| "The Last Glimpse of Hope" Reviews/Comments [ 51 ] |
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Reviewed By: Hunny [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2004 08:34 EST
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Ok I don't really have time for this I'll be late for work,but... There's nothing like consturctive criticism to help better a person. i see nothing wrong and think it should be taken with a grain of salt. As far as the story not progressing andthe women being violated and gathering around for chit chat... jUST WHAT DO YOU THINK THE LIFE OF A SLAVE WAS? How many women from ages ago, and even now, had to bide their time, wait for thwe right moment to survive and escape. Do you think the Underground Railroad was such an easy task? Lots of black men, and women, were strong enough to strike their masters down, but how far would they have gotten? Canada was a long way to run. As for this story yes Vash, Sess, and a number of others are strong , but killing one master isn't enough aspecially when you're worrying about others not just yourself. I feel this is an interesting story that I'd hate to see rushed just so you see a point. And I hope it gets carried out a lot longer. And I personally feel would like to see more smut in it but thats not all that productive to their story, so we all suffer our own burdens. So once again say what you will I live in Ameirca where we can outright curse our own leader without fear. So take it ladies and continue along so far so good to the rest of us. Bye!
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Reviewed By: Joshua Brownie On: March 25, 2004 16:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I again reiterate. I find that your style, and overall structure of the story is very sound, however, I find that this is going no where. It seems to me to be just about a bunch of women getting together, stating that they wish to get away, having meetings, and nothing but silly jokes. I find no plot other than sex against thier will. Ah yes, and let us not forget the pointless tournament. Perhaps it would be best if you just had Vash destroy the planet and get it over with? J.B. PS::: I find that only Belle and Raine seem to be seriosu abotu this fic. J'dee seems just to be imature and trying to strike tastless humor.
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Title: Dranged Fanfic Lover
Reviewed By: Debbietherex On: March 21, 2004 15:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like thos fic very much. I agree with you this fic is does have the beginings of a plot if not more than that. I personally think you are doing a very good job with this fic and building up to the plot. As for your the time it takes for you to update this story is worth waiting for. any one who doesn't think so should not be reading this story. It's a wast of thier time. Once again I would like to say that this is the best fic I have read and is not smut.
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Title: I LUV IT!
Reviewed By: LeeLuo On: March 07, 2004 19:03 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the first fic I've come a cross in quite awhile that is SOO different then the usual. I really LUV reading your fic and can't wait to see what is instore for the characters in the future!:)I also like the whole Sess and Belle thing. It's soo cute..but then again so are the other couples! Keep up the GREAT work! ~Melis
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Title: first_love
Reviewed By: first_love [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2004 18:15 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i for one enjoy your story so don't stop ok? PLEASE FINSH THE STORY!!! will r/z have kids? will all get out of this alive? will veg. boy fall in love with jay? will veg. live? what happens????? u have to finsh this.
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Reviewed By: JoshuaBrownie On: March 02, 2004 13:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I find that your style, and overall structure of the story is very sound, however, I find that this is going no where. It seems to me to be just about a bunch of women getting together, stating that they wish to get away, ahving meetings, and nothing but silly jokes. I find no plot other than sex against thier will. I do not soley enjoy stories based on that. Perhaps a plot would help? Sincerely, JB
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Reviewed By: Sailor Tiamat On: February 13, 2004 00:50 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is wonderful!!! ^______^ Your characters and situations are amazing! Just one point, you gotta work on your grammer and puncuation. I got lost a couple of times and had to re-read a couple of lines. But other than that, Keep up the great and please update soon!!
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Title: are you gunna update?
Reviewed By: Gotens ssj gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2004 10:48 EST
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*prods* c'mon you know you want to *prods* lol c'mon ooh making it eight reviews not counting that this is my second... ;p ~J'dee
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Title: trunks
Reviewed By: Nina Angeles [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2004 19:17 EST
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no trunks. oh please. i would be his concubine any day of the weak. other than the fact the half saiyans are missing, this is a great story
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Reviewed By: kuramarose8888 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2004 06:40 EST
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this is a very good and orignal fic and i hope you update soon. and if you need charcter ideas i have a few stashed away (shuts open closet door).
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Reviewed By: Linze On: January 19, 2004 08:24 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed reading this fic! Keep up the good work ^_^
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Title: Dranged fanfic lover
Reviewed By: Debbietherex On: January 18, 2004 14:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is the bast fic I've ever read. It realy orignal I've never read any other like it. I realy enjoy reading this fic it's very entertaining. please up date soon.
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Title: SURPRISE
Reviewed By: ~J'dee On: January 17, 2004 10:08 EST
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Found the fic all by my lonesome and didn't need a url haha just sat back and read it all in one go after sending you the next pieces... *smiles* you know I want you to update more... I like reading the full thing. And more people should review it's worth it! ~J'dee
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Reviewed By: gofamofa20 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2004 01:19 EST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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I have to admit, after reading the prology of your story I was a little apprehensive to read the rest but now that I have I hope you will update soon. I don't think I've read a story like your's up-to-date. It's quite uplifting even thought the story deals with an difficult topic. But it doesn't stray away from the seriousiness of the situation. Please update soon. I'd like to know how this will to turn out, thought I have an feeling it's going to be more on the sad side. Which is cool I just want to find out. Any ways see ya :)
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Reviewed By: Exil On: January 14, 2004 19:50 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really am enjoying this so far, update soon.
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