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Reviewed By: sirencirce(not letting me login) [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2004 22:54 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have outdone yourself this time. I'm so happy that Ryo isn't really a low-down, cheating, good for nothing...I'll stop there. Anyway, I enjoyed the chapter. It had the right amount of angst, but a little flame of hope. Torture us all you want. I enjoy your writing style and the emotion you put in your writing. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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Title: I loved it
Reviewed By: Neinusan - I can't get logged in [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2004 22:43 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry for some reason it doesn't seem like I can log in AND make a review. I AM upset that somehow I missed putting a review for the last chapter! Chapter 9 was really heartfelt. I loved that you had Dee sitting outside. His heart wanting to be with Ryo, yet still too hurt to go to him. Good questioning of himself though. Sometimes people jump (back) into something because they want that, and then it leads to more fighting because one or the other can't 'forgive' the wrong. You make Ryo's tears so heartfelt. Bikky's great in this story too. He's more than the brash little kid being snotty with Dee. You give him a chance to show his side concerning Ryo more. As for Chapter 10, there was a lot there! I loved Dee's reaction to everything. Hahaha... a portrait as to why he was naked! Portrait Without Sin! As if it's all so clear now! I bet Dee is having a huge uh-oh moment! I can't wait until you post more to find out how this is all going to come out.
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Reviewed By: CountessRachel On: July 16, 2004 16:26 CDT
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I'm really enjoying the story so far. This is definitely original, I've yet to really find a plot similarly structured to this story at all. Which makes it all the more interesting. Please keep writing! I look forward to reading more.
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Reviewed By: Alaskan Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 22:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THIS!!!! I really can't wait to see the end of this fic so please hurry up!!!
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Reviewed By: Icewind [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2004 02:51 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I haven't read this good a fic in the FAKE fandom in a long time. Please keep going! This story is both bold and engaging, I'm looking forward to reading more!
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Title: must finish
Reviewed By: aikyo On: July 09, 2004 00:57 CDT
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you have to post more and soon this is a great story
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Reviewed By: tertai On: July 07, 2004 20:25 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was so sad as the following chapter to the last one. You didn't reveal whether or not Dee had done anything with that new partner of his. So did he? And as much as this story seems to be about Dee being betrayed and his hurt, Ryo is the one that wins my heart. I just want to hold him and tell him everything will be alright. Ummm.... I hope. I love your Bikky parts too. Well, I'll be waiting to read your next update. I wonder how tomorrow is going to unfold.
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Title: Tissues, more tissues
Reviewed By: greenclover On: July 07, 2004 20:18 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, more tissues. This was so sad. Just thinking about Ryo sitting there waiting like that, and then they just missed each other! Well, Ryo saw him but just didn't know it. But this had a lot of tears flowing. And Bikky,... I love how you've got him 'feeling' in your story. Great job!
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Reviewed By: sirencirce [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 19:36 CDT
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I'm sorry I didn't get to review the last chapter...I didn't read it until today. Let me tell ya, reading two chapters back to back just brings me to tears. I love this...is that wrong? I'm enjoying Dee's pain in a round about way. I'm sorry DEE!! Anyway, keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Devil666sc [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 21:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Font ColorI just loved the story so much. i've been wanting to read it for a while but nothing has drawn me to it until i read the summary outloud to my friend then it was like... Wow that sounds really good. I loved it and you have to post soon.
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Reviewed By: jaya18 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2004 02:17 CDT
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I found the first two parts slow, and only read past them because of the original plot. I'm glad I did since the sory has become much more intresting, and I have found my self on the edge of my set wanting to know what will hapen to Dee abd Ryo.
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Title: I like the pain....
Reviewed By: wakinyan (wakinyan_koa@yahoo.com) On: July 03, 2004 16:34 CDT
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I turn my back after reading the last chapter and you post another one! And here I just couldn't wait! Great job! Loved it! Poor Ryo, he's getting so trampled down. Dee might as well have punched him and got it over with, but this new torture you've come up with.... well, you're right... life is like that. I'll be watching for your next post. Please hurry soon... Yeah, I guess I like the pain...!
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Title: Work a story so well
Reviewed By: Neinusan (Not Signed In) On: July 03, 2004 16:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't believe that you work a story so well. It's incredible. The deep hurt the Dee is experiencing really comes through in his hard imagine of character, yet it leaves for Ryo to be the one that sorrow goes out to. Actually a whole lot for him since Dee has announced - or intends - a night out. Wonderful job with the exchange of 'father and son' moment. Can't wait until the next update!
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Title: Oh, NO!
Reviewed By: tertai On: July 03, 2004 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
He's not....?! On the day of their anniversary? What a way to really hit Ryo hard, when the poor guy is already pretty down. Dee throws no light punches himself -- only a little more legal I guess since Ryo got in trouble for actually hitting him. Loved the way you have Bikky interacting with Ryo. It's his character to want to beat up on Dee, and to care for Ryo, but you put a nice touch on it with him when he consoles Ryo. But... it was way too short! That was just seemed enough for a nibble... (so I'm a dog begging)... Please have more in the NEAR future.
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Title: Good One for Ryo!
Reviewed By: wakinyan (wakinyan_koa@yahoo.com) On: July 03, 2004 12:47 CDT
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OMG! Despite how harsh, callous or invoking Dee seems to be, I think you're doing a wonderful job in covering the hurt he feels inside. Good one for Ryo, though, even if it was only a bitch-slap! And finding out about the note was just too much! Great job in developing the story! Can't wait to read what you do next with the new partner coming in!
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