| "The New Student and Kagome's Secret" Reviews/Comments [ 1030 ] |
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Reviewed By: (fireash) On: November 25, 2003 16:17 CST
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its up to you. i won't mind a few obstacles even though i want to see what his decision is.
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Reviewed By: Priestess Kylie-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2003 12:17 CST
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Reviewed By: Lil'Inu [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2003 01:48 CST
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the longer and more detailed the better. thats what i say. new characters are always good. they add plot twists and sub plots. i saw go for it. happy thanksgiving and have a good holliday.
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Reviewed By: Dreopje001 On: November 25, 2003 01:32 CST
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Me? Get tired of reading this story? Nah, over my dead body!!! You´re doing it great. Do what you think is right for this story! Cya
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Reviewed By: broken_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 22:56 CST
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I liked the chapter. Also, a good way to good way to fix spelling and grammar mistakes is to get a beta reader. As for the question, I'd like to see a longer fic. And cliffhangers aren't all that bad, but that one with Inuyasha was just cruel. No more like that one, oka? Now I need to go work on my own fics. Ja - broken_angel
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Reviewed By: KagomeReborn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 22:09 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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i will give my reviewers nothing but cliffys until you update
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Reviewed By: KagomeReborn [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 22:07 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NO IT WOULD NOT HURT IT IF THEY KISS, YOU HAVE THEM KISS DAMN IT, AND NOT IN A DREAM NOT WHEN THEIR DYING,,,,BUT WHEN THEIR FULLY CONSIOUS... OH AND WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO SHOW SOON MORE SAN/MIR FLUFF.... YOU COULD INTRODUCE YOUR NEW CHARACTERS DURING THE TRIP OR ONCE THEY ARRIVE AND I LIKE THE PACE OF THE FLIC YOU DONT REALLY NEED TO SPEED UP CAUSE THEN IT WONT BE AS GOOD ARE YOU GOING TO DO A SEQUEL AND JUST SO YOU KNOW YOUR STILL ON THE HOOK FOR THAT LIL STUNT YOU JUST GO SEE MY FLICS THEN YOU'LL SEE WHA YOU DID TO MY READERS ALL YOUR FAULT...SO UPDATE BEFORE I SICK THEM ON YOU
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Reviewed By: kagomeDinuhanyou On: November 24, 2003 20:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
more chappies ^_^' no ,not chapstick
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Title: Answer to Author question
Reviewed By: Kitsune Bi [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 20:02 CST
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I think you should make the story longer with more obstacles.
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Reviewed By: jubilation On: November 24, 2003 20:01 CST
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I kind of find the extra chapters monotonous, Kagome gets upset and runs off or Inuyasha is mad and yelling at her. I wouldn't mind a few obstacles before they reach the castle to strengthen the friendship and love. Just not the same "I'm runnin off, Kagome where are you going" stuff. From the beginning you handled the "being alone" situation very well and I though them crutial.
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Reviewed By: Kaye [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 19:54 CST
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Truth, I want this story to go on, don't make it like 10 more chapters for them to get to the castle, but yeah you can throw in different obstacles, as long as they are not fillers! Fillers BAD!! Bad are fillers! So if they have no reference to the story don't add them, fillers are for only extreme measures. That is all I say on that matter.
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Reviewed By: Priestess Kylie-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 19:34 CST
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Reviewed By: Roru-chan On: November 24, 2003 19:32 CST
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either way is fine with me
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Reviewed By: Natalie *WaterGoddess9* On: November 24, 2003 19:28 CST
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happy thanksgiving to u too, and i think it should stay long!! YAY!! byez! keep up the great job!
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Title: Hmmmm
Reviewed By: Sumechick15 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2003 19:18 CST
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Hmm you wanna know what to do with the story eh? well I for one enjoy the fact that you keep putting obsticals and bad guys before they reach the castle. But I think that you should have maybe 2 or more chapter of obstacules and then have them reach the castle. And before Inuyasha can even set foot in the castle you should have the villagers do something like praise him or hate him oh and there should be another demon that wants the castle that somehow survivde and has a thing for Kagome.....just a thought, anywayz make the story as long as possible...but whenever the story does end....make sure it ends with a bang. Sume
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