| "When It Rains" Reviews/Comments [ 21 ] |
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Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2006 16:42 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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this is a really cool fic, please update soon. I still can\'t believe what you made chichi do but it was bound to happen. Nice work.
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Title: O___O
Reviewed By: LC On: August 23, 2005 01:28 CDT
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*tears at hair* NOOO!!! GAH youve got me on pins and needles! Please, PLEASE update soon! Ian is Goku's older brother...I cant wait to see that explained!! *gives you many bribes*
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 00:07 CDT
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I don't know how I missed this story before, but I'm glad I found it now. (I'm also glad you've been updating it.) Extremely well written, with a believable Vegeta. I can't even hate Chichi too much - most of her complaints are valid, although her methods stank. I like the complicated weaving plot running through this. Your characterization is good. Looking forward to Goku and Vegeta finally getting together. Why do I think Vegeta is going to go into an explosive rage at some point? *g* Well done, and looking forward to your next update.
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Reviewed By: fyrbyrd On: August 06, 2005 08:19 CDT
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Please please please don't give up on this. I have been following it mainly on ff.net, I really want to see where you are going with this!
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Title: Hey, look! CONSTRUCTIVE REVIEW!
Reviewed By: SaiyanTrombone [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2005 15:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good stuff! Oh, and don't get upset about the ratings, please. I'm unnaturally brutal about spelling and grammar. Though this is story is more grammatically sound than most, there are still a few nagging misspellings and grammatical errors. However, I will give you a huge HUGE kudos on your wording in most cases. You do a great job of showing the intellectual depth of the characters. Sometimes, though, it feels as if a thesaurus threw up all over your story. I know you don't want to use the same words all the time, but you may want to steer clear of some of the more obscure terms that you're not incredibly familiar with. Overall, the plot is creative and captivating (honestly, I've rushed home from class the past 2 days just so I could get to the computer first and read this story). You've done an EXCELLENT job of keeping both Vegeta and Goku in character. In fact, I'm so impressed with this story that I'm even willing to overlook my one pet peeve*! So keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to reading more! -SaiyanTrombone *my pet peeve is the sporradic use of romanized japanese in a story in which it doesn't really enhance the storyline
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Title: When It Rains
Reviewed By: blah-de-blah-de-blah On: July 14, 2005 02:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!!! I love ur fic! Please! Please, if u have any shread of human dencency u will update soon!!! *starts crying*
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Reviewed By: AnimeDuneJediElf [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2004 19:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope that Gohan and Goten give that bitch Chichi a piece of their minds! Leaving poor Goku all alone like that. I hope that Vegeta can help him cope and please I would also like to be notified, my e-mail is, jedimastermariana@yahoo.com, Update soon! ^_^ *|Mari|*
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Reviewed By: lee-lee On: May 15, 2004 18:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love the story so far. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: Crepian On: March 06, 2004 00:58 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That..that ChiChi..Oh my G-d, that bitch! I hate her! *takes a deep breath* Okay...calm down... Anyway, good story! I love it! I can't wait to see how Goku and Vegeta's relationship develope and how that would tie in with the murder. Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: thePrincesJewel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2003 18:47 CST
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on the offchance you decide to update this lovely bit again, yes, i would like to be notified. I want to see how the little twists turn out. jewel@vegetalovers.every1.net
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Reviewed By: kitkat On: August 10, 2003 13:29 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Genius are often shy people. I'm a shy person but I don't fit this description, neither I'm saying you are a genius... but you certainly are something, 'cause you're able to make readers actually feel the emotions of the characters as few fic writers do. When I read the chapter where Chichi leaves Goku I almost cried along with him. Definitely you shall not be afraid of showing your work to the public, we are worthy reading good fics like this one.
I'm looking forward the next chapter hopping it won't take long to get to my eager hands.
PS: Please forgive any mistakes I may have done, english is not my native language... even if it had improved greatly after a year working with some foreign students.
PS2: Here is my e-mail adress so you can keep me in touch with the updades: galadig@yahoo.com.br |
Reviewed By: Hope_Poe26 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2003 17:34 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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I wasn't so sure at first that I'd like your story, but now you've got me intrigued. Please keep on writing. |
Reviewed By: arovak On: August 09, 2003 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow amazing story I luv it! I luv all personalitys you gave evry one, i like that there not to OOC. anyways write again really soon, i cant wait to hear what happens next! |
Reviewed By: Trunks girl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2003 14:06 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is truly excellent! I love it! And kepp the chapters flowing! I'm addicted! |
Reviewed By: agent 182 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 07, 2003 20:50 CDT
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I really loved it. I think Chichi is leaving Goku and taking all the money. THAT BITCH how could she? That guy that got that job at Capsule Corp has something to do with Goku beig sick i know it! Someone from the past most likely. I would like to know when you update. My email is
blinkoneeightytwotimes@hotmail.com
Thanks, i can't wait untilyou put up the next chapter ^_^ Until then . . . |
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