" grab a gun, and start blasting away at chest level through the wall until you can climb through it, throw a towel to your sister, and torture the guy to death if he is still alive. Remember this guys, because if it isn't her brother, its her father. and he'll castrate you before you know what hit you, and you're dead. And hope that it is the father, because the brother will make it as slow as possible, and won't stop even if his knuckles are bloody raw. so all you other guys out there, you better thank the lord that my sister ain't that kind of girl. the brother WILL kill you. even if you're the brother's best friend, especially if you are the brother's best friend. just remember that. 99.9% of brothers, younger or older, are overprotective. the girls need to remember that as well. |
Reviewed By: Cherry On: February 01, 2003 09:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story was good, but seeing that it is a NC-17 it could have been a bit more graphic. But i liked your idea of the bet on archery. But you made it really obvious that she will win. You probably could have slowed the action down when she was about to shoot the arrow. But overall the story was kool. ^^ |
Reviewed By: Fanfic Lover On: January 31, 2003 18:02 CST
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LOL! The story was really good and the ending was better..especially when sota was easing dropping. |
Reviewed By: Julie K [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 15:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was very wonderful story. It was a nicely graphic lemon without being too graphic. That was a very nice touch. I love the innocence of both of them. I think you should do a sequel.
Great job! |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 12:25 CST
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OMG!!! I absolutely LOVED this!!! It is now definately one of my most favorite InuYasha/Kagome lemons EVER!!!
Only thing that I was kinda cringing about was the end, where Kagome's mother and grandfather were not only LISTENING, but WATCHING the whole thing!!! GAH!!! How wrong is that?!? I mean...I know if I had a daughter or granddaughter and she was making love to somebody, I wouldn't want to WATCH it!!! GAH!!! *shakes a bit, grimacing* Eh...that's pretty much the only part I really disliked.
The part where Sota actually heard everything happening I was okay with - I mean, come on...he's a little brother, and it was actually only listening, after all...
That whole bit with the watching thing though, GAH! I just don't wanna even think about it...
None the less, this was an absolutely amazing fic and I really loved it! ^_^ Please write more soon!!!
INUYASHA & KAGOME 4EVER!!!!
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: Shisou [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 10:22 CST
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Very much like! Have you wrote more? I'll have to check.. And, no, I do not mean more for this. It's a one shot, I understand that. A very well written, very tastefully done one shot. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 01:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was SOOOOOOOOOOOOoo awesome!!! How creative. :)
And who woulda thought ... the world is much more full of lechers/hentais/ecchies than one would realize. ;)
That was SO great ... write more great stories! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Princess Bulma [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 01:01 CST
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I bow down to you. I never would have thought that would have happened that way. I LOVE IT |
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 14:19 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you for you story...; ) |
Reviewed By: me On: July 24, 2003 22:28 CDT
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Just so you know Kagome says sit but Inuyasha didn't get "sat" |
Reviewed By: me On: July 24, 2003 22:30 CDT
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awsome |
Reviewed By: Midnight Star [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2003 20:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED it!!!! I would have never expected the ending. This is one of the best Inuyasha/Kagome stories that I've read. |
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