| "Blood-Red Eyes" Reviews/Comments [ 217 ] |
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Reviewed By: Shinjata On: August 10, 2003 01:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Friggin great dude. Hope you update soon! I need some more lemony goodness. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: inucutie On: August 09, 2003 04:31 CDT
Comment/Review:
great fic.i like totalally love it.so could you like update soon.i've been waiting for like 2 weeks now. |
Reviewed By: Nikki On: August 02, 2003 18:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED IT |
Reviewed By: otaku kiwi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2003 02:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
im an idiot i spelled write wrong...so embaressed... |
Reviewed By: otaku kiwi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2003 02:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story totally loved it!!!
Die kikyo die!
also u said u wanted to see the inuyasha human and youkai plushies, nee? Ive seen the human ones at yahoo japan store auction thing...plez right more!
nice lemon chapters too ;P |
Reviewed By: kaoru wolf On: July 23, 2003 20:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
An okay style of writing, good and much better than the majority of Inuyasha fanfiction out there, but it doesn't have you completely wrapped up in the story. I think you need more description. Since this is Inuyasha's POV, smell should be more of a factor. You mentioned him smelling Kagome and Kikyo's scent, but what about the rest of the world around him?
I thought that was a tad unrealistic. He's not just suddenly smell Kikyo a mile or so away. There are other things to distract him, like that plants around him, the smell of the campire, Miroku and Sango. And how much did he smell? Did Kagome's scent of fear wash over him in a wave, or was it a light, almost imperceivable aroma such as Kikyo's scent from Inuyasha's distance? You need to find some ways to describe scent a little better, a thesaurus is very useful in that aspect.
The only other little piece of your fic I didn't like was that I found Kikyo fairly OOC. You have her sneering at Kagome, which she never really has done. She frowns at Kagome, and smiles politely while mocking her to make Kagome feel childish.
She's calm and collected most of the time, exept when Inuyasha does something really...dramatic, is the word I'm looking for I guess. Then she lets her mask slip and becomes bitter and convinced she needs to take him to hell.
She just seemed too...I guess too emotional without much need. That bothered me a little bit.
A lot of fic writers make the mistake of making her like that, which is more fitting for Kagura that Kikyo, who's more neutral with a strong (and really strange)love/hate towards Inuyasha than just flat out evil.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this story. It's a really impressive shot what would happen if Inuyasha became full demon. I like the way you portrayed Kagome in this fic, as well as Sango. I'm sorry if I offended you with my criticism above. I just felt you deserved more than just the standard 'It was good, so write more' review.
Anyway, I'm off to read what else you have written. Good job on this. |
Reviewed By: Dragon Tamer On: July 21, 2003 14:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was Fantastic please write more soon.
P.S. Thank you for getting rid of kikyo I hate her so much. |
Reviewed By: Calinda On: July 19, 2003 20:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's wonderful, keep writing the story i can't wait to read the rest of it!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: ask ketchum On: July 16, 2003 13:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like your story. i hope you finish it soon. you should write some more. |
Reviewed By: Yume Tsukino On: July 15, 2003 19:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying your fic... I want to read the next chapter now!!!!!!!!!!! Come on, onegai? Ja ne, Please add to it and have Youkai Inuyasha fuck her brains out. (Not literally lol)
"Joy to the World, the clay bitch is dead!" |
Reviewed By: me On: July 10, 2003 17:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MUST HAVE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Don't let Inuyasha kill her.Just make harsh love
to her.And when Hanyou Inuyasha not get mad at
Kagome.
UPDATE SOON |
Reviewed By: me On: July 10, 2003 16:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kikyou finnaly got her ass kicked!!!!!! Hahahahaha!*evil grin* |
Reviewed By: Aphrael On: July 10, 2003 14:00 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm addicted! Update soon! |
Reviewed By: NekoYasha On: July 09, 2003 23:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright! Thank you for starting the story back up again! I've been waiting for an update since May |
Reviewed By: DBZ Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 08:33 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! There's lot's of lemon in it ^_^! But, what I don't understand is, why did you have to leave a cliff hanger? I mean, seriously, I think we all wanna know what happens next, and soon! So hurry up with the next chapter, okay? And d'ya think you could try to make Kagome do the impossible and try to make Youkai Inuyasha soften a LITTLE bit? It's your story, and I'll understand if you decide to just make him fuck her senseless, but please? Okay, thanks, bye! |
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