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Title: Just tell the story
Reviewed By: olesialove [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2007 20:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
Just so you know: Author notes in every other sentence? Really annoying. I quit the story after three paragraphs out of annoyance. It's not a film with director's commentary - tell the story, and if you have to interject other information, do it at the beginning or end and not just throughout the whole thing.
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Title: : )
Reviewed By: Yugis-Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2005 19:00 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yugi's so cute! Poor Ryou, I think I would rather die if I was in Ryou's place......
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Reviewed By: ryuu no ketsurui On: April 02, 2005 02:30 CST
Comment/Review:
Wowie! ^^ That was some pretty good writing there! I like the pairings so far. And the way Yugi and Yami got together was sweet. ^^ Bakura abusing Ryou makes me sad, though. ;-; I feel bad for Ryou because Bakura is so mean to him when he has feelings for Bakura. The Anzu bashing bothers me a bit, but I don't mind it too much. As long as I get a warning in advance it's all good. ^^ I understand that it helps to vent negative feelings on a person/character that one does not like. Keep updating! I'll do my best to comment on your writing, so please continue this story!
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Reviewed By: Draza(too lazy to log in) On: March 13, 2005 19:31 CST
Comment/Review:
*screams* my eyes!! they burn!! too much love!! aaaaahhhhhhhhh!!!!!
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Reviewed By: AnzuBasher! On: March 10, 2005 15:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! YAMI TOLD YUGI!!! Hope they start a relationship now!^^ Keep it up, ja ne!
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Title: *Bounces around like an insane chipmunk*
Reviewed By: HappyDragon(logged out) On: March 10, 2005 01:45 CST
Comment/Review:
Yay! You're alive! Oooooohh. . .new chappie. *Reads* Aaaaaaawwwwww, Y/Y kawaii-ness. Loved this, but it looks like you had formatting issues. And you seem a little bipolar in defining Ryou and Bakura's "relationship". One minute it's totally abusive with Ryou having no way out, the next it's mostly abusive with Ryou not taking a way out. But maybe I'm misreading that. Still, glad that Y&Y are together, and that Jou and Kaiba will *attempt* to tell them tomorrow. I'm now just worried about 2 things: 1) What's Anzu going to do to get back at Yami? 2) What are Y&Y going to do "tonight"? *Insert vote for naughty NC-17 things here.* What can I say, I know what I like, and I like lemons. ^____^ Until next you update: Good Luck!
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Reviewed By: LPGurl [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 22:41 CST
Comment/Review:
Ahh! I love it although I wonder what you have planned for Ryou and Bakura. I like your writting style except for a few mispelled words but everything else is just great. I was hoping maybe you could read my stories and I am also a freshman so I pretty much hope you'll like my stories.
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Reviewed By: Crystal56 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 06:57 CST
Comment/Review:
adorable!
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Title: Want more
Reviewed By: AnimePrincess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2005 06:26 CST
Comment/Review:
YAY! Yami finally told Yugi he loved him. I'm so happy for them. Please update soon I want to see more. Also keep up the great work and hope to see you online. ~Yami and Yugi forever~ YAY! ^^
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Reviewed By: yuguiyugi On: January 31, 2005 17:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good i hope you finish it soon damn it. Bring htem togethier. already
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Title: y.a.17
Reviewed By: yamialex17 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2004 13:24 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
plz you have to write some more soon i can't wait till yami tells yugi how he fells about him and as fro jeoy and seto dude you have to do a lemon for those too very soon bye for now yamialex17
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Reviewed By: MrSbAnD [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2004 22:37 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AHHHH OMG poor poor Ryou.......of course im for Bakura FINDING his heart....and then they have hot hot sex.......And what is going on between Seto and Jou???i really wanna know about those two...they're sooooOoo cute :cuddles Seto plushie: And of COURSE Yami should tell Yugi.... but your the author, and you decide..... so PLZ update before i die of anticipation!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Ryu Tiamat [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2004 08:52 CST
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They should admit how they feel and then fuck like bunnies, of course! YamixYugi lemon all the way! Poor little Ryou! I hope eventually Bakura will stop the abuse. Anyway, keep writing! I like this story, sad as it is with all the hikari abuse.
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Title: Yay update!
Reviewed By: HappyDragon(logged out) On: November 28, 2004 03:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Go confessions! More Lemon [graphic sex scene] goodness, Y/Y style! Or Seto/Jou style, as it would be sort of nice to see how those two are doing. But hey, you're the writer here, what you want goes. Also, I liked the whole Yugi in the shower bit. Little innocent Yugi masturbating for the first time. XD Sounds like the perfect time for Yami to come in and ravage him, with his permission of course. As always, good luck, and more Y/Y and S/J-ness! [Note: I'm not ignoring what's happening with B/R, but I get the feeling you have that all planed out and under control.]
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Reviewed By: YEHUDIS On: November 24, 2004 19:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED IT WAS COOL BUT WOW YUGI GETS IN TO A LOT OF TROUBLE RIGHT NEAR THAT ALLEY WAY DOESNT HE BUT AT LEAST HE HAS SOMEONE WELL I HOPE YOU CONTINUE ITS REALL LOVE TO READ THIS I JUST GOT INTO YU-GI-OH FANICSO YEAH
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