| "Meant To Be" Reviews/Comments [ 68 ] |
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Reviewed By: outtadaloop On: May 08, 2003 18:34 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Good job! Even though this fic takes the same A/U slave plots and the characters are slightly OOC, all of the plot twists and relationships has more than made this one hell of a captivating, engrossing story ~ of course the lemons help ALOT too : ) Plzzz update soon! I wanna see some V/B action!!! |
Reviewed By: bura400 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2003 20:54 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Some errors here and there but thats ok. I am enjoying your story alot and constantly looking for updates. Great job! Better yet I love your long chapters. Bura
PS- Keep up the great story telling! |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2003 17:32 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED IT!!!!! FINALYYYY CHIVAA AND GOKUU!! The lemon was sweet and yummy
! BUT WHAT ABOUT VEGETA!!!!!!! HOWS MY BABY!!
AND RADDIZT THAT HOTTIE! will he and bulma u know!
AND WHAT ABOUT TRUNKS!!!!! GOKU HAS TO KNOW NOW!!
UPDATEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!
Later! |
Reviewed By: kittygirl On: April 20, 2003 17:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hella good fanfic but finish it soon ok? i deffenitly want to find out what happens |
Reviewed By: yoshine On: April 15, 2003 07:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story is great you just need to stop updating and write a new chapter |
Reviewed By: i am unkown On: April 14, 2003 16:41 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gods! He is even bigger than Vegeta!
:-O is that possible, wow first time i read a story with someone else bigger! lol Great job tho, even if i prefer V/B lemons then R/B! dont worry im not freaking out lol! |
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen On: April 13, 2003 10:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Explainations for the ratings:
STYLE OF WRITING:
overall, i can visualize what is going on in the story. i really love that you make your chapters so long; definitly something everyone is enjoying, i'm sure. ^_^ though i'm sure that means it will be a while until you update. :(
okay, now for a suggestion...when you re-read what you write, make sure you aren't using too many 'he's, she's, them, they, their, etc.', and this is because sometimes i got confused as to who exactly you were talking about especially when Chivaa and Bulma were in a room. you used 'she' so many times it was hard to make sure which of the girls you were talking about. the same with the men. i had to re-read the paragraphs quite a few times during this story. it kinda takes out of the enjoyment factor because after re-reading i zone out a little bit. other than that though, there were no other problems in your style of writing.
SPELLING AND GRAMMAR:
Who really has perfected in this area? lol. there were just little mess-ups that suggests English isn't your first language. i'm not totally serious on that but there was this one part you put in the dialogue "What did you said?". i can see where things like that happen because i do it alot in my emails; i get typing so fast and i'm so caught up in what i want to get out of my head and on the keys, that i miss words, don't spell right, and use bad grammar (hell, i probably even did it in this review). if this is something you think you'd want to improve on just re-read a few times. but don't worry because it's not like your spelling and grammar is so terrible that i can't understand what your point is. these are just little things i noticed. plus, quite a few times you would say "is" and it was obvious it was supposed to be "it's/its". see, just little errors.
ORIGINALITY/CREATIVITY:
i'm hooked. that is basically all i can say. your lemon scenes are excellent ^_^ (major thumbs up). you also did a good job making Bulma know what she was talking about when she had that meeting with the king. she was actually SHOWN to be a genius instead of just being told she was a genius. can you see the difference that i mean? plus, something i think is good for all writers to do, is that you leave the reader wondering what is gonna happen next but it's not exactly suspence. *shrugs* i dunno, keep up the good work. ^_^
ENJOYMENT FACTOR:
like i said, i'm hooked, and i think you're doing great!
so, i suppose the overall rating says it all then. anyways, i hope you are able to update real soon because i look forward to it. ^_^ good luck.
-Lone Vixen |
Reviewed By: Faye89 On: April 07, 2003 13:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is getting really good!! Please update soon! |
Reviewed By: DoPeYwEiRdOiDiOt On: April 04, 2003 00:08 EST
Comment/Review:
Dis is da best fanfic ive read yet |
Reviewed By: Credik On: April 03, 2003 22:48 EST
Comment/Review:
Sorry i haven't noticed this story b4 cuz its GR8
Luv the part where Radditz and Bulma got together.
ITS ABOUT TIME SOME1 MADE VEGETA ACTUALLY DO SOME WORK 2 GET BULMA |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2003 19:45 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another great Chappy! I loved it I cant wait for the other one.I hate Feeza that fucking bastard!
I must say that the Radditz/Bulma lemon was yummy!! I know its a V/B but I enjoyed it , I cant wait for a Chivaa/goku lemon! and anotherV/B.The king is so paternal in this fic and I like that!
Please Update soon ok!
Later! |
Reviewed By: becca On: March 20, 2003 22:55 EST
Comment/Review:
omg!!! how sad..... poor bulma.... so is vegeta going to explain wat happened????? will vegeta forgive bulma???? well update SOON!!!!! payce outZ~! |
Reviewed By: The crazy One [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2003 21:03 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I loved this story! It's ingenius, and there are a minimum of mistakes, I only caught a few ^_-
I don't really know what else to say, to really encourage you to write more, but just to say, I really did love reading this. I hope you continue ^_^
~*~ºCrazy Oneº~*~ |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2003 19:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THANK GOD u made it to mediaminer!!!!!I have been waiting for this fic I mean the update cause adimra takes sometimes too long to update!
I LOVE ITTTT!!!!!!
UPDATE SOOOONNN! AND LLLEMONNNNN!!
LATER! |
Reviewed By: bex On: July 22, 2003 21:31 EDT
Comment/Review:
Wow B/R lemon seemed like bulma liked it too much lol! Well sorry but ahh it hurt me a bit im a big B/V fan hopefully this is still gonna stay B/V *prays*. But i must say making her love both makes an interestion plot! cant wait for the next chapter! |
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