| "Meant To Be" Reviews/Comments [ 68 ] |
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Reviewed By: aquaprincess1 On: October 12, 2003 18:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Absolutely loving your story.. What if Trunks throws a fit and they bring him into the room to Bulma and Vegeta sees the baby? It would be so cool.. Jejeje.. Can't wait.. Please notice me when updated.. fanfictionlover@hotmail.com
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Reviewed By: bura400 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2003 17:49 EDT
Comment/Review:
That was really good. I enjoy these long chappies. Bura |
Reviewed By: VejitaGurl On: July 29, 2003 19:09 EDT
Comment/Review:
Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: ZeKintha On: July 23, 2003 22:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read the whole fic yesterday and have to say i'm hooked. I actually forgot to review and i felt bad because this is an awesome fic. Have you ever read the outlander series by Diana Gabaldon? You've got some things in here that kind of remind me of those books. Well anyway i absolutely love the fic and can't wait for the next chapter. |
Reviewed By: outtadaloop On: July 23, 2003 17:02 EDT
Comment/Review:
Nice update! It is interesting to throw Radditz into the mix. So can Bulma really put her feelings for Vegeta aside? I doubt it. Finally, the long awaited reunion : ) Update soon! |
Reviewed By: Venus On: July 22, 2003 22:11 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Must say is my fav fic rigth now, write more soon! |
Reviewed By: MajinRyoko On: July 05, 2003 21:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oi, reasons? im no good at these, sowwy! i rwally enjoy the storyline, and how long each chapter is. i love the descriptions you give too. few mistakes here and there, nothing too bad. you're doing a good job! i cant wait for the next chapter!! |
Reviewed By: outtadaloop [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2003 14:57 EDT
Comment/Review:
wow it's been awhile since u updated... plz say u'll continue this one : ) |
Reviewed By: outtadaloop On: May 08, 2003 18:34 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Good job! Even though this fic takes the same A/U slave plots and the characters are slightly OOC, all of the plot twists and relationships has more than made this one hell of a captivating, engrossing story ~ of course the lemons help ALOT too : ) Plzzz update soon! I wanna see some V/B action!!! |
Reviewed By: bura400 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2003 20:54 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Some errors here and there but thats ok. I am enjoying your story alot and constantly looking for updates. Great job! Better yet I love your long chapters. Bura
PS- Keep up the great story telling! |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2003 17:32 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED IT!!!!! FINALYYYY CHIVAA AND GOKUU!! The lemon was sweet and yummy
! BUT WHAT ABOUT VEGETA!!!!!!! HOWS MY BABY!!
AND RADDIZT THAT HOTTIE! will he and bulma u know!
AND WHAT ABOUT TRUNKS!!!!! GOKU HAS TO KNOW NOW!!
UPDATEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!
Later! |
Reviewed By: kittygirl On: April 20, 2003 17:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hella good fanfic but finish it soon ok? i deffenitly want to find out what happens |
Reviewed By: yoshine On: April 15, 2003 07:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story is great you just need to stop updating and write a new chapter |
Reviewed By: i am unkown On: April 14, 2003 16:41 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gods! He is even bigger than Vegeta!
:-O is that possible, wow first time i read a story with someone else bigger! lol Great job tho, even if i prefer V/B lemons then R/B! dont worry im not freaking out lol! |
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen On: April 13, 2003 10:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Explainations for the ratings:
STYLE OF WRITING:
overall, i can visualize what is going on in the story. i really love that you make your chapters so long; definitly something everyone is enjoying, i'm sure. ^_^ though i'm sure that means it will be a while until you update. :(
okay, now for a suggestion...when you re-read what you write, make sure you aren't using too many 'he's, she's, them, they, their, etc.', and this is because sometimes i got confused as to who exactly you were talking about especially when Chivaa and Bulma were in a room. you used 'she' so many times it was hard to make sure which of the girls you were talking about. the same with the men. i had to re-read the paragraphs quite a few times during this story. it kinda takes out of the enjoyment factor because after re-reading i zone out a little bit. other than that though, there were no other problems in your style of writing.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR:
Who really has perfected in this area? lol. there were just little mess-ups that suggests English isn't your first language. i'm not totally serious on that but there was this one part you put in the dialogue "What did you said?". i can see where things like that happen because i do it alot in my emails; i get typing so fast and i'm so caught up in what i want to get out of my head and on the keys, that i miss words, don't spell right, and use bad grammar (hell, i probably even did it in this review). if this is something you think you'd want to improve on just re-read a few times. but don't worry because it's not like your spelling and grammar is so terrible that i can't understand what your point is. these are just little things i noticed. plus, quite a few times you would say "is" and it was obvious it was supposed to be "it's/its". see, just little errors.
ORIGINALITY/CREATIVITY:
i'm hooked. that is basically all i can say. your lemon scenes are excellent ^_^ (major thumbs up). you also did a good job making Bulma know what she was talking about when she had that meeting with the king. she was actually SHOWN to be a genius instead of just being told she was a genius. can you see the difference that i mean? plus, something i think is good for all writers to do, is that you leave the reader wondering what is gonna happen next but it's not exactly suspence. *shrugs* i dunno, keep up the good work. ^_^
ENJOYMENT FACTOR:
like i said, i'm hooked, and i think you're doing great!
so, i suppose the overall rating says it all then. anyways, i hope you are able to update real soon because i look forward to it. ^_^ good luck.
-Lone Vixen |
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