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| "A Shard in Kyoto" Reviews/Comments [ 53 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: StormAZ [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2004 01:21 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hahahaha ... ok, read this one and man ... what hoops you have them jumping through! Priceless!! But I caught up to you ^_~ The upcoming conversation should be worth the wait alone. Not to mention that artist Kagome needs to retrieve her moms stuff from (see, I didn't forget about him ...). Although, I'm surprised that there aren't more reviews for this one. It's an excellent story and I will be back when you update it ^_^
| Reviewed By: Black Rose Lady [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2004 19:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, you haven't lost me, and quite frankly, I don't think you're going to! Your style of writing is different from others I've read; you write in the present tense, if I'm correct? You write as though you and/or the reader are standing on the sidelines, watching the characters go about their business. I think that that is very refreshing! You also take a lot of time, I believe, to prepare for your chapter, and ALWAYS make sure the correct references are made. I LOVE this story so much! Please, please, keep it going! Take all the time you need to update, because I swear I'm not going anywhere! ~BRL
| Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2004 20:18 CST
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While I'm sad that you're not going to be updating for another month or so, I am greatful for this latest chapter. Though it's gonna kill me to wait. You stoped just when things were getting to the most interesting part. As for your reviews, I hope you don't let that dictate how you write. I suppose that the reason why you don't get that many reviews is that most of the readers are not used to "real" reading. Your stories are very in depth, and involved... much more like a novel than a fanfic. As for me... I love reading, so this is wonderful for me ^_^
| Title: Hey this is great!
Reviewed By: Melli [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2004 16:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is great and I REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!
| Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2004 05:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't even begin to describe how much I adore your fiction! The intricate detail, the planning, and insightful interaction between characters, are all first rate! I adore the fact that in your story you seem to have deviated little (if any at all) from the origional story lines, which of course includes Inu's brash and insensitive nature, Sango's experience, wisdom and of course, fighting abilities, but lastly Kagome and all of her... shall we say, "Ism's." Including that she can be quite ditsy, brave, powerful, and charismatic. I absolutly am heartbroken that I'll have to wait to find out what happens in the geisha house! I know that what ever happens it can't help but be funny. Just a personal note, I love that you introduced what could be a nice IY/Kag side story when he finally accepted help, and when he admitted that he wouldn't allow only Kag to go into the geisha house. I hope that after the giesha house, he may realize how much she means to him (being only his and no one else's), a small WAFFy moment couldn't hurt, right? That's just one woman's opinion. Ok, lastly, I know this will sound rude, but I hope you take it as constructive because I honestly do adore your fic as is, but your grammar needs help in some areas. Especially with homonymns (Ex: Diff. between weather/whether and that when you combine words remember to break them apart to make sure they make sence... such as we're= we+are, and there's= there+is etc.). I hope that you can use all that I've said constructivly, so good luck, and keep up your wonderful, fabulous, amazing story.
| Reviewed By: Momma Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2003 11:39 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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*smiles* I wanna see Inuyasha deck out as a whore! Aaaa, umm, *cough cough* I mean geisha. I wonder, is Sango gonna turn the tables and grope Miroku? That would be something to read! Poor Kouga, dragging his name threw the dirt...
| Reviewed By: ulyfluyd On: October 27, 2003 05:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
interesting
| Reviewed By: blackberry [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2003 22:01 CST
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This was a good, substantial chapter, lots of action and setup for their attempt at the shard. It looks to me that they may be overmatched, especially since they're fighting humans. (If they were fighting demons they wouldn't have a problem with killing them all.) I particularly liked the Inuyasha/Kagome interaction, how they alternated between fighting and fluff (nice!), though I think the discussion over the use of Kikyou's name was a bit too overdone. It almost seemed as though Miroku and Sango were stirring the pot, instead of staying out of it the way they usually do. At any rate, I'm looking forward to seeing the group in drag in the next chapter!
| Title: e-mail address
Reviewed By: Zhare On: October 22, 2003 00:20 CDT
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One thing that I hate about mm.org is that you have to be a member in order to see the e-mail addresses of authors. Now, to my question: what is your e-mail? I had a few questions about web sites related to ancient Japan that I wanted to ask you, but when I click on the link to e-mail you it says that I have to log-in first. I would really appreciate it if you could e-mail me at dragon16@wcnet.org and let me know e-mail address. Thank you ahead of time, Zhare
| Reviewed By: kookie On: October 07, 2003 15:35 CDT
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another wonderful chapter--very humorous :)
| Reviewed By: crystal singer On: October 02, 2003 22:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Super job, I hope this a long one. I liked the story where Kagome meets Akane as well, they seem like logical best friends. Kyoto is very good. I love your work, Write a story about being stuck in the future, I like the fish out of water scenarios. I would also like to see you include Kouga in a story. Read everything posted here and Fan fiction that you have written so far.
| Reviewed By: Momma Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2003 02:03 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think this is a great story.(Of course what idiot wouldn't?) If you wanna keep PG-13 rating go with the less graphic violent scenes. Is it Sesshoumaru? Dah Dah Daaaaaaa... Overall Rating isn't based on anything in the story.
| Reviewed By: blackberry [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 21:51 CDT
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Oh, and I wanted to mention that I especially liked the reference to Kagome sensing ghosts, and putting another one to rest. After the initial story early in the series, you would think that she would see/sense ghosts on a regular basis, but Takahashi hasn't done anything with that ability since.
| Reviewed By: blackberry [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 21:48 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I've been following this story and enjoy it a lot; I especially appreciate the research you've done to attempt historical accuracy. (Though you did play with the dates with regard to Sesshu, eh; according to the museum links he died in 1506, and the Inuyasha story has to take place sometime after the 1540's when guns were introduced.) In addition to paying attention to historical detail, you've also done a good job of keeping the gang in character. Thanks for posting this and I look forward to future chapters.
| Reviewed By: Priestess Jade, the witch On: September 27, 2003 08:55 CDT
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I am enjoying your fanfic so far, and hope that the next few chapters will be coming out soon. I would also like to thank you for the explainations at the end of each chapter, it really helps me to understand things about the Japanese culture that I have not read about yet. Thanks. Priestess Jade.
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