| "Blood-Red Eyes" Reviews/Comments [ 217 ] |
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Reviewed By: Inuheart On: July 09, 2003 02:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
KIKYO IS DEAD BY INUYASHA'S HAND!!!!!!MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Ahem. Xcuse me. Well anyways love the story, the whole mate thing, and of course the fact that that bitch Kikyo is dead!!!! Pretty please with sugar on top, update the story soon!!! New chapters would make this world a whole freakin lot of a better place to be in. Oh ya. All worship the dirt that the mighty Kai19 walks on. I am your forever loyal servent. |
Reviewed By: ExoToa [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2003 21:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this story but it hasn't been updated in a ling time
PLEASE UPDATE! |
Reviewed By: little_bit_of_faith16 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2003 22:31 CDT
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Argh! The suspense!! Please update soon! (P.S. I vote for fuck her senseless!!) |
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2003 21:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
After pondering it for a few days, I think I've figured out what was bothering me about this chapter: All the other times you've taken us for a trip through Full-Demon Inuyasha's mind, his perceptions and motivations were skewed, but coherent.
In other words, Demon-Inu was still capable of reason, he just saw the world through different eyes. I really liked the fact that he could think but not use spoken language. He worked with things that regular Inuyasha either didn't know or didn't think about: the pack rules. And he seemed to forget that the others didn't: that Sango wouldn't recognize a sub. hold, or that Kagome might object to the way he viewed her as an "unmated member of his pack." (Rereading chapter sixteen, I can tell that you're using some of the same points. Sesshoumaru's call for a distraction, "just barely made its way into his brain.")
I guess my point is that the trip -- and I use the word deliberately -- is so vivid that I can't imagine Kagome or anyone mistaking Demon-Inu for anything else, even in the middle of a battle with Naraku. |
Reviewed By: Midnight Fox On: July 07, 2003 20:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I only review fics I deam as good.
smiles sweetly
Yours was good, very good.
Midnight fox |
Reviewed By: Lutra On: July 07, 2003 00:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
"ding dong the bitch is dead..." *party ensues* |
Reviewed By: Lonely Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2003 21:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*yawns* Wow my eyes hurt from reading and I'm so tired from lack of sleep...Yet again. Anyways I love this story but I'm stopping at chappie 7 so this is review is like a umm bookmark I guess. I'll be back! |
Reviewed By: luvli guurl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2003 12:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok this is an okay fic. it just needs something else. its not bad or anything but its not great. it seems like basically just one long lemon some lemons lasted for more than one chapter for gods sake. you could add a little something else maybe besides sex. |
Reviewed By: Re: chap 15 On: July 06, 2003 08:50 CDT
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Naraku IS a hanyou. |
Reviewed By: Sistergaia On: July 06, 2003 07:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I realy enjoyed your story. I cant wait for you to continue. The lemon sectons were very well done, espechaly for a first attempt. Although there seemed to be some missing sentences at times. Not that I can complain about spelling or gramer. ; ) |
Reviewed By: Yumiki-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 22:29 CDT
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YYYAAAATTTTTTAAA!!!!!! I can't wait 'Til you get the next chapter out!!! I wonder what he will do to her and I just KNOW that the next lemon will be a GREAT!!!!!! PLEZ up-date SSSSOOOOOOONNNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!
lol,Yumiki-chan |
Reviewed By: Julie K On: July 05, 2003 22:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really enjoying this story. You do a fabulous job with the lemons! I love the little plot twists. I can't wait to see what type of punishment Inuyasha has instore. My only complain is that the fight scenes are a little confusing. It's hard to tell exactly what's going on. I admit I haven't gotten very far into the Inuyasha series and I'm not familiar with all of Naraku's "children", but I just got a bit confused as to who's doing what, especially in the last chapter. I think you've used a few to many pronouns. Perhaps a bit more detail would help too. I think that would make the fight scenes a bit more exciting and easy to follow. Other than that I really enjoyed the story. I hope you post more soon! |
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 19:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gets wordy in places.
? Sess was still around from the previous night, right? Is Naraku's appearance a coincidence, or did he detect that Kouga and the brothers Inu were all in the same place?
Inuyasha does look different when he goes full. Couldn't Kagome see him? And I thought your version of Demon-Inu didn't talk.
"...he saw the sky, then nothing." (Silence for the great villian, who dies aptly.)
A couple of the paragraphs get awkward. Sesshoumaru using Tennseiga on Kohaku is a chilling moment, but the way it's tangled makes it hard to tell. It might be better if Sesshoumaru holds out the sword, THEN Sango panics and has to be held back, THEN he slices the pallbearers.
Ee! I can't wait to read more. Whetever Inuyasha has in mind, it's probably quite different from what we've seen.
I'm still wondering what Kanna's motives were. Even if she only wanted her freedom, she must have some plans.
Nice peg on Rin. |
Reviewed By: Ithilwen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2003 18:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOHOO!! (Does the Dance of the Joyous Update.)
I'm having trouble figuring out what happens when Kanna's mirror breaks. Is everyone paralyzed? Are they just shocked? Can Kouga, his henchguys, or Kagura hear what Kanna is saying?
And you're using "hanyou" to refer to not only Inuyasha, but also Naraku and his offspring?
Why are Inuyasha and Kagome so eager to believe Kanna?
There are also some minor editing errors. |
Reviewed By: kag-chan On: July 05, 2003 13:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!!!!!!!!That is the BEST fanfic I've ever read . Keep up the GREAT work, if you could please continue this story that would be great! Ja ne! |
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