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| "A Shard in Kyoto" Reviews/Comments [ 53 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: Cufflink95
Reviewed By: cuffers On: March 02, 2004 00:26 CST
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im so not into those number ratings...........this chapter is........heavy! I was surprised to see they would "do it" without being private.......and since the girls know about birth control and the after pill im surprised you didn't bring that in to it as to take the pressure off of thier future intimacies.........I also figure Kagome to want to hear an "I love you " before or during or she would feel used, Sango too for that matter....Men you captured their attitudes but the girls are more advanced than the women of the day and I don't think they want to settle for less, even if they just heard it privately from thier lovers. Looking forward to the next delemmas..........
| Title: Cufflink95
Reviewed By: cuffers On: March 02, 2004 00:26 CST
Comment/Review:
im so not into those number ratings...........this chapter is........heavy! I was surprised to see they would "do it" without being private.......and since the girls know about birth control and the after pill im surprised you didn't bring that in to it as to take the pressure off of thier future intimacies.........I also figure Kagome to want to hear an "I love you " before or during or she would feel used, Sango too for that matter....Men you captured their attitudes but the girls are more advanced than the women of the day and I don't think they want to settle for less, even if they just heard it privately from thier lovers. Looking forward to the next delemmas..........
| Reviewed By: cuffers On: March 02, 2004 00:24 CST
Comment/Review:
im so not into those number ratings...........this chapter is........heavy! I was surprised to see they would "do it" without being private.......and since the girls know about birth control and the after pill im surprised you didn't bring that in to it as to take the pressure off of thier future intimacies.........I also figure Kagome to want to hear an "I love you " before or during or she would feel used, Sango too for that matter....Men you captured their attitudes but the girls are more advanced than the women of the day and I don't think they want to settle for less, even if they just heard it privately from thier lovers. Looking forward to the next delemmas..........
| Reviewed By: broken_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 22:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've got to be one of your worst readers ever. I started out reading 'Kagome Where are you?', then got some extra time one night and read 'Spring Fertility Festival', 'I-Shin-Po', 'Why Miroku is a Pervert', and 'Night Visits'. I think that was all of them that I read that time. Then I got some extra time last night and read all of 'A Shard in Kyoto'. And I've only reviewed once or twice. Anyway, I really like your fics. I especially appreciate all the work you must go through to look up all the sources for your historical parts of your fics, which is a lot. It amazes me that you can get such long chapters written in such short periods of times. I await the next update of 'A Shard in Kyoto' and 'Kagome Where are you?' Later - broken_angel, a.k.a. Crash
| Reviewed By: theMaven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 13:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wondered how they were gonna settle that whole teahouse episode . . . So I suppose that answers that. Nothing like a little group sex between good friends ^_^ And Kagome attracts so many weird guys. What's up with that? Does every guy in the world wanna jack off in her panties? o.O hehe You don't have to answer that. Just a rhetorical question . . . Oh well, good job as always. You're a real whiz with dialogue.
| Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 02:03 CST
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Oh no, please don't stop this wonderful fiction. Not when it's getting to the good part! Don't give up hope yet.
| Reviewed By: fanfic-er On: February 27, 2004 10:30 CST
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you probably wont pay much attention to this but i did stop at the 3rd chappie. :(
| Reviewed By: StormAZ [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2004 01:21 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hahahaha ... ok, read this one and man ... what hoops you have them jumping through! Priceless!! But I caught up to you ^_~ The upcoming conversation should be worth the wait alone. Not to mention that artist Kagome needs to retrieve her moms stuff from (see, I didn't forget about him ...). Although, I'm surprised that there aren't more reviews for this one. It's an excellent story and I will be back when you update it ^_^
| Reviewed By: Black Rose Lady [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2004 19:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, you haven't lost me, and quite frankly, I don't think you're going to! Your style of writing is different from others I've read; you write in the present tense, if I'm correct? You write as though you and/or the reader are standing on the sidelines, watching the characters go about their business. I think that that is very refreshing! You also take a lot of time, I believe, to prepare for your chapter, and ALWAYS make sure the correct references are made. I LOVE this story so much! Please, please, keep it going! Take all the time you need to update, because I swear I'm not going anywhere! ~BRL
| Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2004 20:18 CST
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While I'm sad that you're not going to be updating for another month or so, I am greatful for this latest chapter. Though it's gonna kill me to wait. You stoped just when things were getting to the most interesting part. As for your reviews, I hope you don't let that dictate how you write. I suppose that the reason why you don't get that many reviews is that most of the readers are not used to "real" reading. Your stories are very in depth, and involved... much more like a novel than a fanfic. As for me... I love reading, so this is wonderful for me ^_^
| Title: Hey this is great!
Reviewed By: Melli [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2004 16:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is great and I REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!!
| Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 05, 2004 05:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't even begin to describe how much I adore your fiction! The intricate detail, the planning, and insightful interaction between characters, are all first rate! I adore the fact that in your story you seem to have deviated little (if any at all) from the origional story lines, which of course includes Inu's brash and insensitive nature, Sango's experience, wisdom and of course, fighting abilities, but lastly Kagome and all of her... shall we say, "Ism's." Including that she can be quite ditsy, brave, powerful, and charismatic. I absolutly am heartbroken that I'll have to wait to find out what happens in the geisha house! I know that what ever happens it can't help but be funny. Just a personal note, I love that you introduced what could be a nice IY/Kag side story when he finally accepted help, and when he admitted that he wouldn't allow only Kag to go into the geisha house. I hope that after the giesha house, he may realize how much she means to him (being only his and no one else's), a small WAFFy moment couldn't hurt, right? That's just one woman's opinion. Ok, lastly, I know this will sound rude, but I hope you take it as constructive because I honestly do adore your fic as is, but your grammar needs help in some areas. Especially with homonymns (Ex: Diff. between weather/whether and that when you combine words remember to break them apart to make sure they make sence... such as we're= we+are, and there's= there+is etc.). I hope that you can use all that I've said constructivly, so good luck, and keep up your wonderful, fabulous, amazing story.
| Reviewed By: Momma Cat [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2003 11:39 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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*smiles* I wanna see Inuyasha deck out as a whore! Aaaa, umm, *cough cough* I mean geisha. I wonder, is Sango gonna turn the tables and grope Miroku? That would be something to read! Poor Kouga, dragging his name threw the dirt...
| Reviewed By: ulyfluyd On: October 27, 2003 05:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
interesting
| Reviewed By: blackberry [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2003 22:01 CST
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This was a good, substantial chapter, lots of action and setup for their attempt at the shard. It looks to me that they may be overmatched, especially since they're fighting humans. (If they were fighting demons they wouldn't have a problem with killing them all.) I particularly liked the Inuyasha/Kagome interaction, how they alternated between fighting and fluff (nice!), though I think the discussion over the use of Kikyou's name was a bit too overdone. It almost seemed as though Miroku and Sango were stirring the pot, instead of staying out of it the way they usually do. At any rate, I'm looking forward to seeing the group in drag in the next chapter!
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