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Title: Ch.9 is great
Reviewed By: Peacemaker(not logged in) On: June 10, 2005 02:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ch.9 was just what I was needing. I really don't care that there wasn't a lemon in there becuz it wasn't necessary. This was a plot chapter and it explained a lot about your story and it maskes more sense now. Keep up the good work and update when you have time please.
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Reviewed By: Psiberkiwi On: June 08, 2005 08:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
To the idiot who posted the last three reviews (yes, I'm pretty sure they're all from the same person), the fic clearly stated that all three girls were over the legal age! Get a life! To WarpWizard: you're writing is wonderful - don't let boof-heads like this put you off! Keep it up!
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Reviewed By: Ramiel On: June 05, 2005 22:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You smarmy bastard. My brain says "oh, I get it now. That all makes sense. What an informative, useful, and generally awesome chapter." My other brain says "Where is the sex? WHERE IS THE SEX?!" You need to put your life on hold and finish this. Don't whine to me about crap like school, or a job, or a relationship, rent/taxes. Just finish this. Now. Don't you love pushy fanfic readers?
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: June 02, 2005 18:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
THANK YOU FOR UPDATING!! I was scared you had given up. Good enough chapter, although I would havespread over two chapters. Can't wait for the next!
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Reviewed By: Taro MD On: June 02, 2005 16:28 CDT
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It explains how everyone got together and all that. I really thought it was going to be an all-out lemon story but now I reckon it's now a masterpiece. Now I got to match this for Sex Days and dish out the best plot that I can muster up! Keep up the good work Warp!
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: A-Z On: June 02, 2005 09:01 CDT
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Finally got around to reading the latest chapt. Nice. As you noted, the draft and final weren't that much different. :) And now that the plot is (pretty much) out of the way, let the vitamin C flow...!
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Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: May 21, 2005 00:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, lots of good fun here~! I started reading this fic expecting it to only be an Ikari/Sohryu pairing, so I was pretty surprised when Mihoshi was thrown into the mix (I somehow managed to miss the Tenchi/Ranma part in the "animes involved" part). Not that I'm complaining. Your style is awesome and you have a great knack for those lemon scenes (hot stuff!). There were no major spelling grammar errors that i could catch and this fic has been a blast to read overall! Only thing I'd pick on is how you made Ikari (well, all the male characters) have incredible amounts of stamina, be well endowed, etc. You tie it all in with your story though in a great way, to the point where its not too much of an issue. Anyways, Keep it up and update soon (I hope), this is awesome and I'd love to see more of this.
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: May 19, 2005 21:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry, I meant Kiyone instead of Mihoshi, my bad.
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Reviewed By: JWMA On: May 19, 2005 21:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very cool fic. But you mentioned Tsunami and Mihoshi. Which Tenchi universe is this? PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: loslomo On: April 24, 2005 03:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
very good. I like the sandman referance (if it was one) at the end of chapter 2.
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Reviewed By: Ramiel On: April 10, 2005 16:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think I love you. Although it looks like you're working on other things now, I urge you to drop everything else and finish this. Now.
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Reviewed By: Succubus Lover On: March 24, 2005 12:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was very well done. Word choice, spelling, grammar, the style and just the overall product were incredible. Don't take this is a strange way, but I really like how you can write about great long sessions of descriptive sex and yet are still able to inject those cute WAFF moments into the body of the fanfic. That is truly amazing. You don't have to put this because your fanfic is terrific as it is, but it would probably be even better if you put just a few more moments of pure sensuality into your future chapters. You had a great one in chapter 3 where Shinji had the male superiority thing going with Asuka. Just a suggestion. Thanks for writing and hope you update soon whether it be in this fanfic or another! ^_^
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Reviewed By: SirOverlord [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2004 09:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*SNIFF SNIFF* That was beutiful enough said.
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Reviewed By: Lord of the Bling On: November 14, 2004 23:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Perfect! This is the greatest lemon fic I have ever read in my life! Please hurry and update this as soon as you possibly can!
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Reviewed By: Lord of the Bling On: November 05, 2004 00:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice, I liked it quite a bit. You just need to update this thing!
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