| "A Shard in Kyoto" Reviews/Comments [ 53 ] |
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Reviewed By: Alewa On: June 17, 2004 00:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
if you would right more that would be wonderful I love reading your stories the give me a great feel of things I must say that you are a author that stands alone
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Reviewed By: essie [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2004 02:17 CDT
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this is a great fanfic please update soon
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2004 21:16 CDT
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This is obviously a labor of love with a lot of research and it's a good idea, having Inu Yasha and company go to the big city. The story is well written, though I may sometimes think that Inu Yasha is too harsh. In any case, you have obviously put a lot of work into the story which makes the poor proof reading hard to understand; i.e. in one of your disclaimers, you claim to own the characters. Quite a few times the word "several" is replaced by "serval" and there are the usual typos. Also, I found it annoying when the historical notes appeared in the middle of the page instead of at the bottom (perhaps that's a holdover from your word processor where they were properly footed on separate pages?). Don't get me wrong, I'm looking forward to reading the next installment (I like that the characters, at least the girls, are having to make some hard choices) but the mechanics need work.
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Reviewed By: RocketMama On: May 10, 2004 09:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Since my toddler is yelling at me, I don't have a lot of time for an in-depth review, but I've enjoyed this story immensely. I'm going to have to read your other stories now, just to get more background (and because I'm sure they're good, too.) It's not often you actually *learn* something from reading a fanfic. I'm really digging your descriptions of medieval Kyoto and social structure in Japan. Keep up the good research. This story has an authentic (and grown-up) feel to it that is lacking in so many other IY fanfics.
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Reviewed By: pagan_sedjou(they won't let me login!) On: April 07, 2004 19:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just so you know, I do not idly pass out 10's. I love this story. It's very creative and I check on it as often as I can to see if you've updated. So, please update soon!
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Reviewed By: Naishin no Miko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2004 15:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Sango-sama. How can she get out of killing the peasant? It's not possible; she'll blow their much-needed cover. Hasn't everyone, at one time or another, had to do something completely horrible in order to accomplish the greater good? And poor, naive Kagome-chan. I'm afraid that she'll be found out and killed. Or worse, tortured. Worse because a quick death is merciful compared to the torture these guys were capable of in those days. It won't be long before someone finds her out...unless we are to expect an appearance of the "real" Kikyou soon (though how in the hell; isn't she still in the village/pre-Edo/whatever)? Fantastic job again.
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Reviewed By: rommel17 not signed in. On: April 04, 2004 16:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ruthless decision making. Its a bitch which I know all too well. In Sango's situation she has a Katana that kills & injures by blunt trauma (Yes sharp swords do kill in this method). Now if the Tanegeshima weapons were civil war era .45 caliber and considering she had one plus knowledge of how a bullet kills she could have aimed for the man's neck slightly to the left of the thrachea. The man would have lived but the hydrostatic shock would have knocked him unconcious and leaving him to be picked up by Buddhist monks for what they think is cremation till their priest checks him. Unfortunately that knowledge is not available and the Tanegeshima weapons are .80 caliber with a muzzle velocity upon leaving the barrel at mach 3.5 and hitting with a force egaul to a 1987 chevrolet traveling at 70mph. That's enough mass and force to take the man's head off. For those who doubt me, all modern Main Battle Tanks have smooth bore cannons because of the greater muzzle velocity. The shells have fins that enable it to travel 3 miles and kill an enemy tank at a speed of mach 5, and with a force equal to a 70 ton dump truck traveling at 70mph. Long story short is unless she is surgicaly precise with a dagger she has no choice to kill the guy. Lord knows I had to make such choices in Tet concerning suspicious people, though I did everything possible to positively identify hostiles, I still had to fire over open sites first and ask questions later. Semper Fidelis
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Title: Wonderful
Reviewed By: Mystic_female_420@yahoo.com On: March 27, 2004 08:41 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really wish I could give an in-depth review right now, but ::sigh:: I've been up all night just reading and sadly my brain is off in lala land. ^.^ Never the less, this is an absolutely wonderful fic. So far one of the best I have read and by far one of my favorites that you have written....(just ignore the fact that I adore all of your fics..^.^) The story-plot line is constructed very well, the movement from scene to scene is surperb and the characterization is simply wonderful. Not to mention that your lemons always leave me with a happy feeling inside...::cold showers!!:: And like hundreds of fan-girls out there, I can't wait for the next chapter to come out! Great work Jeff! Mystic
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Title: Cufflink95
Reviewed By: cuffers On: March 02, 2004 00:26 CST
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im so not into those number ratings...........this chapter is........heavy! I was surprised to see they would "do it" without being private.......and since the girls know about birth control and the after pill im surprised you didn't bring that in to it as to take the pressure off of thier future intimacies.........I also figure Kagome to want to hear an "I love you " before or during or she would feel used, Sango too for that matter....Men you captured their attitudes but the girls are more advanced than the women of the day and I don't think they want to settle for less, even if they just heard it privately from thier lovers. Looking forward to the next delemmas..........
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Title: Cufflink95
Reviewed By: cuffers On: March 02, 2004 00:26 CST
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im so not into those number ratings...........this chapter is........heavy! I was surprised to see they would "do it" without being private.......and since the girls know about birth control and the after pill im surprised you didn't bring that in to it as to take the pressure off of thier future intimacies.........I also figure Kagome to want to hear an "I love you " before or during or she would feel used, Sango too for that matter....Men you captured their attitudes but the girls are more advanced than the women of the day and I don't think they want to settle for less, even if they just heard it privately from thier lovers. Looking forward to the next delemmas..........
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Reviewed By: cuffers On: March 02, 2004 00:24 CST
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im so not into those number ratings...........this chapter is........heavy! I was surprised to see they would "do it" without being private.......and since the girls know about birth control and the after pill im surprised you didn't bring that in to it as to take the pressure off of thier future intimacies.........I also figure Kagome to want to hear an "I love you " before or during or she would feel used, Sango too for that matter....Men you captured their attitudes but the girls are more advanced than the women of the day and I don't think they want to settle for less, even if they just heard it privately from thier lovers. Looking forward to the next delemmas..........
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Reviewed By: broken_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 22:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've got to be one of your worst readers ever. I started out reading 'Kagome Where are you?', then got some extra time one night and read 'Spring Fertility Festival', 'I-Shin-Po', 'Why Miroku is a Pervert', and 'Night Visits'. I think that was all of them that I read that time. Then I got some extra time last night and read all of 'A Shard in Kyoto'. And I've only reviewed once or twice. Anyway, I really like your fics. I especially appreciate all the work you must go through to look up all the sources for your historical parts of your fics, which is a lot. It amazes me that you can get such long chapters written in such short periods of times. I await the next update of 'A Shard in Kyoto' and 'Kagome Where are you?' Later - broken_angel, a.k.a. Crash
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Reviewed By: theMaven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 13:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wondered how they were gonna settle that whole teahouse episode . . . So I suppose that answers that. Nothing like a little group sex between good friends ^_^ And Kagome attracts so many weird guys. What's up with that? Does every guy in the world wanna jack off in her panties? o.O hehe You don't have to answer that. Just a rhetorical question . . . Oh well, good job as always. You're a real whiz with dialogue.
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Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 02:03 CST
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Oh no, please don't stop this wonderful fiction. Not when it's getting to the good part! Don't give up hope yet.
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Reviewed By: fanfic-er On: February 27, 2004 10:30 CST
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you probably wont pay much attention to this but i did stop at the 3rd chappie. :(
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