| "Portrait Without Sin" Reviews/Comments [ 60 ] |
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Reviewed By: KyleBrofloskiRules3 On: August 04, 2004 10:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm in tears of joy! There back together! I couldnt be any happier! ^.^ So awesome!
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Reviewed By: Shuu On: July 30, 2004 20:19 CDT
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Wow. I really enjoyed this fic when I came across it today. Very well written-their feelings... everything. I kinda felt like the 'third person'. Just sitting there and watching it all unfold. Very well written indeed!
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Reviewed By: KyleBrofloski3 On: July 30, 2004 14:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is such a good story! you had me crying at one point. Poor Ryo. I can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Neinusan (neinusan@yahoo.com) On: July 29, 2004 23:35 CDT
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I wind up with such a hard time logging in and getting back to the fanfiction, I just figured why put up the hassle with it! I just want to tell you this last chapter was really good. I loved all of it. You roll from one part into the next very smoothly... I just enjoy reading this story so much! Until next time....
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Reviewed By: tertai On: July 29, 2004 23:31 CDT
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I think this was a wonderful chapter. Loved your Bikky character. "It'll cost you another twenty." THAT was so in character and funny! Hope to see another update soon... this is killing me!
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Title: I am so Enticed
Reviewed By: Oblivious gal On: July 29, 2004 10:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh this is incredibly sexier than two hot guys kissing and kneading each other! I love the short story plot, it's embittered me enough to keep wanting more. So, please.... finish this up. Love to see them cuddling each other again.
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Title: Terrific
Reviewed By: wakinyan (wakinyan_koa@yahoo.com) On: July 27, 2004 11:22 CDT
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This has been a terrific story. I think your Bikky character is great as well. Glad you have the two of them sort of together... at least they're talking. Can't wait until you update!
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Reviewed By: sirencirce (to lazy to logon) On: July 26, 2004 23:21 CDT
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Loving it!!!!! This is so wonderful. The suspense, keeps you on the seat of your pants ne? It's evil, it's touching, it's WONDERFUL!!! I can't wait to see what happens.
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Title: Totally adored it!
Reviewed By: greenclover On: July 21, 2004 10:40 CDT
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I LOVED what you did with Bikky. A bit of 'beat up Dee' (with a reasonable purpose), and emotional conflict. And totally adored him taking (kind of reluctantly) siding with Dee even. Poor Ryo! Could just see his face when Bikky walked passed them! *huggles* I loved Dee worried soft side slash taking the upper hand role. Ryo must have really been a mess when he showed up. Great job! I am looking forward to more soon! BIG, BIG 10!
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: OrionSun On: July 21, 2004 10:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
After reading your other story, I checked out this one. And damn, I have to say your a fantastic writer! I didn't jump around like i do sometimes with stories. Each chapter had me reading the next one until i got all the way through. I don't know if I could have stood it waiting for updates! You can really wrench out emotions in the person reading it. But now I'm caught up and deman that you write more soon!! Have to see if Ryo is going to forgive him or not!
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Reviewed By: Neinusan (not logged in) On: July 20, 2004 13:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I simply loved this chapter! And I think you did Bikky very well! Will Ryo hurting like he has been, I could see his young ward being really pissed off to attack Dee as such. It was very touching that even though he was upset he also expressed his feelings enough to admit he had trusted him. It was a great change where you had him 'side' with Dee and not Ryo for once. The rest of the story was great as well. I want to read more soon!
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Title: YES!
Reviewed By: greenclover On: July 17, 2004 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YES! Ryo wasn't unfaithful all along!! I thought I was catching hints here and there, but you wouldn't give more. You've done a great job writing both (all) characters with such depth and feeling that it's almost hard to discern that they're fictional. You've made me feel so much (agony, for one) with it. I am extremely looking forward to more of your story. Can't wait to see what Dee's going to do next now that he knows the truth! And you mentioned Bikky in one of your responses... That's another one that I like to see how you're going to write up!
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Reviewed By: Icewind [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2004 16:14 CDT
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Nice chapter. To honest in answering your question, I wouldn't say I guessed what really happened between Ryo and Armon... but was actually hoping something like this had occured... that there was some sort of explaination for Ryo's actions even as it became more unlikely with each chapter. It was a nice relief to discover Ryo hadn't openly betrayed Dee. Love how you captured the characters in this fic; the emotions involved just made them seem more human. At this point I'm really feeling for Ryo and I'm curious to see how things will turn out. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: tertai On: July 17, 2004 06:00 CDT
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What can I say? I love this story! HA! Ryo's innocent! Take that Dee! Sorry. Anyway, great job, but poor Ryo! He really deserves those big hugs even more. I thought it was good too that he wasn't the one to convince Dee in this story. Good for Armon! Can't wait to see what Dee's gonna do now that he knows he was the one wrong.
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Title: Wonderfully terrific
Reviewed By: wakinyan (wakinyan_koa@yahoo.com On: July 16, 2004 23:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I simply think that you have wonderfully, terrific job with this story!! I loved how you brought this Armon guy into the story like this. I really don't see many people taking that kind of stand for someone else like that -- meaning this world really sucks most times. Not many have the honor or the care to do that and I just love it that your story is this way. I'm glad that Dee finds out on his own rather than Ryo telling him. This chapter was like slapping Dee upside the head and saying 'ya dumb idiot! that's what you get!' He should have realized Ryo wouldn't do something like that! I should have realized that, but you made people see a different side of things which took innocense to guilty. This is a great job you've done! I'm looking forward to your next chapter to answer a few questions. Until then....
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