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| "Portrait Without Sin" Reviews/Comments [ 60 ] | | Pages (4): [ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: ....wow.
Reviewed By: blackroseyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2008 03:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm... that really was different. A good different I mean. I think a dark fic is good to balance the fluffs. I'll admit that I cried when Dee said "have a nice life". Great job.
| Reviewed By: HarvUGirl On: March 23, 2005 03:36 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such an awesome fic! I hope you decide to post the epilogue someday... it would be sad to never complete such a great fic.
| Reviewed By: CountessRachel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2004 18:13 CST
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I am defintely impressed by your story. I've been reading it since this summer and I've been hooked like a catfish craving canned worms. *am from the south.* You're superb at angst, suspense, and the fine art of lemon writing. This story gets an A plus in my book, with a Golden Star sticker to boot. Don't stop writing, please. CountessRachel
| Reviewed By: TejinaShinsen [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2004 11:43 CST
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| Title: DAMN!
Reviewed By: TejinaShinsen [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2004 11:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
DAMN! I just finished reading the first few chapters and you got me hooked. Thanks Wildefire for mentioning this little gem. I'm gonna have to finish this.
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: slatequiksilver On: December 08, 2004 04:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh Wow. This entire story was just, wow. Half of it gave me worry lines on my forhead and the other half it just felt like you yanked out my heart. It was very achingly beautiful, the entire thing. Everyone seemed very in character, and don't even get me started with the intensity of the making up scenes. You should be very proud of yourself and your ability to write. I tip my hat to you.
| Reviewed By: Yoru Neko On: November 26, 2004 19:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Best I've ever read because of how well you detailed the settings and characters and what was happening I really like this story and can't wait for your next chapter update. Loved it and I hope it continues.
| Reviewed By: Helcat805 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2004 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope there wil be a chapter 16.
| Title: oh yeah, I remembered
Reviewed By: Irish [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 21:17 CDT
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Read my other review first, but I remembered what I forgot. You said at the end of one chapter that you didn't know much of anything about the Catholic faith. I know that a lot of people just write fan fiction for fun and don't take things very seriouosly, but take the time to know what you are writing about. Dee's faith has to be a major part of his life, whether he is a believer or not, he was raised in a Catholic orphange, went to a catholic school (He had to of, it was a catholic orphanage) and probbably went to more then one mass a week. Knowing about what it means to be catholic will help you understand the character. I can't stress enough how important it is to know what you presume to write about. If its not first hand, look into it at least a little bit. Mass is what the Catholic faith calls their services. Vespers is an evening prayer services that is mostly song. In a very active church, you could see three or four services a day, depending on how big the parish (body of the church) is. There are nuns and assumably monks who live in the orphanage and rectory (the place where the holy people live) and so they probably have a morning mass or chapel and an evening vespers, at least. Anyway, thats just my feelings on the issue, but I am someone who plans to eventually actually be published, and take my work pretty seriously, take my advice for what its worth to you. Good, bad or ugly.
| Title: Oh yeah, I remembered
Reviewed By: Irish [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 21:17 CDT
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Read my other review first, but I remembered what I forgot. You said at the end of one chapter that you didn't know much of anything about the Catholic faith. I know that a lot of people just write fan fiction for fun and don't take things very seriouosly, but take the time to know what you are writing about. Dee's faith has to be a major part of his life, whether he is a believer or not, he was raised in a Catholic orphange, went to a catholic school (He had to of, it was a catholic orphanage) and probbably went to more then one mass a week. Knowing about what it means to be catholic will help you understand the character. I can't stress enough how important it is to know what you presume to write about. If its not first hand, look into it at least a little bit. Mass is what the Catholic faith calls their services. Vespers is an evening prayer services that is mostly song. In a very active church, you could see three or four services a day, depending on how big the parish (body of the church) is. There are nuns and assumably monks who live in the orphanage and rectory (the place where the holy people live) and so they probably have a morning mass or chapel and an evening vespers, at least. Anyway, thats just my feelings on the issue, but I am someone who plans to eventually actually be published, and take my work pretty seriously, take my advice for what its worth to you. Good, bad or ugly.
| Title: Bate and Switch
Reviewed By: Irish [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 21:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was thrilled to see a fic that wasn't the same crap thats all over the place. This is much diffrent. I was rather disappointed to see it turn out to be Dee's fault in the end, but that was strictly personal prefferance. Remember, exclimation marks are to be used very very sparingly, lots of them makes them lose their effect. So maybe go easier on the !. Take some time to work on the mechanics of writing. Ideally, you shouldn't have to explain what italics, bolding, etc. means. There are rules for using these conventions, if people are too dumb to figure that out once you have used the rules, then they are idiots. Thank you for keeping the crying believiable within the lines of the characters. No one is ever a 100% IC, but you knew when to have them cry, and when not to. I know I had one more thing to say but I can't remember what it is for the life of me. Over all, good job. Thanks for doing somehting diffrent. Don't appoligize for it. You shouldn't have to. Be sure to take time to develope a voice for yourself, and for each of the characters. This takes time, and everyone can always improve on it. Anyway, congradulations on writin a fic decent enough for me to read. There are fewer and fewer these days.
| Reviewed By: Neiunsan [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2004 08:55 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry haven't been here in a while. Summer, you know... vacation and work and all. I just read the updated portion of your story and wanted to tell you again what a fantastic writer you are. It was a wonderful release after coming back home and getting to read the new chapter. Taki couldn't understand why I have to jump right on the computer like I do, but I think he finally knows why now. **grinning** Check you out later!
| Title: Perfect touch
Reviewed By: Neinusan (too lazy to log in) On: August 05, 2004 01:00 CDT
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Hello to my favorite author! This latest chapter of angst was a perfect touch! You're still drawing out the excitement between the two! I love it. And now that Ryo's made his decision, I do hope that they have some making up time as well... you did mention lemon and I'm looking forward to seeing how you are going to write it... until then...!!!
| Title: Great
Reviewed By: wakinyan (wakinyan_koa@yahoo.com) On: August 04, 2004 12:54 CDT
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What can I say but great job. Wasn't expecting the separation there, but it gave the story another good kick. Really like the part of Dee telling Ryo to really take a good look at what he (Dee himself) did. You write your stories really, really well that you suck your readers right into the story!
| Title: Nice touch...
Reviewed By: tertain On: August 04, 2004 12:51 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*sniffing* that was an intense chapter with each in their own thoughts. Nice touch of angst there instead of just jumping into the we're back together scene. Will be looking forward for your next update!!
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