| "Welcome To Slavery" Reviews/Comments [ 69 ] |
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Reviewed By: pingpong [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2003 08:41 CDT
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PP- You have to update!!! This was a good story!! \^o^/
YPP- Time for your meds... /drags PP away/
PP- /yelling/ UPDATE!!!! |
Reviewed By: Shorty* On: April 19, 2003 15:50 CDT
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Ah, Bakura's departure... the notes were a nice touch. It was a surprise to see Marik's thoughts at the end of Ch.11, I had thought the story was ending... ^-^;; but it's nice to see a new twist added in. Ooo, maybe Ryou will use the candle message. |
Reviewed By: firedryad [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2003 20:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
man, how do u do it? u update so fast! and ur writting is as good as ever. hmmm, poor ryou... |
Reviewed By: Poison Elf On: April 18, 2003 20:00 CDT
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Poor Ryou, what will happen to him? plz dont let Marik hurt him, and if he does, let Yami walk in on it, so he will be killed and Yugi will be able to go back to Jou, and Ryou will be able to go back to Yami, maybe Malik will be able to go to Honda, or go with Bakura... and Ryou will be happy |
Reviewed By: firedryad [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2003 21:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
im back! great fic, i absolutly love bakuras role so far in this fic. its in character! so cool! mariks role is kool too. malik loveing honda is weird, but i just lvoe this fic so who cares. cant wait to see the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: pingpong [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2003 08:28 CDT
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ur spelling is tons better! But continue quickly before i die a horrible death from good story deprivision. ^_^ time for me to leave quietly. ((((^_^) |
Reviewed By: Shorty* On: April 13, 2003 13:39 CDT
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Ack, Bakura! I didn't see Marik grabbing him coming at all. Oh, I wonder what will happen because of that... |
Reviewed By: AnimeAna [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2003 13:44 CDT
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DON'T have Bakura raped and then fall in love with Marik.... That will never happen and is wicked cheesy. "Hmm, you just hurt me physically and emotionally and I've never seen you before but I LOVE you now!" I really love what you have so far, though. Yami has a slightly strange mind for thinking that Ryou was involved romantically with his brother. Your spelling is much better. ^_____^ |
Reviewed By: pingpong [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2003 08:48 CDT
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SAWEET!!!! This is so eveil----continue! I command you to continue!! |
Reviewed By: ChaosEnd [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 23:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic so far, I was wondering *hoping*, is there something between Ryou and Bakura? Ryou seemed defensive about sleeping in the same bed with him, and jumped to conclusions when Yami asked if he loved him. Maybe you could pair them up?
Okay, for some tips, I've noticed that sometimes, your grammar is off. Just remember, your is used when something belongs to you, you own it, ect. You're is used when saying "you are" as in, you're a wonderful authoress. There is used for placement,ect- It's over there, There are five of them. Their is used to show possession- That is their car. They're is used for saying "they are", as in, your fics, well, they're great.
Hope that helped! Keep up the great writing^.^ |
Reviewed By: wyrd On: April 03, 2003 20:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is really good; I'm glad you at least know how to use spellcheck.
Love how you make the characters!
This is just a question, but are all of your pairings going to be boy/boy? |
Reviewed By: leila15rose On: April 06, 2003 18:55 CDT
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This whole fan-fic is going great! Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: White Phoenix On: April 02, 2003 23:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this! I like this almost as much as 'Father, Mother, Lover'. Keep it up! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Shorty* On: March 29, 2003 15:54 CST
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Ah, lovely story. Difficult decision at the end of Ch. 7 for Ryou. I suppose it'd be rather difficult to have both... hmm. Can't wait to see how you solve this! ^-^; |
Reviewed By: Cody Thomas On: March 25, 2003 20:48 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't you DARE leave off there!!!! More now! update soon I'm begging you! |
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